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Zits (comic strip)
My ultimate goal for this article is to eventually get it to FA status. For now, I'm concerned with just getting it to GA status. I'm open to any suggestions. I would just like to note, however, that there are not many websites dedicated to this subject and, short of interviewing the creators, I'm limited in my sources of information. In fact, most citations come directly from the strip itself. I appreciate any help. Thank you. -- VegitaU 19:07, 22 July 2007 (UTC)

The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question. You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, DrKiernan 14:29, 26 July 2007 (UTC)
 * Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.[?]
 * Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article.[?]
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 * There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view.
 * is considered
 * might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please strike this comment).[?]
 * The script has spotted the following contractions: doesn't, doesn't, wasn't, Don't, Don't, if these are outside of quotations, they should be expanded.
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 * Nominator response: The lead is what I'm most concerned about here. I'm not exactly sure how to expand it and still keep it within the guideline standards. The article is not overly long or complex, so the lead has not become overly long or complex. As for weasel words, I've reviewed the article, but I haven't found anything unreferenced that could be considered a weasel word; though I'm leaving the recommendation open if another editor does find something. Contractions have been taken care of. As for references, I have typically posted footnotes at the end of the sentence, but I have also cited several within a phrase to identify the exact article I want to reference. -- VegitaU 21:59, 27 July 2007 (UTC)


 * I would recommend considering a slightly different approach in the intro, because while ... say 80% of the strip is about Jeremy as you cite in the 2nd lead, I would also consider that there's a good deal of "generation gap" humor that it's not so much Jeremy in the troubled position, but instead it's his parents that don't understand their son (eg, the one with Walt trying to figure out how to respond to "respect knuckles" with Jeremy after changing the lightbulb).
 * Other notes beyond what the automated script gave:
 * I think it may be better just to use the book references directly instead of Amazon links (just don't include page numbers) in the "Related books". Also, I think you can rename this section to just "Books" (see FoxTrot) and possibly make this into a table to include type and publication dates.  (Maybe include just ONE image of a book to support this section, but do not use an image for each book, as that's discouraged due to fair use issues).
 * Speaking of fair use, can you find a single image of the main cast instead of separate pictures? I don't think you're bordering on any significant problem here, but having several non-free images is becoming more discouraged if a single image is possible. I don't know if this can be done, however, I don't ever recall of such.
 * Consider replacing the infobox image with one that includes the Sunday/book cover logo; as this image in the infobox is for quick identification, I'm not sure if the current picture is best.
 * You may want to include a "style" section, if you can find such references to support it. eg comment on lack of aging, that there's continuity, etc.  Again, this may be hard to produce viable information for.
 * Consider the article as a whole and what would happen if the character lists were moved to another article -- I'm not suggesting that you do this move, but right now as the page stands, if this was done, there's not a lot to talk about. That's why I think a "style" section would do wonders.  Best I can tell, no other comic strips have achieved a GA status, but looking through ones such as FoxTrot, Pearls Before Swine, Garfield, and Get Fuzzy basically suggest that this would be a useful addition.
 * --Masem 21:22, 30 July 2007 (UTC)