Wikipedia:Peer review/Visual impairment in art/archive1

Visual impairment in art


I've listed this article for peer review because I have created the article and wish to greatly expand and improve the standard of the article.

Thanks, DepressedCloud (talk) 14:04, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments by Firefangledfeathers
Thank you for creating this article! As a general disclaimer, I am not a subject matter expert or an experienced peer reviewer.


 * Sources
 * Too much reliance on Ref #1 (larsdatter.com) which is a self-published blog.
 * Whole books are cited for specific claims; page numbers needed


 * Lead
 * This could probably use a re-write. The first sentence in particular is very POV and makes a bold, unsourced (but probably true) claim.
 * Lead includes sentence fragments


 * Representation in Art
 * Many words unnecessarily capitalized
 * Titles of works should be italicized
 * Multiple unsourced claims. Examples:
 * Representation of Blind people in Medieval Art often is displayed through the use of including dogs on a leash.
 * Diego Velázquez [...] portraying her with her eyes closed.
 * This was common amongst images of the blind in the 18th Century.
 * Whole section should be based more off of conclusions made in reliable, secondary sources. A list of examples can be helpful, but I don't think this section is best represented by the current list format.

I'm hoping to have more feedback soon. Good luck! Firefangledfeathers (talk) 06:31, 6 April 2021 (UTC)