Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 December 14

NetDNA
Hello, This is my first article and I am looking for confirmation if it´s ok. Please review this article. Thanks!

Alex.hager (talk) 00:09, 14 December 2010 (UTC)
 * I think you perhaps need to add an infobox, but be careful with the tone and Point Of View in the article; it's easy to make articles about organisations sound like advertisements. These types of articles are not suitable for Wikipedia. Chevy  monte  carlo  07:39, 15 December 2010 (UTC)

User:Ferrettideluca/Scuola Navale Militare %22F. Morosini%22
Have a look at the article, any suggestion is more than welcome

Ferrettideluca (talk) 00:31, 14 December 2010 (UTC)
 * I am not commenting on the content or notability of the subject of your article; but you need some help with citations and references. Look carefully at the examples in the section titled "A Quick How-To" in the article Citing sources. You should make sure not to capitalize the "ref" in the "ref tags"; additionally the second (or "closing") tag must have a slash. Thus: "&lt;ref>some citation&lt;/ref>". You will notice that at the moment most of the article you drafted does not appear, and that the software gave you a warning in big red letters that there is a problem with the way you formatted the ref tags -- that's why.
 * Tkotc (talk) 22:39, 14 December 2010 (UTC)

May First/People Link
Please remove new article template and apply clean-up tags as necessary.

66.139.120.147 (talk) 04:14, 14 December 2010 (UTC)

Mario Costa (philosopher)
please have a look at my article on "Mario Costa (philosopher)", and possibly remove the new article template..... any suggestion is welcome. thank you!!

please note that there is another article on the diplomat "Mario Costa" (another person of course), and I don't know how to change this latter title from "Mario Costa" to "Mario Costa (diplomat)"..... I hope somebody can help me.

véronique --V.fanis1 (talk) 17:59, 14 December 2010 (UTC)

I want to make a page on Romain Kremer, but I'm new at this. I don't know what should look like what, so I just wanted to know if this is okay like that? thank you

Danieww (talk) 11:26, 14 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Look at Your First Article. It describes how to approach writing a first article and it also has links to pages which provide additional help with formatting and other useful topics.Tkotc (talk) 22:14, 14 December 2010 (UTC)

User:81.98.147.245/BGRF
Any comments or suggestions on this new article would be much appreciated,

BGRF (talk) 12:09, 14 December 2010 (UTC)

Tom Atkinson cricketer
Datco2010 (talk) 13:17, 14 December 2010 (UTC)

Triage-Lavoir de Péronnes
Could someone review and go through the article and check if it has any obvious errors? Also grammar check might be good idea as I'm not native speaker. And obviously needs to remove the new article template. Thanks.

RMJJRM (talk) 13:35, 14 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Cleaned up some very minor non-native-speaker issues and removed the template.Tkotc (talk) 20:50, 15 December 2010 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the review and the grammatical corrections. I knew there had to be some minor mistakes I just couldn't pick them up. RMJJRM (talk) 00:56, 16 December 2010 (UTC)

User:Digesu/Autologous Matrix Induced Chondrogenesis (AMIC)
I would like to request a feedback on this article as well as comments for modification before publishing.

There are referencing articles on other cartilage repair techniques available but do not cover this advanced marrow stimulation technique which is widely used in Europe. The technique is based on the microfracturing and offers a one step surgical technique for the treatment of cartilage defects.

I greatly appreciate your input for improving this article.

Digesu 14:55, 14 December 2010 (UTC)

User:Krain Court/ADMAP GAS
Is it possible to publish this article?

Krain Court (talk) 15:03, 14 December 2010 (UTC)

Looking for some help with citing the sources/approval of the following: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:A.h.white/Carmen_Townsend
I am unfamiliar with markup at all and I am having trouble citing the listed sources within the article. It would be great to have some feedback/approval of what is written, and some help formatting the citation.

Thanks!

A.h.white (talk) 17:36, 14 December 2010 (UTC)


 * I am only replying to your question about markup of citations/references. What you should do is cite a source directly after the statement in your article that it supports (an "inline" citation). This is done by enclosing the reference in "ref" tags. Thus you would have &lt;ref>your cite&lt;/ref>. The Citing Sources Wikipedia article (see "A Quick How-to" near the top of the article) shows you how to do it. Tkotc (talk) 21:50, 14 December 2010 (UTC)

User:Tkotc/Henry George Nicholls
I wrote this for the Gutenberg authors project (which tries to provide a WP article for all the authors on Project Gutenberg). As is often the case with 19th Century authors on PG with only one or two (in this case three) works, there seems to be precious little in the record about the author. Interestingly, this author turned out to have a father with a WP article, and a few places mentioned in his books have WP pages too. Other than that, pickin's are slim. But if anyone has suggestions or comments, I'd appreciate them.

Tkotc (talk) 21:33, 14 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Larux/Novicraft_HRD_game
I wrote this contribution about Novicraft HRD serious game. I think that this game is good contribution to serious gaming category because It has slightly different (and scientifically proven) approach than other products on the market. I would appreciate if you move this draft to it's place - I have followed guidelines provided by article wizard and hope that content is appropriate for publishing.

Larux (talk) 22:36, 14 December 2010 (UTC)

User:Jpilot188/Japan Signs Surrender on the USS Missouri
I just need to post an article, stub, or make any contribution to Wiki for my class. If this information doesn't suffice for an article, how can I use this info to contribute to Wiki?

Jpilot188 (talk) 22:46, 14 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/MegaMeeting
Please provide me with feedback

75.40.104.214 (talk) 22:50, 14 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/TriBalance_Yoga
I wrote this article and would like it reviewed.... thank you

Nmdeasy (talk) 23:25, 14 December 2010 (UTC)
 * The article's subject doesn't really seem notable enough, and much of the article just sounds like an advertisement. Take a look at WP:Tone or WP:POV for more information. Chevy  monte  carlo  07:41, 15 December 2010 (UTC)

User:Reginaldduckworth/AllenRMorris
The footnote references are not always showing the entire line of copy. Some are just a number, but the link does go to the right web page >Reginaldduckworth (talk) 00:58, 15 December 2010 (UTC)

Reginaldduckworth (talk) 00:58, 15 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Part of the problem seems to be that you doubled-up on your referencing. Just put the link data between tags within the body of the article and put nothing under . The system will construct a ref list for you and number it appropriately.
 * Your first reference is correctly done, except that you need to change "additional text" to something more meaningful.
 * Wikipedia doesn't like "ibid." If you want to use the same source in several places, you need to instead use "named references" (see: Citing Sources and the section titled "Footnotes"). You started to do that with "Author's interview ..." (but the problem there is that you did not give a link to a published source, like a web page, book, journal). As a small aside, since Wikipedia does not accept original research (see: No original research), use of your interview, unless published somewhere, may be a problem.
 * You might want to remove the " example.com " link from external links, or remove that section altogether.
 * Tkotc (talk) 21:21, 15 December 2010 (UTC)