Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 August 7

User:Douglas wilbur/Mariachi Las Altenas
Any advice will be appreciated.



Douglas wilbur (talk) 02:47, 7 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Looks pretty good - though I might suggest that you are careful to maintain a neutral and disinterested tone, adding WP:Categories, a picture if you can, and, of course, writing more. :) ~ Qwerp Qwertus Talk  ツ  08:03, 7 August 2010 (UTC)

The Wiki-link Douglas wilbur(talk) previously provided above is the general "example" link and does not link to the actual draft on their Userpage. That apparent oversight is now corrected. Shearonink (talk) 15:26, 7 August 2010 (UTC)

I think the draft as it stands now is a really good start. Agree with ~ Qwerp Qwertus comments and would add that additional verifiable and reliable sources are needed. Shearonink (talk) 16:07, 7 August 2010 (UTC)


 * Articles need independent reliable sources - see WP:VRS.


 * The bands own blog is neither, and the listing in "texascrownhall" is insufficient to show notability.


 * If it was made live, and did not show why this band is notable, it could be deleted. Please see WP:NBAND.


 * Be careful if you have a conflict of interest - see WP:BESTCOI.  Chzz  ► 03:30, 8 August 2010 (UTC)


 * Addendum: I see that it is already live; therefore, it is even more important to add independent, reliable sources.  Chzz  ► 03:32, 8 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:DinoFight/AWG-100
Hello. Can you please check if this article that I wrote about the Casio AWG-100 is in order? Thanks!

DinoFight (talk) 04:27, 7 August 2010 (UTC)

In order for an article to be accepted into Wikipedia, its asserted facts need reliable sources that help prove the subject's notability. Right now this draft is completely unsourced. A look at What Wikipedia is not might also be helpful since the present draft seems somewhat more suited to being a dictionary entry rather than being an encyclopedia article. Shearonink (talk) 13:52, 7 August 2010 (UTC)

Kashi Samaddar
See certificates from world bodies at latest of www.ttpglobal.com or type at google" First person visited all countries".

—Preceding unsigned comment added by Ttpglobal (talk • contribs) 10:50, 7 August 2010

The Wiki-link Ttpglobak (talk) previously provided above is the general "example" link and does not link to the actual Wikipedia article they wrote. That oversight has been corrected. Shearonink (talk) 15:26, 7 August 2010 (UTC)


 * Note: This user is blocked because their name is a website. The article is tagged as an unreferenced biography, and other concerns are noted on the article.  Chzz  ► 03:42, 8 August 2010 (UTC)

User:Jsayre64/French Pete Trail
I'm confident in the writing quality of this article; I just want your thoughts if the subject is notable enough and if the image licensing tags are valid.

Jsayre64 (talk) 16:49, 7 August 2010 (UTC)

I added two additional references. You might want to add some more information about the historic struggle to protect the area. I am not sure about the copyright, it looks ok to me, but I think you should get some more opinions before proceeding and making the article 'live'. Check out the Wikipedia Help/Chat Channel to get some better-informed opinions. Shearonink (talk) 19:08, 7 August 2010 (UTC)


 * The notability (now) looks OK.


 * I added a template here].


 * I also tweaked the formatting. Note that references should come after punctuation,&lt;ref>Like this&lt;/ref> not before&lt;ref>Like this&lt;/ref>.


 * The licence on File:French Pete.JPG was fine, but I've moved it over to [[Commons:File:French Pete.JPG|Commons, here. All 'free' pics belong there, so that they can be used by other sister-projects such as other language Wikipedias.


 * I think the licence on File:French pete map.gif is OK; I have added a few more details from their website, and asked on Media copyright questions.  Chzz  ► 04:05, 8 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Zeebash/CAR_Middle_East_Magazine
Article about the Middle East edition of Car magazine in the UK. Is this okay? Is the formatting okay? I have a cover image, how do I add that?

Zeebash (talk) 18:02, 7 August 2010 (UTC)


 * You should not have external links to websites within the actual body text; they can only appear in a special section at the end for 'external links'.


 * The draft does not have sufficient evidence of notability - you need to show why the magazine is notable; see WP:GNG.


 * The 'Website' information is unreferenced, and appears to be original research, which is not permitted.


 * The list of email addresses is not appropriate, see WP:NOTDIR


 * There are too many external links, please see WP:EL.

If you have a conflict of interest, please be very careful, and read the WP:BFAQ. Best,  Chzz  ► 04:14, 8 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Paul_LaViolette
An article about Dr. Paul A. LaViolette, an American scientist who has proposed new physics models that solve problem of unified filed theory.

Radova (talk) 20:08, 7 August 2010 (UTC)


 * External links should be formatted as [website text to link], e.g.


 * Paul LaViolette Homepage
 * Starburst Foundation


 * I made that change here, so they now looks like;


 * Paul LaViolette Homepage
 * Starburst Foundation


 * The same thing applies within references, so I changed;

...to...


 * That was this edit; I hope you can see how that works. I leave the others as an 'exercise for the reader' :-) or whoever else works on the article.


 * I am concerned that a) most of the article lacks inline references, and b) all of the references are written by the subject. Such primary sources are 'acceptable', but do not help show the notability of the person. It needs independent reliable sources.


 * Because it lacks independent sources, the "Theories" section looks like original research - we cannot state what the chap did unless it is verifiable independently.


 * If you have not already done so, I suggest you investigate and join WikiProject Physics. Hope this helps.  Chzz  ► 05:36, 8 August 2010 (UTC)


 * This article was deleted last year: Articles for deletion/Paul LaViolette (2nd nomination) - one reason was that the subject requested deletion. It's been PROD'd today. Dougweller (talk) 10:39, 8 August 2010 (UTC)

https://secure.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/en/wiki/User:OmeLuuk/Trinette_Ledelay
This is my first wikipedia input ever, so please be kind :-) I found 2 visual artists, one with a brief page; the other was more profuse. I chose not to add pictures and exposition data. Should I add that too? OmeLuuk (talk) 22:10, 7 August 2010 (UTC)


 * It looks like a great start; ready to move to the live area; normally, to do that your account needs to be a bit more established, but I just asked an admin and you've been granted confirmed status - as I am confident you're doing good stuff...so go ahead and make it live.


 * A picture of the person would be great, but we can only use appropriately licenced images. Same applies to her work; there is such a thing as WP:NONFREE, but it is quite complicated.


 * Please try to link from some other articles to the new one so that it is not an orphan, and please add it to at least one appropriate category, such as Category:Dutch artists.


 * Many thanks for your contributions.  Chzz  ► 06:07, 8 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Georgi_Staykov
I created this page a few weeks ago. It's for an actor who appears in "The Girl with the Dragon Tattoo" series.

Wikimandia (talk) 23:28, 7 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Can you find reliable sources for the following statements?


 * Georgi Staykov is a Bulgarian-Swedish actor.
 * In Swedish cinema, he typically portrays Eastern European villains.
 * Staykov portrays Alexander Zalachenko, a former Soviet spy, in the film adaptations of the best-selling "Millennium Trilogy."


 * If you're using a source twice, as it is in the case of reference 1 and 3, you can inline cite them twice using the ref name template. Please take a look at

{| class="wikitable collapsible collapsed" ! How references work

Simple references
These require two parts;


 * a)

Chzz is 98 years old.

He likes tea.


 * b) A section called "References" with the special code " ";

Named references
Chzz was born in 1837, in Footown.

Note that the second usage has a / (and no closing ref tag). This needs a reference section as above; please see user:chzz/demo/namedref to see the result.

Citation templates
You can put anything you like between, but using citation templates makes for a neat, consistent look;

Chzz has 37 Olympic medals.

Please see user:chzz/demo/citeref to see the result.

For more help and tips on that subject, see user:chzz/help/refs. Bejinhan talks   05:07, 8 August 2010 (UTC)
 * }