Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 July 20

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wearetheincrowd
Jonathan Greth 02:16, 20 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Consider adding some more descriptive names to the references, like this -

It gives the reader a better idea of what the reference is. Chevy monte  carlo  08:24, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

e.g. User:Example/Lipsum or Cats or http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Example/Lipsum
Dear sir/ma'am,

Greetings!!

This is my 1st try to write article in Wikipedia. Thanks for giving me the opportunity to write in Wikipedia. Please tell me if you have any suggestion for me.

Thanks and Regards,

Cbil360 (talk) 04:52, 20 July 2010 (UTC)
 * I can't find the article that you want to review. Please add a link in the section header, where the example links are. Thanks. Chevy  monte  carlo  16:28, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

Richmond Shakespear
I haven't created many articles before, and so I'd appreciate an experienced eye. One thing I was unsure about is what categories this articles should be added under.

Jztinfinity (talk) 05:08, 20 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Well, regarding the categories you can either not bother (You can just tag it as and someone else will eventually come and add categories instead) or take a look at WP:Categories for the guidelines and some tips. To start searching for suitable categories for the article, you can start at Category:Categories, although as I've said already you don't have to bother.


 * As to the article, I think you should consider adding an Infobox, such as Template:Infobox person or Template:Infobox officer or something like that - you might want to search for some using the search box on the left of every WP page. Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 11:51, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Scenario%28_Pedagogy%29
Hello, I would greatly appreciate it if someone could look at this article and perhaps point out what could be improved. This is my first article so I would be delighted if it got published. Thanks a bunch.

AllanTong (talk) 11:33, 20 July 2010 (UTC)
 * I think all the links to each issue can be replaced with just one paragraph about where the issues can be found, rather than separate sections and links. Also I think an infobox would be a good idea. You might want to use a template like Template:Infobox magazine or just use the basic Template:Infobox and modify it yourself. If you are unsure about this or have any more questions, please send me a message. Thank you. Chevy  monte  carlo  16:31, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Urs_Felber
Any feedback for this page? also, how do i add languages and disambiguation? (when typing just felber in the search box, other people show up on the list but not urs felber)

regards

92.106.119.146 (talk) 11:45, 20 July 2010 (UTC)
 * I've added a link to the article on the disambiguation page for you. Disambiguation pages exist because there are multiple articles around with the same or similar names. Other than that issue which I've sorted for you, I think the article is brilliant. Well done! Chevy  monte  carlo  16:36, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

salmonellosis from little known source-exotic reptile pets
Article summary: a lesser known source of salmonella infections- Salmonella rubislaw carried by exotic reptile pets/contact with reptiles. Questions Should I include more hyperlinks? Should I place the reference numbers IN the article instead of after the article.

Aladdin (talk) 14:40, 20 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Sorry, I'm not sure what article you want reviewed. Please provide a link to it here if you can. Thank you. Chevy  monte  carlo  16:51, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Barry_Bonds_756th_Home_Run
Please help me out with this new article. A picture would also be greatly appreciated. Thanks.

173.87.175.107 (talk) 18:51, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

Please review proposed article for form and content. While I have edited a few in the past, this is my first new article.

Here is a press reference showing its worthiness:

http://www.nytimes.com/2009/12/27/theater/27tambor.html?scp=1&sq=carol%20tambor&st=cse
Sorry, please ignore this - don't know how to delete it.

Klawson510 (talk) 18:52, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Klawson510/Carol_Tambor_Best_of_Edinburgh_Award
Please review proposed article for form and content. While I have edited a few in the past, this is my first new article.

Here is a press reference showing its worthiness: [edit] http://www.nytimes.com/2009/12/27/theater/27tambor.html?scp=1&sq=carol%20tambor&st=cse

Klawson510 (talk) 18:59, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

Hamlin Robinson School
Just writing an article on an important school in the Seattle, WA communtiy.

SergeyS87 (talk) 19:30, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:140.98.210.243/IEEE_Certified_Biometrics_Professional%C2%AE_Program
Hello, I am trying to add a page about this Certification Program but I am receiving a lot of errors regarding it being too "salesy". Could anyone help me with my wording to make it less like an advertisement? I've done everything but strip out all pertinent information.

Thank you!

CBPclaire (talk) 20:12, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Emily_Nasrallah
I've hit a wall with this article, this is about all the info i managed to gather, i'd love it someone could review it for grammar and style. id like also to know if it could be a GA candidate thanks

Eli +  20:21, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:VancoD/Chris_Sanders_(musician)
Merely looking for feedback on this page before I take it live. I realize there is not a lot of content, but open to suggestion as this is my first Wiki entry.

VancoD (talk) 20:25, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Fine_Gardening_(magazine)
Thanks for any feedback on this new article. I'm still learning and would appreciate any constructive criticism or direction.

ErinNik (talk) 20:51, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Leigh_Bishop
Please review my article so that it can have template removed from site. Thank You

Graham Theakston (talk) 21:15, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Beyond_Design,_Inc.
I just posted a new article on Wikipedia and it says that it needs to be reviewed by someone now. I am requesting that you review my article about Beyond Design, Inc.

Jessrae (talk) 21:18, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:%E6%B7%98/Plateau_Systems
This is the second version of the article. I revised it following the comments I got for the first version and the exmaples of http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Learn.com and http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/PeopleSoft. Please kindly provide your feedback and help me improve it. Thank you so much!

淘 (talk) 21:28, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Matthew_Rosenlund
How do i get this thing removed second time adding this to here.

207.81.39.233 (talk) 23:52, 20 July 2010 (UTC)

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