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Your Sinclair
Myself and other editors have been steadily working on and improving this article for the past couple of years. I believe that it is now close to 'good article' status, although may need some more expansion and improvement. One thing that needs doing is for it to be split into several sub-sections. I welcome any comments. Stevefarrell 15:48, 29 August 2006 (UTC)


 * Having look at a few others in Category:Computer and video game magazines, this article seems better than most, but there is still a way to go before this becomes a good article. If you have not done so already, you may wish to review the good article criteria.
 * As you recognise, some sub-sections would be useful, though don't overdo it. The most important is to create a distinct lead.
 * The article does not cite its sources (which should preferably be done in the form of inline citations).
 * I am unsure of the encyclopedic value of the Where are they now section. If any of the individuals listed are notable enough to have their own articles, such information should go in their articles. Parts of the list could perhaps be included as prose in a section similar to that at the end of Byte (magazine).
 * In places the tone is a little informal e.g. "No such lawsuit ever came about of course; YS and Delta 4 had a good relationship". There are a couple of examples of weasel words, e.g. "It could be argued that YS had a language all of its own" Argued by whom?
 * Hope this helps. Oldelpaso 19:01, 30 August 2006 (UTC)


 * Most useful. Thank you. To take your points one by one:
 * I agree. I was thinking of following the example of the Amiga Power article which has several subsections dedicated to different (popular) sections of that magazine.
 * Most of the citations come from three of the websites linked in the 'external links' section - YS2/100 (written by a former editor), YS: A Celebration, and The Your Sinclair Rock 'n' Roll Years, and printed material such as Issue 94. I'll get on to finding out just where in each of these sites the information is.
 * Your Sinclair magazine, in the UK and Europe, had something akin to a cult following which stretched beyond its subject matter. As a result, people who used to read the magazine are often curious what the staff writers went on to do after leaving (much the same as fans of a TV series might be interested in what the actors did next). I feel that the section is somewhat useful, but it could be shortened, particularly after subsections have been added.
 * Yes, the weasel words and informality will have to go. It's much more formal than it was when it started. I'll work on that tonight and tomorrow. There was a unique writing style to the magazine, at least for its time, so there needs to be something about that.
 * One good thing about YS is that the majority of articles and material have been released into the public domain. --Stevefarrell 21:47, 30 August 2006 (UTC)