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You Only Live Twice (film)
This peer review discussion has been closed. It's a Good Article.

Thanks, Ultra! 08:38, 26 March 2008 (UTC)

Enough from me. The Rambling Man (talk) 19:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Comments from
 * Why year in parentheses after the title?
 * Four paras in lead probably one too many for this length...
 * $111M - why M and which $?
 * British English please!
 * Image captions are all fragments so remove full stops.
 * Expand Cast section to tell us more about the characters.
 * Numbers below 10 are written out in full.
 * " The 45 meter (120′)" - use the convert template.
 * Merge paras in the Fliming section, a few too short paras for me.
 * "kamikaze device " - link kamikaze.


 * Comments from
 * Second paragraph of the lead is unnecessary as it is part of the plot sysnopsis
 * Third paragraph of lead has "and has been parodied greatly" which requires a word choice change, suggestion: "and has been greatly parodied" or "and has often been parodied" or "and has been the subject of numerous parodies."
 * Plot can be pruned as it tends to relate scene-by-scene which is excessive
 * Spelling derivation: "make-up" often written as "makeup"
 * Dates written in ISO format as well as m-d-Year, choose one, suggestion: use the popular format of m-d-y throughout since it was already established in the article first.
 * Minor variances in references; could use a bibliography listing as a number of citations are page only and the full bibliographical notation can be used.

...for now, Bzuk (talk) 17:48, 12 April 2008 (UTC).