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Werner Heisenberg

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 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for August 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I think is really complete, it contains an amount of information reallt difficult to find in the web and in general, so I want to candidate it as a Featured Article.

Thanks, José Miotto (talk)


 * '''Comments by Sillyfolkboy:
 * Just a note - The lead seems very sparsely wikilinked - Max Born, Pascual Jordan, Nobel Prize in Physics, Adolf Hitler, SS and Uranium Club should all be linked for example. On the opposite end of the scale, some parts of the body are heavily linked - such as the Uranium Club section. I think this is a necessary evil however given the number of physicists, scientific terms and german words linked. Don't link Werner Heisenberg in the text as this causes unnecessary bolding. Cheers. Sillyfolkboy (talk) 19:37, 22 August 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here. Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 01:46, 23 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Per WP:LEAD the lead should not be more than four paragraphs long. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way
 * The article has a lot of very short (one or two sentence) paragraphs which break up the flow of the article. These should be combined with others or perhaps expanded. See WP:Proseline too
 * Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. cite web and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
 * Why the lists of Internal Reports? Especially when the titles are generally untranslated - this is the English Wikipedia. Perhaps these could be slit off as a list - see the FL List of scientific publications by Albert Einstein for a model.