Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 July 19

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jasoncohencanada/Enter_your_new_article_name_here
I would like to post an article for which a reputable company wrote about. A method that is new to the construction industry (non-explosive demolition agent), and trying to make people aware of this general new technology.

Jasoncohencanada (talk) 00:24, 19 July 2010 (UTC)
 * There are several problems with the article. Firstly, consider adding sections to the article, like this:

Early life
Also, adding links to other articles would be a good idea as well. For example Apple creates a link that leads to the Apple article. Chevy monte  carlo  08:08, 19 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ohio_Automated_Rx_Reporting_System_(OARRS)
I'd like some feedback on this article as it is my first. Thanks in advance!

SyrichRX (talk) 01:59, 19 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Well-written, well-referenced, well done! You've put a lot of work into this and it shows. Another reference or two would give it even more weight, but overall a very good effort.  Piano  tech  15:44, 19 July 2010 (UTC)


 * Thanks! But how do I get the box that says "New Unreviewed Article" off of my page?
 * SyrichRX (talk) 03:44, 21 July 2010 (UTC)
 * I'll do it for you, since I've reviewed it now :) Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 10:19, 21 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Pam_Wolf
Lombardimaxh (talk) 02:45, 19 July 2010 (UTC)

Brian Whittingham
Please review my article so that it can have template removed from site. Thank You

ScotlandLiteraryLady (talk) 04:21, 19 July 2010 (UTC)
 * The article is good, but definitely needs more references. One reference is generally not enough to give an article weight and notability. See WP:Reliable references and Notability (people) for more information on this. If I can be of further help, let me know. :) Piano  tech  15:50, 19 July 2010 (UTC)
 * On further review, I notice that you actually cite three references, not one. However, they do not appear as inline citations (think "footnotes"). To properly format the references, read WP:Referencing for beginners, which shows you the code to use for inline citations (it's pretty simple!). I hope that helps! Piano  tech  15:59, 19 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Scenario%28_Pedagogy%29
Thank you PianoTech. This is my first article I will look at what you have suggested and tidy it up. Your help is much appreciated. Hello, Thank you.

AllanTong (talk) 09:34, 19 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tomgreenpr/Black_Soul_Strangers
Hi, I've written a neutral article about a band called Black Soul Strangers (please note, I'm not in the band). They are very credible and have been on Radio 2 and in Rocksound, Uncut, Artrocker, Total Guitar, MI Pro, Big Cheese, Hot Press and Shortlist.com over the last few months. Their debut album was released on 5th July which is now why I think they are worthy of a Wikipedia page.

The article is fact based but I'm struggling on how actually to show the credible sources. (I have jpegs of the print coverage in the above magazines but I don't konw how to work out the format of uploading this to the site.

Any help would be greatly appreciated

Tom Green 07855 939 486 tomgreen81@googlemail.com

Tomgreenpr (talk) 13:05, 19 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Hello! You wouldn't want to upload images from magazines anyway because that would violate copyright guidelines. Even though the pictures are yours, they are pictures of copyrighted material. References don't necessarily have to be online; they can be to print magazines and books. Of course, they still have to be notable references. Just use the referencing code to cite the book and magazine references. To cite properly, you can find the coding at WP:Referencing for beginners; it's simple to do. :) If you need any help, let me know and I'll do my best. :) As to the article, it would probably read easier if it were broken into a few sections. Just a suggestion. Hope that helps. Piano  tech  21:47, 19 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Template:Mainpage
I want to post a page of this organization as many of its competitors have a page and I believe consumers should have more information available to them when researching software to utilize and incorporate into their organization.

Techiegrl2 (talk) 13:29, 19 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Hmm, you seem to have it in the wrong place (Template:Mainpage). It should be at CampusEAI Consortium, but the article already exists, so I'll move it to User:Techiegrl2/Draft so that you can work to add the information to the already existing article, CampusEAI Consortium. The the article is actually pretty good though. Sorry for the confusion! ~ Qwerp Qwertus ·  Contact Me  · 03:25, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/MyMajors
Please review, I created from the Article Wizard and have 8 independent references. Please let me know if I should add additional information and/or references. This page is about MyMajors, I heard about it from a national conference, which helps students find a college major and was founded in 2002. A retired IT professor from the University of Nevada, Reno created MyMajors because he interviewed counselors, advisers, admissions reps, and academic scholars and found a need in academic advising for counselors to help their students. Please message me if you have any questions or feedback. Thank you

Meghanp42 (talk) 15:59, 19 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Hi there! The article subject seems notable enough, given the references you've provided. I notice the categories you added at the end of the article are redlinks, meaning they link to categories or pages that don't exist. You definitely want to correct those, but other than that I'd say you did a pretty good job. :) Piano  tech  00:02, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Restore_America%27s_Estuaries
Please review for sources and neturality

Dchensummer (talk) 16:04, 19 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Nice article. Consider adding suitable names to the 4th, 6th and 8th references, as they are the only ones that have no names yet. Other than that I think there's nothing really wrong with it. You have clearly got to grips with creating an article. Well done! Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 10:21, 21 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Corey_Stapleton
Adcreative (talk) 16:36, 19 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Queen's_executioner_Beetle
A few -most probably far too many- questions concerning an article -my first- that I have recently uploaded, a response would be greatly appreciated.

Does this article fit the notability guidelines?

Does this article remain on - topic?

Are the citations appropriate and do they provide sufficient explanation?

Is there any original research?

Thank you for any response.

Apologies if questions are repeated; do not yet fully understand wiki - markup!

Laika1097 (talk) 17:23, 19 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wright_Etch
Please porvide comments on this article. The Wright Etch is a preferential etch for revealing defects in (100) and (111), p- and n-type silicon. Oxidation- induced stacking faults, dislocations, swirl, and striations are clearly defined with minimum surface roughness. A relative slow etch rate (~1 micron/min) at room temperature provides etch control. The long shelf life of this etch allows the solution to stored in large quantities.

B sunnie (talk) 18:22, 19 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Georgia_Farm_Bureau_Federation
Am having trouble getting the logo to show. Language is quite convoluted on why it will not display and i can't figure out how to make it work. I am the "logo protector" in this organization and so I have the authority to decide where it is used. (paul@gfb.org)

Piomajor (talk) 19:52, 19 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hamblen_Drive,_Armstrong_County,_Texas
Hello. I've just created my first wikipedia page, and would like some feedback. I would like to change the title, however, from "Hamblen Drive, Armstrong County, Texas" to simply "Hamblen Drive", but am unsure how to do so. I appreciate you taking the time to read this and welcome any comments. I will add pictures to this article soon. Thank you.

Fourbears2010 (talk) 20:23, 19 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Personally I think you should keep the article's title as it is as I think it's more descriptive. As to the article itself, I made some corrections to the external links as you made a few mistakes with the formatting, but that's fine. I think you should try and add more links to the article. For example, Apple creates a link to the Apple article like this - Apple. Also maybe consider adding an infobox of some sort, such as Template:Infobox location or Template:Infobox road. Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 10:41, 21 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Brooklyngirl11215/the_panic_zone
I've created a userpage for a new thriller novel by author Rick Mofina. If someone could provide feedback about whether it meets wikipedia guidelines, I would appreciate it.

Brooklyngirl11215 (talk) 20:29, 19 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Excellent. I think you should try and add an infobox, such as Template:Infobox novel or Template:Infobox book. Also maybe add names to the references as well, so the reader will have more of an idea of what the links are, such as this:


 * Hope these tips are helpful. It definitely looks like an interesting article. Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 10:32, 21 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Redbnr22/Roger_Enoka
I would like some feedback on my article so that it might be added to WP. I just added 4 refs to add credibility.

Redbnr22 (talk) 21:42, 19 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Consider adding suitable names to the references, such as this:


 * Also maybe add an infobox to the article, such as Template:Infobox person or Template:Infobox professor. Thanks. Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 10:29, 21 July 2010 (UTC)