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World War I aces credited with more than 20 victories
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to put it up for FL soon (I'd like to get the whole series done). I've checked the FL criteria, and don't see any major issues, but I need fresh eyes to be sure.

Thanks, Trevor MacInnis contribs 00:09, 12 October 2009 (UTC)

A couple of things on a very quick glance; if time permits, I'll give it more of a "going over" another time. That's all for now. BencherliteTalk 00:34, 13 October 2009 (UTC)
 * Comments from Bencherlite
 * Featured lists don't start "This is a list of title in bold" anymore - see some examples from recently-promoted lists at WP:FLL. Note that you don't have to have anything in bold in the opening sentence - see MOS:LEAD and WP:BOLDTITLE (same document, different sections). I'd expand the lead - it ought to be much more than two sentences.
 * The names should sort by surname, not first name - use sortname. This is dull to do, I'm sorry...
 * Oh, and you list the OBE / CBE in the key, but I can't find it in the notes. Did I miss it?
 * I redid the intro, removed the bold and reworked it into three paragraphs.
 * I will work on the surnames bit, but it'll take time. Done converting to sortname.
 * The key is on a separate footer template that is used over multiple lists, which combine at List of World War I flying aces-All, the OBE/CBE are used on at least one of those lists, if not this one. - Trevor MacInnis contribs 16:53, 13 October 2009 (UTC)