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Zombie (fictional)
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I have been consolidating its information for the last several weeks. I feel that a great deal of good work has been done by previous editors, and the information is of good quality and well-sourced. It was, however, poorly organised; spread over three different articles with much overlap and little clarity as to jurisdiction. Now that it has been brought together, I was wondering if it might eventually be promoted to a higher class, possibly GA.

Thanks,  Serendi pod ous  22:14, 2 March 2012 (UTC)

Comments The Rambling Man (talk) 12:02, 8 March 2012 (UTC)
 * Lead's too short per WP:LEAD for an article of this length.
 * Avoid bold links in the lead per the MOS.
 * "Half Life" is a dab.
 * We shouldn't have inline external links like ""The Death of Halpin Frayser".
 * Our article just calls it the Epic of Gilgamesh, not The Epic of Gilgamesh.
 * "works couldn't be properly " avoid contractions.
 * Avoid overlinking, e.g. George A. Romero is linked twice in quick succession, as is his Night of the Living Dead...
 * Avoid linking common words like "disease".
 * Para starting "The 1954 publication ..." is entirely unreferenced.
 * Zombi II is (according to our article) actually Zombi 2.
 * "countries.)[23]" not sure that's where the full stop should go.
 * "RotLD " put this in parentheses after the expanded version if you're going to use (a non-standard!) abbreviation.
 * the Evil Dead series is actually The Evil Dead series.
 * Other paragraphs without reference, I would suggest for a GA that any sentence/para making a claim needs to be verifiable.
 * "the "zombie apocalypse", " no need for this text to be in bold.
 * "it wouldn't be " again, avoid contractions.
 * New York Times should be The New York Times.
 * War of the Worlds should be The War of the Worlds.
 * Similarly for the other literary titles.
 * In comics and In television sections are entirely unreferenced (apart from YuYu Hakusho which for some reason has three references).
 * "game - was an " should be an en-dash.
 * Fix the [when] tag".
 * In music section is borderline a list of trivia.
 * A zombie walk in Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania. no period required.
 * Avoid bare URLs in the refs.
 * "2011-10=02." should be a - not a =.
 * Online refs should have publisher, author, access date, publication date information where appropriate.
 * Don't mix date formats in the refs.
 * Check titles of refs for comlpliance with WP:DASH.
 * Be consistent with author names, either first last or last, first.