Wikipedia:Peer review/William Gillette/archive2

William Gillette
April 2006 Peer review now archived at: Peer review/William Gillette/archive1

Two months have passed since the original peer review. After a few bursts of activity on the page, it has stabilized, but there is still some criticism over the general flow of text. Could some fresh pairs of eyes have a look, maybe suggest or do some copyediting? --JohnDBuell 00:56, 20 June 2006 (UTC)


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 * Per WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -  between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18&amp;nbsp;mm.


 * Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article.


 * Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at WP:GTL.


 * Please alphabetize the categories and interlanguage links.


 * Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
 * The Legacy section is weak, and a Reception/Criticism section would help to make it more comprehensive.
 * Double check for typos, for example manager.He was  and least resistence.
 * There are excessive commas: the puritan leader, who founded the town, In fact, his father, Francis, who (you already introduced the father), And, when , director and actor, by Gustave , pantomime segments, that were , etc.
 * Fix up redundancies. He was a popular actor in the history of the United States. is unnecessary and probably should be merged with the first sentence, along with a citation. Through his association with this play his association with is unnecessary, as you already stated that he wrote it; Through this play is enough. he broadly amassed fans all around the world - if he amassed fans all around the world, then broadly is obviously a redundant word.
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 * Thanks, Andy t 15:17, 20 June 2006 (UTC)
 * The article is in serious need of some serious library research to back up a lot of it. I won't deny that. I'll have a look at some of the other points when I get a chance! Thanks! --JohnDBuell 17:32, 20 June 2006 (UTC)