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Vinnaithaandi Varuvaayaa
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I think the article has all the relevant information that a film article should have. I'd like to get further inputs on improving the article and going for a GAN.  Lynch 7  17:08, 21 February 2012 (UTC)

Thanks,  Lynch 7  17:08, 21 February 2012 (UTC)


 * Redtigerxyz's Comments
 * In Cast, write 1 line summaries of characters as in Mr. and Mrs. Iyer
 * "Development" is more about "Promotion"/release of the film. Development should be similar to Rang_De_Basanti
 * File:Vtvfilm.jpg: questionable fair use. I don't it meets Non-free content criteria "Contextual significance": "Non-free content is used only if its presence would significantly increase readers' understanding of the topic, and its omission would be detrimental to that understanding."
 * "The shooting started on February 14, 2009"; "London on 19 December 2009": Dates need references
 * Vinnaithaandi Varuvaayaa (soundtrack) needs to be summarized in the article. -- Redtigerxyz Talk 17:38, 26 February 2012 (UTC)
 * ✅ -- ♪Karthik♫ ♪Nadar♫ 16:54, 17 March 2012 (UTC)


 * Thank you for the comments! Something unexpected came up, and I don't think I will be able to attend to this for some weeks. I will surely work on it in some time (anyone else is welcome to take this up in the meanwhile!). Thanks again!  Lynch 7  13:14, 27 February 2012 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: Thanks for your work on this article. Here are a few more suggestions for future improvement.


 * The prose in the existing article is generally clear. However, the lead includes several "with plus -ing" constructions that are awkward but fixable. Here is an example: "The film began its initial schedule in February 2009, following a mystery launch with a series of publicity posters being launched with no details of the cast or crew." This would be better recast as something like this: "Launched by a wave of publicity posters with no details about the cast and crew, the film began its initial run in February 2009." I'd suggest looking for "with plus -ing" sentences throughout the article and modifying them for concision and clarity.
 * Link Tamil on first use in the lead.
 * ✅ -- ♪Karthik♫ ♪Nadar♫ 16:54, 17 March 2012 (UTC)


 * Spell out as well as abbreviate BAFTA on first use.
 * Link Goa on first use in the "Plot" section.
 * Try to keep images entirely within the sections they illustrate. File:Vtvfilm.jpg in the existing article overlaps a section boundary and displaces the edit buttons. I agree with Redtigerxyz that this particular image does not meet the non-free content requirements, so deleting it would solve two problems.
 * Readers from outside of India may not have any idea of how much "Rs.64,66,062" is or what a crore is. These should be explained or also given in dollars or euros, perhaps, or linked to explanations.
 * Rather than giving each critic a separate paragraph in the "Critical response" section, I'd merge some of the shorter ones to make a less choppy section.
 * Look through the article for overlinking. It's generally not necessary to link unusual terms more than once in the lead and perhaps once again in the main text. Its seems pointless, for example, to link Vijay Prakash four times in the "Awards and nominations" section.
 * Use consistent date formatting in the citations.
 * Italicize the names of newspapers such as The Times of India.
 * ✅ -- ♪Karthik♫ ♪Nadar♫ 16:54, 17 March 2012 (UTC)


 * Use normal Wikipedia style rather than all caps for the title in citation 25.

I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider commenting on any other article at WP:PR. I don't usually watch the PR archives or make follow-up comments. If my suggestions are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth (talk) 19:12, 2 March 2012 (UTC)
 * Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)