Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 July 15

Alison Van Pelt Please provide feedback on this new article.
I need help including images with the new article I created. I followed the tutorials, and uploaded three images, but I can't get them to appear in the article. The captions will appear, but not the images themselves. I can't find the uploaded images anywhere on wikipedia.

EverMoody (talk) 01:11, 15 July 2010 (UTC)
 * According to your Upload Log, you've uploaded two images, one of which is still in existence (presumably the one on the article) and the other was deleted, as shown on it's Deletion Log, it had an improper license. You can ask the person who deleted it, Malik Shabazz to restore it in order for you to re-license it correctly and use it if you still need it. You never uploaded a third image and it is normal for deleted images to only show the caption when used, but you can use your Upload Log to find the images you did upload. Hope that helps! ~ Qwerp Qwertus ·  Contact Me  · 05:38, 17 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gatechjon/Paulding_County_High_School
Can someone proofread this article? The article is discussing Paulding County High School in Dallas, Ga.

Thank You,

GT (talk) 03:06, 15 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Looks pretty good - though you might try to convert some of the bullet lists to paragraph form, other than that, a picture might be useful. Also, I've auto-proofreaded the article for you (using Advisor.js\AutoEd). ~ Qwerp Qwertus ·  Contact Me  · 05:51, 17 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Finn29/Overdose_Awareness_Day
Hello!, I am wondering if someone might have a look at thgis page and let me know if it is ok? and what I should improve on? thankyou

Finn29 (talk) 06:08, 15 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Looks good, but you might try to include at least one more good third-party source and try to fix that picture, if possible, and maybe add some categories. Good job though! ~ Qwerp Qwertus ·  Contact Me  · 06:03, 17 July 2010 (UTC)

Workers (Gong Ren)
Hi, I'd appreciate feedback and a review of this new article on the artist's book "Workers (Gong Ren)". It's my first page from scratch and I've tried to follow all the guidelines. Thanks!

Pyxelator (talk) 07:17, 15 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wendy_Robbins
Hi. I've added citations where I can. Can the "Unreviewed Article" and "Inline Citations" straps be removed now?

Petergoldmark (talk) 08:00, 15 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:RossKirk101L/London_Learning_Centre
Hello. Could you please have a look at the page and tell me whether you think it's ok to publish. I've made changes to make it completely objective. Thanks

RossKirk101L (talk) 10:03, 15 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Brilliant_Stars_English_Medium_School,_Tripura
Siamackz (talk) 11:01, 15 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:HistoryPecanwood/History_of_Pecanwood_Estate
I have added more than several sources to my article. I do not know how to get my article requested for feedback.

HistoryPecanwood (talk) 11:49, 15 July 2010 (UTC)
 * I've taken a brief look at your article, and it looks like you've put a lot of effort into it. I'll provide some suggestions on how to get the article ready for main space. First, there doesn't appear to be an article on Pecanwood Estate, so making an article dedicated to it's history seems a bit premature. Instead, perhaps you'd consider making the article dedicated to Pecanwood Estate as a whole, and include a section on it's history?
 * Which brings me to the major problem the article currently faces, it has no sections! The article needs to be divided into relevant sections to help readers find specific points of interest quickly. Using sections can also help you organize the layout of the article and assure that it flows well by grouping similar ideas and information.
 * Also, make sure to realize that, although you may be the original author of an article (or a major contributor to an article, or even the only contributor to an article!), the article doesn't belong to you. Thus, starting the article with "The article below was written by Mr. Alec Bates [1] former MD of Maccon Group and current Director of Pecanwood Golf and Country Club." isn't in the spirit of Wikipedia. Although the article may have been written by Alec Bates originally, anyone may contribute, and Alec Bates has no special privilege to the article.
 * You may be interested in looking up the articles of other golf/country clubs in order to get an idea of how they lay their articles out. Doing so might provide you useful information and how you can change your article to be ready for main space.
 * Good luck, and feel free to request more feedback or ask questions if you have them! ialsoagree (talk) 18:17, 18 July 2010 (UTC)

Central Electricity Regulatory Commission
Hi Wikipedians, Pls have a look at my article on Indian Power sector Regulator, Central Electricity Regulatory Commission which is similar to USA's Federal Energy Regulatory Commission & Ireland's Utility Regulator. Pls review the article & provide your valuable feedback. Thanks in advance !!! (talk) 13:03, 15 July 2010 (UTC)
 * It starts well but all the tables and lists are very off-putting. Arguably the objectives and obligations should be kept as they are.  But you really need to think about the rest of the information.  Most of it can probably be dropped from the article but you should think about whether some of it is important and should be written about in normal prose - paragraphs and sentences, not tables and lists.  Yaris678 (talk) 17:03, 15 July 2010 (UTC)

Hi Yaris678, Thanks for your feedback. i like to justify to you that CERC is very well known for its regulations. I guess you are seeing the article just like an article about a person / place / company. But its not a process/product company, CERC is a power sector regulator who used to keep releasing Important regulations. Type CERC & google it then you will realise about the importance of regulations with the Media & Power industry people talking about it in every corner of the street. Thats is the rason why i included Regulations that too in table format for eye catching. For your info i like to emphasis that i have included only very important regulation (out of 100's) from CERC. Also i like to know your view/ suggestions on Paragraph Relation with Other Power Sector Bodies under CERC. Because CERC has very important relation or even sometimes governed by those bodies. Pls give your view on the writing. Waiting for your comments & positive feedback. Thank you once again for sparing time in reviewing my article.Raj6644 (talk) 06:32, 16 July 2010 (UTC)


 * Writing about the regulations that CERC are responsible for is obviously a good thing. However, it is usually best not to present such information in the form of a list.  Take a look at Manual of Style (embedded lists).  Yaris678 (talk) 07:44, 16 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Yaris678 i accept your suggestion. But still i feel like regulations speak a lot & it will be very use full to the users who search for those in wikipedia. At the same time, you can also have a look at this . i will try to put the things in a different way. Thanks your assistance. Raj6644 (talk) 08:57, 16 July 2010 (UTC)


 * Hai Yaris678, Now i have completely restructured the CERC Regulations part & i made it simple & neat. Also i have added one more topic Evolution of Tariff Determination & Role of CERC. Pls have a look & give your view. 10:40, 16 July 2010 (UTC)
 * I think that is an improvement. Have you read Manual of Style (embedded lists)?  It has some good advice in this area.  Yaris678 (talk) 11:39, 16 July 2010 (UTC)


 * Yaris678, to say honestly i focused a lot on contents of the article rather than formatting. I will try to spend couple of hours only for formatting. I will put my best to improve the article. Raj6644 (talk) 13:27, 16 July 2010 (UTC)

User:Bunchheather/William LeBeau
The issue I have is that William Titt is more commonly referred to as William LeBeau. Thus, I am trying to create a William Lebeau page in Wikipedia, which can redirect to William Titt, or vice versa. I have never used Wikipedia, and I really have no idea the best way to go about this. Any advice? People will be searching on google for Lebeau, not Titt!

Bunchheather (talk) 15:17, 15 July 2010 (UTC)
 * A redirect for William Lebeau already exists. It goes to William H. Lebeau.  Try doing typing William Lebeau in the search box and see what you get.
 * I think what you want is not a redirect but disambiguation. There are different ways of doing disambiguation.  You could change the redirect page to be a disabiguation page or you could have a hat note on William H. Lebeau saying something like William Lebeau redirects here.  For the gymnast see William Titt.  The latter is probably what you want.  See Template:Other uses templates - documentation
 * Yaris678 (talk) 17:42, 15 July 2010 (UTC)

User:Tswelch/ManagePro
I'm requesting comments/suggestions on making this article (User:Tswelch/ManagePro) non-biased, and not sound like advertising. I work for the company and I understand that anything I write can and has been seen as blatant advertising. That is not my intention. This article has been created and subsequently deleted in the past under (User:Scanplan/ManagePro). There are several differences between these two articles. I appreciate any responses that would help in creating a non-biased article that meets the standards of wikipedia. Thanks.

Tswelch (talk) 16:54, 15 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cindy_McTee
Any comments would be much appreciated.

KokotheDog (talk) 17:17, 15 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:NV2OR/Federalreporting.gov
This is a short article describing the system that collects information for the American Recovery and Reinvestment Act. I want to get this online and have the community improve it.

I have not had any feedback on this. Can we post the article?

NV2OR (talk) 19:13, 15 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Anthems_(Kerry_Ellis_album)
More and more is being added, and I think it's being appreciated by other people now.

Stephenjamesx (talk) 20:01, 15 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Pegasus_Prize
Added this page (my first) after editing the Cees Nooteboom page, which referred to the Pegasus Prize. Would welcome feedback on what I did incorrectly!

Darcykildare (talk) 20:17, 15 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Albert_Fisher
This article about Albert Fisher was created based on family history research that I've conducted. I'm looking for feedback on ways that I can improve this article. Thanks in advance!

Tim

Millers2000 (talk) 21:31, 15 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Boundary11/FutureFibreTechnologies
Security organisation responsible for advancements and developments in fiber optic sensor, optical fiber and artificial intelligence technology. Feedback and comments greatly appreciated.

Boundary11 (talk) 23:40, 15 July 2010 (UTC)