Wikipedia:Peer review/WALL-E/archive1

WALL-E

 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for February 2009.
 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for February 2009.

This peer review discussion has been closed. WALL-E is an article I've been aiming FA for since I saw the movie and I've been sandboxing and struggling with it for some time but I recently finished off Themes, and I'm looking for further advice, like whether it needs a Cast section, any more suitable images, MOS or copyediting issues, etc etc.

Thanks, Alientraveller (talk) 23:32, 19 February 2009 (UTC)

Great job, and best of luck with the FA process! -Another Believer (talk) 01:39, 20 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Comments: What a wonderful article! I enjoyed this film, as well as the article. Well done. A few suggestions:
 * Intro - consider linking outer space and polluted
 * Perhaps I am just link-happy, but I would also link the following (other reviewers may feel differently): body language, Best Animated Film, Golden Globe Award
 * Plot - link consumerism, compactor, obese, Helly, Dolly (also italicize this, since it is a film title)
 * I would make sure Earth is capitalized each time, just for consistency; I found at least one instance in which it was not (first paragraph in plot)
 * Last paragraph of plot - I believe the quotation mark on "kiss" should be within the comma
 * Why is Axiom italicized in the Cast section, but not elsewhere? I'm not sure the italics are needed.
 * I went ahead and added a missing publisher name in one of the references. I think I spotted a few additional missing publishers/works, so you may want to double check the sources.
 * All done, but please note someone had reverted to an earlier, overlong and poorly written version of Plot. Alientraveller (talk) 13:31, 20 February 2009 (UTC)

Saw this movie tonight and loved it. I came to the Wikipedia article to look up a couple things when I got home and was delighted to see a PR had recently opened. I need to finish another PR (was interrupted mid-edit) but will definitely do Wall-E before the weekend's over! If you link to the 'good' version of the synopsis I can compare it with whatever's there when I get a chance to review this weekend, and work from there. Natural Cut (talk) 08:07, 21 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments from
 * You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, so I looked at the sourcing and referencing with that in mind. I reviewed the article's sources as I would at FAC.
 * Current ref 6 is lacking a publisher
 * What makes the following reliable sources?
 * http://www.firstshowing.net/
 * http://www.comingsoon.net/
 * http://www.animationartconservation.com/wall_e_design_with_a_purpose.html
 * http://www.moviesonline.ca/
 * http://www.slashfilm.com/
 * Current ref 64 is lacking a publisher
 * Current ref 96 is lacking a publisher
 * Hope this helps. Please note that I don't watchlist Peer Reviews I've done. If you have a question about something, you'll have to drop a note on my talk page to get my attention. (My watchlist is already WAY too long, adding peer reviews would make things much worse.) 01:42, 1 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Added missing publishers. Movies Online, ComingSoon.net, FirstShowing.net, /Film are all notable interviewers and are all listed on the Blog Roll if you scroll down http://moviesblog.mtv.com/ . I'm not familiar with AAC, but it is a transcripted conversation and its author is Ron Barbagallo, who manages various animation archives including Roy E. Disney, Warners and Hanna-Barbera. Alientraveller (talk) 15:48, 1 March 2009 (UTC)

Minor comment Plot section looks to be a bit long. Can it be trimmed at all. BUC (talk) 15:46, 2 March 2009 (UTC)

comment WhatisFeelings? (talk) 01:14, 11 March 2009 (UTC)
 * right now, the plot section is ~800words - you should cut it to <600
 * "covered Earth far in the future" - make far in the future specific
 * "changes the destiny of both his kind and humanity." - destiny -> direction

In regard to my article on Wall-E, (and I'm not sure why you Wikipedia types don't think to do this) -- you can email me directly through my web site to ask me any question you might have. There actually are instructions on my site regarding your use of my work -- and more than a little information outlining the articles. If you want to email me directly, it's ronbarba@aol.com. -- Ron Barbagallo