Wikipedia:Portal peer review/Aboriginal peoples in Canada/archive1

Portal:Aboriginal peoples in Canada
Well since there is only one level Of Feature so do this first i guess....Like the guy below my first portal to!! So just hoping to get so feed back if How i did it is ok!! Buzzzsherman (talk) 06:07, 6 December 2009 (UTC) Buzzzsherman (talk) 06:07, 6 December 2009 (UTC)


 * OK, my comments from complete inexperience! I freely confess that I've pinched ideas from elsewhere, particularly the latest Featured Portal (Portal:Nevada), as that gives a very good model to work from.
 * I think you can remove the references from the introduction – there's no reference list (nor should there be), so readers are left with annoying numbers that don't mean anything and don't link anywhere. You can also remove the references from the selected articles.
 * The introduction is rather long - can it be trimmed? From what I can see in Featured Portals, the tendency is to have a summary that entices people to read on, with a more... link at the end of the summary.
 * The links at the bottom of the "Selected picture" / "Selected article" etc sections to "more articles [pictures]" and "suggest" would usually go to a list of the articles/pictures used in rotation, and to a page that gives instructions on how to add new articles/pictures to the portal, rather than a simple link to Commons or a link to a list of articles.
 * With Harriet Nahanee, the summary of the article is so long that there's nothing new left to read by the time you see the main article. I think the same is true of some of the other articles. I'd suggest trimming these down.
 * With the DYK, perhaps consider using just a few facts each time, and rotating randomly through selections of facts. Too much information overload, otherwise!
 * Hope this helps. BencherliteTalk 13:07, 8 December 2009 (UTC)


 * OK tks ...sounds good will update/shorten text soon..since no major problems except for length...I have listed it here Portal/Directory


 * Cuddling has been done as per Reviewers recommendations ..........Buzzzsherman (talk) 01:25, 9 January 2010 (UTC)