Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 December 27

Conde de Lipa,
This is my first wiki article. I wanted to make sure that everything was fine before posting. Thank you very much. This is very exciting.

Isherher (talk) 00:27, 27 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Have you got an actual link to the article? I can't seem to find it.. Chevy  monte  carlo  05:34, 27 December 2010 (UTC)


 * (For Chevy) Link is CondedeLipa ...


 * I some suggestions about minor formatting issues you may want to consider. (a) Generally, put the Same issue with respect to an external link two paragraphs above.


 * I'm sure there are more substantive comments that could be made. I leave that to more experienced editors. Thanks for all the work you've done so far. Tkotc (talk) 08:52, 27 December 2010 (UTC)
 * In addition to Tkotc's great feedback I would perhaps say you could improve the article by adding an infobox, although Tkotc covers a lot already. Chevy  monte  carlo  10:35, 28 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Looks pretty good, I removed the unreviewed template. I made some minor cleanup edits - I started fixing the issue with punctuation after references, but I didn't finish. I fixed your see also section, but I've never worked with interlanguage links before, so I don't know that I did it correctly.-- SPhilbrick  T  21:32, 31 December 2010 (UTC)

User:Tkotc/Joseph Amasa Munk
This is a short article about physician (and Gutenberg author) Joseph Amasa Munk. Wikipedia has a "missing articles" project to provide articles for such authors where a page does not currently exist. Comments welcome.

Tkotc (talk) 06:18, 27 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Looks pretty good, I removed the unreviewed template.-- SPhilbrick  T  21:15, 31 December 2010 (UTC)

User:Epotma/Carlos Gabriel Niño
This is a biography page about Carlos Niño, a celebrated DJ in Los Angeles. Any feedback is welcome. Thanks.

Epotma (talk) 06:22, 27 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Not bad. Could use a few more references.


 * There's a note on it suggesting that you add categories - you can just click on the plus sign, and start typing in a suitable category (if you don't know category names, look at an article for a similar artist).-- SPhilbrick  T  21:08, 31 December 2010 (UTC)

Houdini Chess Engine
Drmrboss (talk) 07:49, 27 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Unfortunately, the article has been deleted.-- SPhilbrick  T  21:02, 31 December 2010 (UTC)

Houdini Chess Engine
This is an article for Houdini Chess Engine where I wanna make a link to the article chess engine, Houdini.

Drmrboss (talk) 07:54, 27 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Unfortunately, the article has been deleted.-- SPhilbrick  T  21:02, 31 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dougtaylor/Collision3
Just wondered if I had provided sufficient references in the See Also, References and External Links sections to validate the information in the article.

Dougtaylor (talk) 08:28, 27 December 2010 (UTC)
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 * Mono (talk) 22:10, 27 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Meri0098/Biz2credit
I just created this webpage about Biz2credit, which is one of the top financing companies in US. The company has over $300 million in funding and 25,000 SMB users to make it a market leader. Throughout its years of operation, the company has supported businesses with billions of loan grants. Here, many kind of business loans are made available to entrepreneurs that can be classified under the heads of Business Start up loans, SBA loans, Equipment financing, Business Acquisition loans, Commercial loan, business line of credit and Franchisee loan.

Please review my article and help me to publish it on Wikipedia.

Thanks Merissa

Meri0098 (talk) 09:50, 27 December 2010 (UTC)
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 * Mono (talk) 22:11, 27 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Anjali_Pandey
Can someone review this? Source: http://www.aboututtarakhand.com/Watch_Outs/Talents-Of-Uttarakhand.html Charles28932 (talk) 14:17, 27 December 2010 (UTC)
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 * Mono (talk) 22:11, 27 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/RCE_Cairo
217.139.87.230 (talk) 14:44, 27 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Hello and welcome to Wikipedia! Thanks for contributing your article. However, I noticed that there is a serious issue with your article. It lacks references to reliable sources (like newspapers, books, and magazines, not blogs or social networks) and may be deleted, as articles without references do not meet our criteria for inclusion. Facts in an article should be backed up by a reference, as this helps keep Wikipedia verifiable. To fix this issue, simply add reliable sources using inline citations (see this guide for information). Click here to learn about what a reliable source is.
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 * Mono (talk) 22:12, 27 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Karlton_Watson_(Footballer)
how do you create one of those little information boxes to the right of the page? also change the name of the article to just 'karlton watson' rather than 'karlton watson (footballer)'

Kdot92 (talk) 15:47, 27 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Hello and welcome to Wikipedia! Thanks for contributing your article. However, I noticed that there is a serious issue with your article. It lacks references to reliable sources (like newspapers, books, and magazines, not blogs or social networks) and may be deleted, as articles without references do not meet our criteria for inclusion. Facts in an article should be backed up by a reference, as this helps keep Wikipedia verifiable. To fix this issue, simply add reliable sources using inline citations (see this guide for information). Click here to learn about what a reliable source is.
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 * Mono (talk) 22:13, 27 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Mutual_Building_%28Mutual_Gebou%29,_Cape_Town
Hi - I would really appreciate comments on this new article concerning one of the most famous art deco buildings in the southern hemisphere. It is the second article I have written so I am not a complete novice, but I appreciate all the help I can get!

Thanks. AndyB AndyB (talk) 18:00, 27 December 2010 (UTC) The following suggestions might not be applicable for the article in question. 
 * Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.[?]
 * Consider adding more links to the article; per Manual of Style (links) and Build the web, create links to relevant articles.[?]
 * You may wish to consider adding an appropriate infobox for this article, if one exists relating to the topic of the article. [?] (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
 * Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), there should be a non-breaking space -  between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 118 meter, use 118 meter, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 118&amp;nbsp;meter.[?]
 * Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), when doing conversions, please use standard abbreviations: for example, miles -> mi, kilometers squared -> km2, and pounds -> lb.[?]
 * Per Manual of Style (headings), headings generally do not start with articles ('the', 'a(n)'). For example, if there was a section called  ==The Biography== , it should be changed to  ==Biography== .[?]
 * Please make the spelling of English words consistent with either American or British spelling, depending upon the subject of the article. Examples include: harbour (B) (American: harbor), meter (A) (British: metre), metre (B) (American: meter), defence (B) (American: defense), traveled (A) (British: travelled).
 * Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
 * Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “ All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
 * Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
 * The article will need more references. See WP:CITE and WP:V for more information.[?]
 * Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a.[?]
 * Hello and welcome to Wikipedia! Thanks for contributing your article. However, I noticed that there is a serious issue with your article. It lacks references to reliable sources (like newspapers, books, and magazines, not blogs or social networks) and may be deleted, as articles without references do not meet our criteria for inclusion. Facts in an article should be backed up by a reference, as this helps keep Wikipedia verifiable. To fix this issue, simply add reliable sources using inline citations (see this guide for information). Click here to learn about what a reliable source is.
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 * Once again, thank you for contributing to Wikipedia.
 * You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Mono (talk) 22:21, 27 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bestmediainfo/BestMediaInfo.com
Hi... Please help us get the article published in the public domain.

Bestmediainfo (talk) 18:37, 27 December 2010 (UTC) 
 * Hello and welcome to Wikipedia! Thanks for contributing your article. However, I noticed that there is a serious issue with your article. It lacks references to reliable sources (like newspapers, books, and magazines, not blogs or social networks) and may be deleted, as articles without references do not meet our criteria for inclusion. Facts in an article should be backed up by a reference, as this helps keep Wikipedia verifiable. To fix this issue, simply add reliable sources using inline citations (see this guide for information). Click here to learn about what a reliable source is.
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 * Mono (talk) 22:22, 27 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Creteloc/Heku
These books are my new passion and I want to get information out there on the heku species. I'd like to get feedback on how this flows and if it's good enough to put out. I asked the author, T.M. Nielsen (info@hekuseries.com) if it was ok to write this and got a yes, not sure how to put permissions into it so it's not a copyright issue. If this pans out, there will be more subpages dealing with information in the books.

Mono I appreciate your response but I'm a tad confused. There are sources at the bottom which lists the name of the book the information was obtained from. What more is needed then?

Creteloc (talk) 18:47, 27 December 2010 (UTC) 
 * Hello and welcome to Wikipedia! Thanks for contributing your article. However, I noticed that there is a serious issue with your article. It lacks references to reliable sources (like newspapers, books, and magazines, not blogs or social networks) and may be deleted, as articles without references do not meet our criteria for inclusion. Facts in an article should be backed up by a reference, as this helps keep Wikipedia verifiable. To fix this issue, simply add reliable sources using inline citations (see this guide for information). Click here to learn about what a reliable source is.
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 * Mono (talk) 22:24, 27 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Roman_and_Williams_Buildings_and_Interiors
Hello:

I'm hoping to receive feedback and/or a blessing for this entry on Roman and Williams. Thank you for your time.

Ekubany (talk) 21:07, 27 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Boeing_Technical_Fellowship
The Boeing Technical Fellowship is a small group of technical leaders at Boeing, akin to the IBM Fellows or Microsoft Technical Fellows. I created this article in place of a redirect from Boeing Technical Fellowship to Boeing. An article on the Fellowship itself seems to add much more value.

Smintisgood (talk) 21:11, 27 December 2010 (UTC) 
 * Hello and welcome to Wikipedia! Thanks for contributing your article. However, I noticed that there is a serious issue with your article. It lacks references to reliable sources (like newspapers, books, and magazines, not blogs or social networks) and may be deleted, as articles without references do not meet our criteria for inclusion. Facts in an article should be backed up by a reference, as this helps keep Wikipedia verifiable. To fix this issue, simply add reliable sources using inline citations (see this guide for information). Click here to learn about what a reliable source is.
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 * MonoALT (talk) 23:23, 27 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Kennedy_Trail
I have just moved my article on The Kennedy Trail to mainspace and welcome feedback on it. The 1861 Kennedy Trail was the first trail connecting New Westminster, British Columbia to Mud Bay in Surrey. It is a part of the history of Delta and Surrey.

JamCad605 (talk) 21:51, 27 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wang_Xiaolong_(artist)
Dear reviewers, appreciate your feedback on my article!

Giloveart (talk) 21:53, 27 December 2010 (UTC)