Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 December 29

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jamalaka/Antje_Paarlberg
User since 2007. Have edited articles. This is the first I've authored. Finally figured out how to move it and post it. Need feedback/approval I guess?

You start your article with "Antje Paarlberg Chicago...". You should extend and make the first complete sentence "Antje Paarlberg is a character..." or whatever. Then the second sentence should be "Chicago area author Edna Ferber..." What I am saying is don't leave the beginning as it is now.

Jamalaka (talk) 00:12, 29 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Already done. Guoguo12  --Talk--  01:17, 29 December 2010 (UTC)

Thank you! I have made the edit you suggested. As a newbie I wasn't thinking of the bold as anything but a heading. It is now part of the first sentence. Jamalaka (talk) 13:27, 29 December 2010 (UTC)jamalaka

Can someone approve my article? Jamalaka (talk) 15:41, 29 December 2010 (UTC)jamalaka

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/John-Paul_Glover
This is working progress of a DJ Presenter John-Paul Glover. Links will be added over the coming weeks.

Gaydio (talk) 01:51, 29 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:PhilippaLowe/RedBalloon
Hi - I am looking for assistance in moving this draft to mainspace, please can you help? It's a short article. Many thanks

PhilippaLowe (talk) 02:00, 29 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kyra6/C-Space,_Beijing
Kyra6 (talk) 02:23, 29 December 2010 (UTC)

https://secure.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/en/wiki/RootsMagic
Hello, This is my first attempt at an article, please be kind. Narracan3824 (talk) 05:37, 29 December 2010 (UTC)

Narracan3824 (talk) 05:37, 29 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/InView_Unmanned_Aircraft_System
Feedback! (high note) Feedback... (low note) ... ... I'm dreamin' of some feedback. Seriously, I know many folks have more festive activities on their agenda.

Remove - New Article Name is "InView Unmanned Aircraft System" - at the top. Write normally "InView Unmanned Aircraft System is..." Other than that article seems informative.

Thanks: will do.

JoeB52 (talk) 11:19, 29 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Meri0098/Biz2credit
I have updated this article... Please review it and give me your thoughts on this

Regards, Merissa

Meri0098 (talk) 11:40, 29 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Retrograde_Software_Analysis
Aperisic (talk) 11:45, 29 December 2010 (UTC)

http://www.imdb.com/title/tt1127886/
Internet Movie Database page for HERE

Partslaborfilms (talk) 15:17, 29 December 2010 (UTC)

http://www.imdb.com/title/tt1127886/
Internet Movie Database page for HERE

Partslaborfilms (talk) 15:18, 29 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Partslaborfilms/Here
Hi. I would love some feedback on this page and some help getting it up and running. Thank you!

Partslaborfilms (talk) 15:20, 29 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jado_Wahan
jado wahan is a little village

Abdul Salam khuhro 15:55, 29 December 2010 (UTC)

User:Lwaltner/Braided River (Publishing)
This article is about Braided River, a nonprofit publishing company in Seattle, Wash. It may need to be checked to make sure that it is impartial and doesn't read like and advertisement. Thanks!

Lwaltner (talk) 20:17, 29 December 2010 (UTC)

User:Joerahme/Joseph Rahme
Someone please review my new article. Thanks:)

Joerahme (talk) 21:17, 29 December 2010 (UTC)

Afroditha-Chrons-Uranos
It is no thruth that Chronos castrate Uranos and story about Afroditha is no right. You must also know the diference between sky and heaven and so on...SPAM!Pleas read Homer again and employ in future deep educated people for serios things. WE have enough desinformation on Internet!

213.103.160.237 (talk) 21:19, 29 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Joseph_Rahme
Someone please review this new article. Thanks:)

Joerahme (talk) 21:27, 29 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Megarvt/Helen_Woodward_Animal_Center&diff=prev&oldid=404906161
Hello! We have reviewed this article and are seeking advice on making it better, if needed. We have a lot of notable links and resources. Thank you very much for your help!

Megarvt (talk) 00:33, 30 December 2010 (UTC)