Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 August 18

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Laurie_Greenan
Dear Wikipedians I have written articles for wiki before, and realise that the more resources you quote the better. I have tried to find more material on this individual's work, but writing on the subject of costume designers and makers working in the rock music industry is very scarce. I work in an academic library and have researched electronic journals as well as books. A range of articles published in US newspapers is cited and where they appear in digital form online. What more can I do? It is a subject that needs more written exposure as a vital but anonymous aspect of the visual impact of rock music performance. Any suggestions appreciated!

Alfredomega (talk) 08:37, 18 August 2010 (UTC)
 * I think you need something like an infobox to summarise the key points about the article's subject. Also, I reckon you need to add some names to the web references you already have, like this:

This is a sentence. Hope this is helpful! Please send me a message if you have any questions about this. Thanks, Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 16:21, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:HistoryPecanwood/History_of_Pecanwood_Estate
I work for the Pecanwood Estate Homeowners Association in South Africa. I have been instructed by the Estate General Manager Mr. Johan Kruger to publish a story that one of the developers of the Estate wrote. He would like to post this story and allow other residents on the Estate to edit the events as they remembered how it had occurred.

I am having trouble linking reliable sources to this story. I do not know where to go from here. Please help.

Thank you

Marie HistoryPecanwood (talk) 08:50, 18 August 2010 (UTC)


 * Bejinhan's comments Bejinhan   talks   12:44, 18 August 2010 (UTC)


 * Wikipedia is not the place to publish stories. Please see What Wikipedia is not. Furthermore, since it is a story that one of the developers wrote, it would count as original research. After all, Wikipedia is an encyclopedia. We are not publishers, in that sense. :)


 * If you can't find reliable sources, that would mean the article is not notable enough for an article. Sources are for verifiability and notability reasons. Sources that are from Wikipedia articles or wiki-sites do not count as reliable sources.


 * I hope those explanations helped. If I were you, I wouldn't put the article live...

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Galway_African_Film_Festival
just uploaded my first ever wikipage ... hope it's okay :-) It's a summary page about the Galway African Film Festival, a smallish annual festival in Ireland.

Heikevornhagen (talk) 13:43, 18 August 2010 (UTC)
 * You need to add more references to the article, and add some names to the web references that you already have, like this:

This is a sentence in the article. Also, consider adding an infobox, perhaps. Chevy monte  carlo  - alt 16:27, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

User:Travsul/Frederick_Moyer
Hi! This is my first Wiki article and I think everything is in order, but definitely need to know if I'm missing anything in terms of references, and what could be better in general. Thanks!!!

-Travis

Travsul (talk) 14:46, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Measuring_SE_ranking_results
I welcome comments on my proposed formula for measuring Search Engine Ranking of a website. This ranking would be useful for comparing rankings of different promoting techniques or persons.

John5Smithers (talk) 17:56, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Diazcooper/Frank_Armstrong_III
I just want some feedback on how to make this article work. It's my first submission and I wan't tp be sure this article is worthwhile.

Thanks

Diazcooper (talk) 18:44, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

User:Avibtech/Microsoft SharePoint 2010
Hi,

I have created this new page to allow myself and other wikipedia users to share their knowledge and experience on SharePoint 2010. There is a page for SharePoint already exists in wikipedia but that page talks about all the versions of the product and has limited information about Sharepoint 2010.

As of now I have added very basic information about SharePoint 2010, but I have a lot to write and I will be also creating a couple of child pages to add more information related to various areas of SharePoint 2010.

I want to publish this page to allow other users to add content based on their knowledge and experience.

I am regular user of wikipedia, but this is first time I have created an account and posted a page.

Please review the page and provide your feedback. Please let me know if there are any issues and also help me to resolve those issue.

Avibtech (talk) 18:53, 18 August 2010 (UTC)


 * Instead of creating a new page, I would suggest expanding the page already in existence, see SharePoint, the information that you are developing is already partially covered and we generally don't create articles based on editions of something, Sadads (talk) 19:05, 20 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Fayerman/Ailson_%E2%80%9CJuc%C3%A3o%E2%80%9D_Henrique_Brites
Please review the new biographical article for a notable person.

Fayerman (talk) 19:06, 18 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Try and add some names to those references, like this:

Example sentence in the article. Hope you understand this; but if you have any questions please send me a message - thank you :) Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 10:39, 19 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:MichelleBVM/Telx_Group
I would like to build a Wikipedia page for Telx (AKA Telx Group). Their marketing team tried to do this before but didn't understand how to use references and to stick to unbiased, factual topics instead of "Telx is the greatest thing ever." Please review the draft and let me know if I need more reliable sources and citations.

MichelleBVM (talk) 20:16, 18 August 2010 (UTC)
 * I have a few things:

This is an example sentence For external links, it's the same, except without the sentence and tags.
 * As per the rules at WP:CITE, Wikipedia cannot be used as a reference, so please remove that reference (number 9)
 * Try and add some names to the External links and references, like this:
 * I think you need to try and add sections to the article, for example:

Examples
creates a section with 'Examples' as the name. If you have any questions, please send me a message - thanks a lot! Chevy monte  carlo  - alt 10:35, 19 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Language_Acquisition_Through_Motor_Planning_LAMP
This subject matter is not covered elsewhere in Wikipedia, and would be helpful for those suffering from disabilities that limit the ability to speak. If you can provide suggestions to make this article Wiki-friendly, that would be a great help.

Vilocity (talk) 21:07, 18 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Please try and use inline citations to display your references in a more suitable format. This form of displaying citations uses tags, but it's very simple. If you have any questions about this or you need help with it, please send me a message.
 * I think the article's name needs to be changed, although you don't have to do this. I think Language Acquisition Through Motor Planning (LAMP) is a better name, but you don't have to do this if you don't want to.
 * Finally, try and add some links to the article, and maybe some web references if you can, as well as the magazine/book/journal references that you already have. I hope all of this is helpful! Please send me a message if you have any questions at all. Thank you! Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 10:29, 19 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Jennifer_Sereno/MorgridgeInstituteforResearch&oldid=379642582
Greetings: Your comments and feedback on the Morgridge Institute for Research article will be very welcome. My hope is to move it to the mainspace area after incorporating suggestions from those with more Wiki experience. Thank you very much for your kind consideration.

Jennifer Sereno 21:49, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Intlawprof/Rosalba_Pedrina#Biographical_Profile
This is a bio of an Italian woman artist named Rosalba Pedrina. I am not sure if I have the headings correct (for example, will the entry appear as "Rosalba Pedrina" or as "Intlawprof/Rosalba Pedrina"? (It should be just her name.)

Intlawprof (talk) 22:33, 18 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Well, once the article is good enough for Wikipedia it can be moved to somewhere like Rosalba Pedrina (send me a message if you would like some assistance with the move), and then the name will be Rosalba Pedrina, rather than what it is at the moment which is a separate page in your userspace (hence the 'User:Intlawprof' name and then the name of the page). Again, please send me a message if you have any more questions about this or if you are confused.
 * As to the article, I think you need to improve the references - a lot of the references don't seem to make sense. Some web references would be nice (i.e. references from web pages). Also, try and add some links, like this:

Apple
 * which creates a link to the Apple article. Finally, I think you need to try and add an infobox as well. Hope all of this is helpful, but please contact me on here if you have any questions about this. Chevy  monte  carlo  07:57, 19 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jenny_Hansen
Article still has new unreviewed article by it and needs to be reviewed. Thanks for your help!

Dgbail09 (talk) 23:24, 18 August 2010 (UTC)
 * I made some minor corrections to the links in the references (there was a space in the tags that wasn't supposed to be there). I think you need to add an infobox perhaps as well, just to summarise the key points about her. Finally, a less important suggestion is to add some categories, although since I've now tagged it at the bottom as having no categories someone else is likely to come along and add categories for you. Chevy  monte  carlo  07:51, 19 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Convention_du_Lac
All references check and verified, please review the article for acceptance/

Jtoney7852 (talk) 02:21, 19 August 2010 (UTC)
 * I think you need to add more links to the article, but as I said in my first review there seems to be a problem with the book/magazine references - they're not displaying correctly in the 'References' section. Chevy  monte  carlo  07:44, 19 August 2010 (UTC)