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Zhuge Liang
I've listed this article for peer review because I want to know what this article needs in order to become GA, positive and negative things about the article and if there are enough citations and references. Thanks,  Armando.O talk· Ev· 3K 21:37, 20 December 2007 (UTC)


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Review by Twelsht
I am not an expert on Chinese history, but this article seems comprehensive and well presented. Here are some things that I would work on:


 * Avoid cumbersome phrases and constructions to enhance readability. I lightly edited the lead to illustrate this point. You might consider referring this article to an experienced copy editor; a second pair of eyes is often helpful.


 * This article includes plenty of useful information, but there is a clear need for more citations. This is especially true in cases where the article describes the supposed motivations of Zhuge Liang's detractors. These kinds of observations, in the absence of citations, may strike readers as speculation on the part of contributors. Speculation qualifies as original research (OR).


 * Be aware of style issues. I inserted endashes where they seemed appropriate. It is also my understanding that users should avoid highlighting partial dates, e.g., 916. I delinked these dates, but I recommend that you consult the Manual of Style for additional information.

Again, this article is filled with interesting information. If you want to bring it up to GA standards, you might start by streamlining the prose and including more citations. I hope this helps! Best, -- twelsht (talk) 19:03, 25 December 2007 (UTC)