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Zombies in the Snow
I would like to make this article a Featured Article Candidate, but first I would like some input on anything I should do to make it better. — The Man in Question 23:53, 14 May 2006 (UTC)
 * The lead currently doesn't really explain if the movie really exists or if it is fictional. That's something the first sentence should make absolutely clear. Also, I don't see any reason for that Boy #1 and Boy #2 thing. Why not just call them "the boys"? They're mentioned together throughout the article anyway. Furthermore, the captions should not be in tags and there seem to be too many unnecessary fair use images in the article. --Fritz Saalfeld (Talk) 17:13, 15 May 2006 (UTC)

Thanks. I added the fact that the film is definitely a work of fiction in the second sentence, because I couldn't find any way to fit it into the first without breaking the flow. Also, I changed Boy #1 and Boy #2 to "the boys", like you suggested. About the fair-use issue: I changed the main picture to what I felt was a more appropriate heading anyway. The obvious problem, of course, is that no other pictures exist to illustrate the article (except one which I didn't include and would fall under fair use anyway). If an acceptable solution presents itself, I'll be happy to accept.

Meanwhile, I would very much appreciate more input on the article, since I do want to try to get it up to featured article status. — The Man in Question 19:42, 15 May 2006 (UTC)


 * How about "Zombies in the Snow, is a fictional movie in the children's novel series A Series of Unfortunate Events by Lemony Snicket (a.k.a. Daniel Handler)." and then give the information about the fictional director in a second sentence? My concern with the images was not so much the license: Even if these weren't fair use images, I'd still think there are too many. You could easily drop at least two, as most aren't really essential to illustrate the article. --Fritz Saalfeld (Talk) 16:07, 16 May 2006 (UTC)


 * All right. I've re-written the first sentence (not quite the way you said, but closer at least). Also, I removed the picture of the fishing cannery. Should the picture of "Dolores" go? I think it helps the reader understand the whimsical nature of the story better (along with the forest scene picture). However, I suppose it could go. The other pictures, however, I think should stay. — The Man in Question 03:33, 18 May 2006 (UTC)

A couple things on a quick scan: The Catfish 02:38, 16 May 2006 (UTC)
 * "Dolores has at least two songs in the film, but otherwise seems to serve little purpose." and "...The Reptile Room, is modeled after the classic science fiction/horror genre so common in 1950's filming (Creature From the Black Lagoon, 1954, Man From Planet X, 1951, Brain From Planet Arous, 1957, etc.), but with a singularly unusual twist at the end." Both are original research-ish and need references to back them up
 * See if you can find more references than the two (both by the author) that you have.

Thanks. Unfortunately, there really are no other resources. Not trying to harp on anything, but more comments are always welcome. — The Man in Question 04:23, 16 May 2006 (UTC)