Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 December 31

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mimi102102/Big_Zeb
How do I add a box to the right, with quick info like, dob, a picture, earnings, etc, like i have seen for other racehorses? i haven't been able to find it in help. And does the article look ok? Thanks

Mimi102102 (talk) 01:03, 31 December 2010 (UTC)


 * You want to use an "Infobox". See: Template:Infobox named horse.


 * I can't otherwise comment much, but I don't see any inline references or other keys to the sources for the information you wish to contribute.Tkotc (talk) 02:53, 31 December 2010 (UTC)

Gage Park, Brampton
I wanted to go skating here with my wife and checked Wikipedia for details, and was surprised to find that the page didn't exist. This is my first page with any real substance, so please be gentle. Most of the information comes from PDFs found on the City of Brampton website.

One concern: when I originally searched for the page, I was interested in information about the skating rink and whether skate rental is available nearby. I've included a link to the nearby store that offers these services. I'm not affiliated with the store in any way. Is this cool? I would have found this information useful.

Thanks for your help! Dave Laird (talk) 01:04, 31 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Intracortical_Encephalogram_Signal_Analysis
This is my first New Page so I am doing my best to WIKI it to the correct standards. I could have bloated it, or used as you say 'jargon" by stating that Intracortical Encephalogram Signal Analysis is being used by the Department of Defense wherein the electrodes are placed inside the heads of wounded soldiers that have head injuries and the signals are sent o brain surgeons at the field hospital to put the surgeon on alert as to what the suggested medical procedure should be. However, I have gone by your guidelines and kept it neutral, just writing about the facts.

Innertron (talk) 01:41, 31 December 2010 (UTC)
 * You can remove the extraneous line beginning "New article name is ..."


 * Wondering why your references didn't work right? The macros need their second set of "}" brackets.


 * You should remove the example dot com external reference.


 * Others may have more substantive comments. Tkotc (talk) 08:54, 31 December 2010 (UTC)

User:Tkotc/Fannie Ellsworth Newberry
This is a very short article written pursuant to the Wikipedia "missing articles" project to provide articles for Project Gutenberg authors where a page does not currently exist. This author is also listed in the Find-a-Grave missing articles list. Comments welcome.

Tkotc (talk) 03:01, 31 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rimearh
Hello, Please Leave Your Feedback On This Article !!
 * Your article appears to have been speedily deleted multiple times because it does not indicate the notability of the subject. Also, I noticed your username is the same as that of the article, and Wikipedia strongly discourages writing articles in which you may have a conflict of interest. Whatever you choose to write, always make sure that you have reliable sources for your article. Good luck! Reaper Eternal (talk) 13:52, 31 December 2010 (UTC)

Rimearh (talk) 04:04, 31 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kyra6/C-Space,_Beijing
Please help me as this is my first article and I would like some help getting it 'live'. If you think I should alter some things, that would be very helpful as well.

Thanks a lot, kYra

Kyra6 (talk) 08:43, 31 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dexamethasone
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dexamethasone.......the information that was added by myself about the uses, side affects and dosages of this drug in regards to asthma and COPD should be added back to the article. http://www.nycremsco.org/images/articlesserver/ALS_Protocols_January_2010_v01012010d.pdf  (see pages 23 and 24) clearly state the standing order usage of the drug for ALS providers in NYC and the side affects for women who are given the drug is common knowledge that can be verified by any emergency room doctor.

Danie5000 (talk) 18:20, 31 December 2010 (UTC)
 * This isn't really the right forum to mediate a content duispute. Your first step should be to post at the talk page where you can explain your rationale to other editors, and ideally reach a consensus.-- SPhilbrick  T  20:47, 31 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Stkcarm5
I'm writing an article about the non profit organization about foregen and need some help with it. Stkcarm5 (talk) 18:59, 31 December 2010 (UTC)
 * A user page isn't the right place to start a draft article, although a user subpage is. I've taken the liberty of moving your draft to an appropriate location: User:Stkcarm5/Foregen. In my welcome message, I included some links that should be helpful. You need more before you are ready to ask for feedback.-- SPhilbrick  T  20:54, 31 December 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mickey_Burns,_host_of_%60Profiles%27
I believe I have good references for this article, but please let me know if you think it needs more. I am still working on links to interviews, etc. Many thanks!

Edwina Frances Martin 19:48, 31 December 2010 (UTC)

Steve_Hardin
I am requesting feedback for this page created about Steve Hardin, a musician who has played with Steppenwolf and Glen Campbell, and is referenced in several different places on Wikipedia, but until now has not had his own entry.

Bjhardin (talk) 20:49, 31 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Just looking at your user name I have to wonder what is your connection with the subject of your article. If there is any connection at all, you should disclose that fact up front.


 * The subject of your article certainly seems notable in the senses described in Notability (music), but you should make it clear how he meets those criteria. Since you appear to be writing the article on the basis that your subject is a notable songwriter, you need to be clear about what his notable compositions are and how they are notable. One basis for their notability may be the position of the songs on a national chart. You seem to indicate this, but it isn't 100% clear (to me) where you got the information from, or the precise name or source of the chart. I'm guessing you have ready access to these facts and adding a little additional information on the point won't prove burdensome. Other bases may be "significant coverage" from a "reliable source". I would think there would be some such coverage. Can you find some? Some good material along these lines would help. Similarly, if your subject is notable as a musician as well, documentation of his notability should be crystal clear.


 * I clicked on the link you gave for currentland.com, and there was nothing on the page that came up on your subject. Apparently this is simply the web presence of your printed source. If your article is based on information from a printed source, not a web page, then try to use an appropriate template from Citation templates to describe it. These templates allow you to fill in the blanks and show necessary bibliographical information. The other source has no online presence either, so I suggest the same thing. Whatever the sources for your article, ideally you would use inline citations (using tags) to identify the source of the various bits of information in your article.


 * I think you could do a bit more in your Albums/CDs section. Just some more detail and clean-up perhaps. Wikipedia is an encyclopedia, but this segment in your article looks a bit cursory. For discographies see MOS:WORKS and WikiProject Musicians/Article guidelines. A little bit of polishing here could make a difference. Note that MOS:MUSIC says, "In popular music, album and EP titles should be in italics, and song and single titles should be in quotes."


 * Minor usage point: after identifying your subject in the first paragraph, you should refer to him by his last name in the balance of the article, not "Steve".


 * Thank you for your work on this article. I hope you find some of these suggestions useful in polishing it. Tkotc (talk) 02:24, 1 January 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:CAMiller62/Bill_%28F._William%29_Conner
Posting an article about Bill (F. William) Conner, a Dallas-based software executive who is frequently asked to speak on global and national cybersecurity trends and prevention. He has been invited to address INTERPOL and the United Nations, among other groups. Also practicing my formatting and editing in the wiki format (bullets, footnotes, subheads, etc.) Have 30 references, links to other wiki pages, and external links.

thanks!

Casey Miller, Dallas, TX 21:35, 31 December 2010 (UTC)