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Voyage of the Damned (Doctor Who)

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 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for August 2008.
 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for August 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I want a final review of the prose to ensure it is up to featured article standard before I list it on FAC. Instructions on how to improve the prose are welcome.

Thanks, Sceptre (talk) 21:30, 22 August 2008 (UTC)

Giggy
That's from the first half. I'll try and get to the second at some point. —Giggy 08:33, 25 August 2008 (UTC)
 * There have been FAC issues raised about the infobox image in these articles, right? I forget what they were... just make sure you meet whatever criteria it is you need to meet.
 * I think The Doctor should be wlinked in the lead if Astrid Perth is.
 * And then delink Perth and Kylie next paragraph.
 * "when the TARDIS collided with the Titanic" - Titanic collided with the TARDIS, didn't it? I don't think the TARDIS moves.
 * "He decides to stow away," --> "The Doctor decides..." (And after doing this, check the prose in the next few sentences for variety of The Doctor/he)
 * "Minogue during the Showgirl tour, which included Cyberman-inspired animatronics" - what's that got to do with this article?
 * Music tours shouldn't have their names in italics.