Wikipedia:Peer review/Windows NT 3.1/archive1

Windows NT 3.1
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because it's a translation of a German Wikipedia GA and I'd like to get it to that level over here as well. Any help to that would be greatly appreciated.

Thanks, -- Liliana-60 (talk) 15:02, 7 December 2012 (UTC)

JoshuSasori - very brief review: The English needs more work checking details I think. JoshuSasori (talk) 12:54, 28 December 2012 (UTC)
 * 1) I don't like the lead section much. It doesn't summarize the article's contents very well, focusing on some details and omitting the bulk of the contents.
 * 2) Some of the text is a bit freakish: On the other side, a new operating system called Unix was created a decade earlier - wow, is it a bad translation or something?
 * 3) Here: demonstrate the operating system on COMDEX 1990 - maybe demonstrate at?
 * 4) Bill Gates already dominated the market of desktop operating systems with MS-DOS and Windows and hoped to do the same in the networking market with Windows NT - why "Bill Gates" and not Microsoft?
 * 5) developed from anew -> developed anew.
 * 6) strictly spoken -> strictly speaking
 * 7) Most of the article depends on the Zachary reference. Is there another main reference?
 * 8) It would be nice to change to using a harvnb style reference template.
 * 9) The references would be neater in multicolumn format.