Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 August 17

Convention du Lac
This is the article concerning the Sci-Fi convention in Southwest Louisiana. We did reverify references and they do work.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Convention_du_Lac

Jtoney7852 (talk) 00:46, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
 * There seems to be a problem with the references in the article; you can ask at the Wikipedia Help Desk. Chevy  monte  carlo  07:34, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

References verified, please check again

Leigh Robert Davis
Requiring review: Leigh Robert Davis (20 June 1955 - 3 October 2009) was a New Zealand-based writer who created long poems and large-scale, mixed-media projects in which he worked with painters, designers and composers. He was known for the highly experimental nature of his creative work...

Dv8kiwi (talk) 07:21, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
 * I think you need to work on adding more references to the article, particularly to the first parts of the 'Career' section. Chevy  monte  carlo  07:40, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jestalk/FACT
Jestalk (talk) 13:58, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Instead of using bold text for the sections, I think you need to use proper section headers, like this:

Examples
which creates a new section with 'Examples' as the name. You also need to remove the Facebook reference (which shouldn't be in there as per the rules at WP:CITE) and add some names to the external links. Finally I think you need to add more references to the article as well. Chevy monte  carlo  07:37, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dyslexia_Action
This is one of my first articles -is it sound? Have I abided to wiki-protocol?

Adam Trepczynski (talk) 14:10, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Try and add some names to the references and also perhaps an infobox. Chevy  monte  carlo  07:29, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

Ian Hall
Hi, I am new to this and have just placed a Welsh Rugby International into the system. I have wrongly linked this person to another with the same name.

1690wizard (talk) 14:43, 17 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:TheWhiteNinja66/Mark_Hillman_(Money_Manager)
TheWhiteNinja66 (talk) 14:49, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
 * I think you need to add more references and links to the article, as it is certainly lacking. Finally, consider adding an infobox. Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 06:59, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

User:Adamultimatelife/Magic_Wand_Foundation
New article needs to be reviewed

We are a non-profit, 501(c)3, called the Magic Wand Foundation operating out of Roswell, Georgia. The content used in our Wikipedia article is our original content written by the founders.

MagicWandFoundation.org Official Magic Wand Foundation Website

UltimateLifeSummit.com Ultimate Life Summit Website

UltimateLifeUniversity Ultimate Life University Website

MyUltimateLife.com MyUltimateLife.com Social Network

Adamultimatelife (talk) 16:18, 17 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/St_John%27s_Church,_Peasedown_St_John
New article needs to be reviewed.

Robert Withers (talk) 16:31, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
 * I think the article's tone needs to be worked on; it sounds like an advertisement in places. Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 07:23, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Haken_(Band)
Hi, I wanted someone to review this article. Haken is a progressive rock band with one studio album out, and they are significant enough to hold a page. Their debut album can be found here : Aquarius (Haken album). thanks.

Andy (talk) 17:46, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
 * I see you took action on my suggestion :) Well done! It's a good article, but you need more references to add to the article, to make the article's subject more notable. Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 07:19, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dudeinhammock/Sex_at_Dawn
Hi. My first entry on Wikipedia. It's about a book I co-authored. I thought it best to ask for feedback before advancing the page. Thank you.

Dudeinhammock (talk) 21:22, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
 * You need more references, and also you need to add names to the references you already have. You can remove the example.com external link as it's just there to show you how to add external links. I also think you need to add some categories to the article as well, although that is not as important. Finally, I think you need to consider adding an infobox as well. Hope all of this is helpful! Please send me a message if you have any more questions! Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 07:15, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hector_L_Torres
New Article needs to be reviewed

12345standard (talk) 23:05, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Try and add some names to the references and external links. Also, you need to add some categories to the article that actually exist - the two you have at the moment don't exist anywhere. Finally, consider adding a picture and infobox. Thanks, and I hope all this is helpful. Please send me a message if you have a question or comment. Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 07:09, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

Jamie Drake
New article that needs to be reviewed. Strohlnco (talk) 23:06, 17 August 2010 (UTC)

Strohlnco (talk) 23:06, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Try and add some names to the external links, like this:

Hope this is useful. Chevy monte  carlo  - alt 07:01, 18 August 2010 (UTC)
 * |Example external link name goes here!