Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 July 18

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Philiptdotcom/Tectococcus_ovatus
Just wanted to make sure that this looks okay for inclusion.

Also, I can't figure out how to get rid of square brackets showing up in ref#3.

Thanks!

philiptdotcom (talk) 10:45, 18 July 2010 (UTC)


 * First off, that's a fine stub you've got there. I've had a little tinker with it and removed the square brackets from ref#3, and generally tidied it up. I reccomend adding a Template:Taxobox to the article, but other than that, I think it's ready to be published. Very well done.  Wacky Wace  you talkin' to me? 17:09, 18 July 2010 (UTC)


 * Excellent job with the references, as well. I would say try and add categories but once you move it someone else is likely to do that for you. Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 11:45, 20 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks, all, for feedback; finally got the page moved to 'live'... philiptdotcom (talk) 03:14, 9 June 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:FrankFlanagan/RTL/2
I have written a first draft of an article on the RTL/2 programming language and would appreciate somebody having a quick look to give me an opinion as to whether or not it is pitched about right.

This is my first attempt at a full Wikepedia article so if you could also tell me if I have committed any cardinal sins it would be much appreciated.

Many thanks,

Frank Flanagan

FrankFlanagan (talk) 13:32, 18 July 2010 (UTC)

Hi

I m not a long term user of Wikipedia but your article seems well built. I would add a definition in each chapter to explain what they are, that would be more understandable by non professionals or just curious people

regards
 * Good article, but try and find some more references if you can. Also you can remove the example.com external link as it's only there to show you how to add external links, hence the name. Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 11:41, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sri_Perungaraiyadi_Meenda_Ayyanar_Temple
Hello there, please add in your comments to this article. I appreciate your time. Palanisamy Veerasingam (talk) 15:07, 18 July 2010 (UTC)


 * Good work, appreciated. If you have Masi Makam photos with Garlands, add them. Kumar S (talk) 18:29, 18 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Try and add some extra references, if you can, however. Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 11:39, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

e.g. User:Example/Lipsum or Cats or http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Example/Lipsum
Futuresuccessor51 (talk) 18:15, 18 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Designedge/Ursfelber
is this article ready to go into mainspace? There is no move button!

Designedge (talk) 19:36, 18 July 2010 (UTC)
 * I think the article is great, except some of the references could do with a suitable name, like this:

As to moving the article, you can also just cut and paste the whole article over to something like Ursfelber. Firstly, go to the article and then click 'edit this page'. Then click in the edit window and press either Command-A (on a Mac) or Ctrl-A (on a Windows). Then go to something like Ursfelber and then paste everything into there. If you don't understand this send me a message and I will do my best to do it for you. Thanks. Chevy monte  carlo  - alt 11:37, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

Charles Deburau
I wonder if this article can be rated ("B" or "C", etc.) and the "unreviewed article" tag removed. Many thanks.

Beebuk 23:42, 18 July 2010 (UTC)

I wondered when this would be "hatched".

I removed the unreviewed tag.

More comments shortly.-- SPhilbrick  T  00:18, 20 July 2010 (UTC) My comments are rather picky - mainly because this article is in such fine shape:
 * "Typical of his post-Funambules pantomimes is Champfleury's Pantomime of the Attorney, which takes last (pride of?) place in the Goby collection." The parenthetical comment hints of Original Research. (In contrast, the parenthetical following "lovers do what all lovers do" was fine.)
 * "This is the first unarguably "tragic" Pierrot of the nineteenth century, or of any century previous." This sounds like an important claim, and perhaps is supported by footnote 36, but if not, it begs for a citation.
 * "(Charles Deburau would have regarded it as apostasy.)" begs for a citation.
 * There are two references in which Storey is an author, one includes a middle initial, one not. While both versions (plus a third with middle name spelled out) can be found, I suggest choosing a consistent treatment (absent some compelling reason for different treatment).-- SPhilbrick  T  00:57, 20 July 2010 (UTC)


 * Many thanks for the help! Let me address the comments:


 * I assumed that the question mark in the parenthesis would signal my own uncertainty about the "authoritativeness" of the assertion: i.e., I don't know whether the placement of the pantomime in the collection is significant or not (though the fact that it was written by Champfleury, the only "celebrity" among Deburau's librettists, would tend to give weight to the supposition). Maybe a word about Champfleury's significance in the footnote would help matters here.
 * Yes: it's an important claim, and I'll enlarge upon it in a footnote.
 * Again, a footnote is in order: I'll add one.
 * The author of Storey's first book includes the middle initial "F."; the second does not.
 * Many thanks again for the astute reading. Beebuk 01:32, 20 July 2010 (UTC)


 * May I presume on your time once more? I wonder how the various pages I've been working on--Pierrot, Jean-Gaspard Deburau, Paul Legrand, and Charles Deburau--can be ranked (as part of either the biographical or the theatre Wikipedia projects)?  Beebuk 11:20, 20 July 2010 (UTC)