Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 June 23

User:Dnacional/Bob_Turner_For_Congress
Can you please advise me on how I can get this article published and Robert (Bob) Turner listed in Wikipedia. He is running against Anthony Weiner for the 9th Congressional District (NYC) this November, 2010 and it is critical that biographical information is available to voters for this election.

Dnacional (talk) 02:22, 23 June 2010 (UTC)
 * Please consider adding more reliable references to the article, preferable using something like citations. For more information on references in Wikipedia articles, please take a look at WP:CITE. I have added some more useful names to the external links, and removed the example.com link, as it is only there to show you how to add external links correctly to articles.


 * As to further improvements, I think you should try and maybe add more links to the article. You can do this by placing  around the link that you want to create. For example, Loughborough would create a link that, if clicked, would take the reader to the Loughborough article (links on Wikipedia usually appear in blue, by the way). Links help make the article easier to understand, so please try and add some if you can. I recommend maybe starting with the place names first. Thanks, and if you have any more questions feel free to send me a message on my talk page. Thanks again :)  Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 12:02, 23 June 2010 (UTC)

Borko_Temelkovski
Borko Temelkovski (1919–2001) was a Macedonian politician and political leader born in Prilep, Yugoslavia. This article is his short biography - work in progress. I need some feedback, so it can become regular Wikipedia article.

Mtemelk (talk) 02:49, 23 June 2010 (UTC) I think your article is excellent RoryHC (talk) 22:31, 23 June 2010 (UTC)

Asmatullah_Rohani_is_a_prominent_Afghan_judge,_educator,_a_lawyer_and_distinguished_writer_and_poet.
Asmatullah Rohani is a prominent Afghan judge, educator, a lawyer and distinguished writer and poet.

Rayhan999 (talk) 03:44, 23 June 2010 (UTC
 * Hmm - I can't seem to find it. Can you provide another link? ~ Qwerp Qwertus ·  Contact Me  · 01:11, 24 June 2010 (UTC)


 * Here it is. Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 12:00, 24 June 2010 (UTC)
 * Okay, I improved the article a little bit. I think you should work and add more links and reliable references. Please see WP:CITE for more information. Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 12:05, 24 June 2010 (UTC)

User:Theavantguardian/The_Republic_Of_Wolves
I am just seeking general feedback on this article I created. It is for an indie rock band from Long Island, New York that has just recently started gaining popularity.

Thanks QwerpQwertus. So, I did that. Now how do I get this page to actually show up on Wikipedia?

Theavantguardian (talk) 06:15, 23 June 2010 (UTC)
 * Good job, though I'd delink all the red links that you don't intend to make or think somebody else will make. ~ Qwerp Qwertus ·  Contact Me  · 01:14, 24 June 2010 (UTC)


 * To get the page onto the main Wikipedia area, you just move it to The Republic Of Wolves or whatever you want to call it. Just copy and paste the whole article after clicking 'Edit this page'. There's probably an easier way to do that but that's the only way I can think of! Thanks and I hope you understand. Chevy  monte  carlo  - alt 12:02, 24 June 2010 (UTC)

User:Gman9000/Matt Gannon
I just wanted to know how I could formate it better because it seems to not be looking right thanks.

Gman9000 (talk) 09:37, 23 June 2010 (UTC)
 * I fixed it, but I don't think that he meets notability guidelines - a person must be somewhat well-known or have done something important to have an article, and you'll need to cite them being mentioned in big websites and newspapers. Sorry - there are many other topics to write about, however! ~ Qwerp Qwertus ·  Contact Me  · 01:19, 24 June 2010 (UTC)

User:Pianotech/Master_Piano_Technicians_of_America
I've revised this article on the Master Piano Technicians of America. I believe the subject is notable because MPT is a major trade association of piano technicians, and an article does not currently appear on Wikipedia. The biggest problem I am running into is that there is little information about MPT other than from their site that I can reference, since there are not a lot of articles about them on the 'net. I am also still learning how to reference. Any comments/suggestions to help make this article ready to go live would be greatly appreciated. Thanks!

Pianotech (talk) 11:56, 23 June 2010 (UTC)
 * I believe that it's notable, but before putting it into mainspace, you should add at least a few big references to prove it. It most likely would eventually be deleted otherwise. Content-wise, it's pretty good, though you might expand it and add an infobox. If you want, I can help you with adding the references. Good job though! ~ Qwerp Qwertus ·  Contact Me  · 01:23, 24 June 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for the feedback and input. I'm new to this and I think I accidentally have two feedback requests going for the same article. I appreciate your compliments and help. I figured out how to add references and now am working on how to add categories. My main sticking point right now though is references. All I can come up with is the org's homepage, which I realize is not enough. I'll keep trying; in the meantime, thanks for the help! Pianotech (talk) 02:11, 24 June 2010 (UTC)
 * You're welcome! ~ Qwerp Qwertus ·  Contact Me  · 02:25, 24 June 2010 (UTC)

OK, I've added additional sources and references. Think I can go with it?Pianotech (talk) 20:02, 24 June 2010 (UTC)

User:Mdehrey/The_Israel_Center_for_the_Treatment_of_Psychotrauma
I am writing an article about a non-profit organization called "The Israel Center for the Treatment in Psychotrauma." The article includes information about the organization's background, the specific units within the organization, and the administrative staff.

Mdehrey (talk) 12:08, 23 June 2010 (UTC)
 * I suspect that there may be some WP:COI issues with this article. It's not bad in terms of the structure, however there are issues with the tone, i.e. phrases such as 'world recognised innovators' is a breach of WP:NPOV policies. - Reconsider  !  12:54, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

John_Apea
Lawkillssoul (talk) 13:02, 23 June 2010 (UTC)
 * Nice work. There are some minor issues with the referencing (1) you can't use another article as a source, (2) external links should not be placed in the body of the article. - Reconsider !  13:05, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

User:Ferryca/MaYoMo
Hello! I would like to create an article about MaYoMo.com - a website for citizen journalism that is gaining popularity very fast. This is my first article ever, so I'm not sure if all is done the right way. What do you guys think? Could someone please take a look? Thanks in advance! :)

Ferryca (talk) 13:27, 23 June 2010 (UTC)


 * I'd say it looks pretty good. Some things I'd like to point out:
 * In the "Content" section, there is an extra space inbetween each "paragraph" (I put that in quotes since their length hardly qualifies them as one, though there's nothing wrong with that of course). Instead of two spaces, there should be one.
 * I'm not sure if you just put it there for now, but when it comes time to move the article into the mainspace (aka make it an actual article), you'll want to remove your signature from the bottom of the page, since signatures are not to be placed on pages.
 * You did link to several reliable sources, which is, as I see it, a pretty good number of sources for an article the length of yours when it comes to verifying it. In terms of whether or not it establishes notability, it looks fine to me, but you can always find more to further meet the criteria for the inclusion of articles about web content. I tried quickly looking for more just to see what I could dig up, but you seem to have found the best ones; the only other ones I could find were mostly blogs.
 * Hope that helps, ~Super Hamster  Talk Contribs 01:07, 27 June 2010 (UTC)

Hello, SuperHamster! :) Thank you so much for the detailed feedback. Ferryca (talk) 10:48, 28 June 2010 (UTC)
 * About the spaces between the paragraphs - sorry, I didn't notice they are two, I tried to make the article look more pleasant for the eye :) Okay, so I will remove the extra ones.
 * About the signature - ahhh, I really didn't know that I shouldn't place it there :)) At the end of the editing space there was this option to mark it with your signature with the 4 of "~", and I thought I should do that before saving it :)) Silly me. Now I figured out that the signature is just for talk pages, like this one, right? I will remove that too.
 * About resources. Yes, these were the best ones I could find different from blogs. I've read a lot about the references that are accepted as notable ones, and it was strictly pointed out that blogs cannot be used. However, do you think these three are enough to move the article to the "mainspace"? Whenever it's there, I can place a link to the Infobox of a screenshot of the site (I did few days ago, but it was deleted by a bot, because the picture was not linked to an "existing article", or something like that) and also a logo - there's a "media kit" at the site where logo's can be found. Thanks again!


 * No problem, glad I could offer it. You're correct about signatures - they belong only on talk pages whenever you leave a comment.
 * Regarding notability: IMO, there is a limited amount of coverage, but just enough that, if the article were to be the subject of a deletion discussion, I would offer my view that it should be *weakly* kept. The sources given are reliable, and the San Francisco Chronicle is the one that I think is the best. Alas, I tend to hold a slightly more "inclusionist" view when compared to others. If you feel like going for it, you can put it into the mainspace. Even if it is put up for deletion and is deleted, you'll know that you positively contributed regardless ;) What I think would be a good option for you would be to relist this article for feedback (as I doubt that many others are reading this) and ask specifically about what others think about the article in terms of notability; after all, basing your decision solely based on me is probably not the best idea.
 * As for the image being deleted: The image was a non-free image, which means that its use must be very limited to only articles where it is necessary to visualize the subject. If they aren't used, they are deleted as a result. Once the article is in the mainspace, you can re-upload the images and place them in the article.
 * Hope this helps. ~Super Hamster  Talk Contribs 04:20, 30 June 2010 (UTC)

Hello again! Thank you for the support, for the feedback, and for the time spent with that article. I will follow your advice and relist it for further feedback in terms of notability.
 * Have a good day/night! :) Ferryca (talk) 21:05, 30 June 2010 (UTC)

User:Dagrahamster/John_L_Notter
I posted this article once and got some great feedback, which I incorporated.

Can someone please help me move this into article space of let me know what still needs to be done? Thank you

Dagrahamster (talk) 14:11, 23 June 2010 (UTC)
 * Looks good, and I see you realized you could move it yourself.-- SPhilbrick  T  21:30, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

Patsi_Arias
This is a brief article about news anchor/host Patsi Arias

DVH1 (talk) 14:36, 23 June 2010 (UTC)
 * It was not a good decision to move this from user space to article space—it is my understanding that bios without references can be deleted on sight quickly . You should try to add references from reliable sources to support Notability as soon as possible.-- SPhilbrick  T  21:35, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

University_of_Chicago_Comprehensive_Cancer_Center
I have written this article and would like to make it a permanent part of your collection. Thanks so much.

Nolinger (talk) 16:36, 23 June 2010 (UTC)
 * The draft has potential but does need some work. The WP:TONE is not right, see Peacock. You might also look at articles on other hospitals for guidance. Please also check out Article Layout; you shouldn't be using paragraph and bold tags.-- SPhilbrick  T  21:24, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

Cape_Fear_Community_College_Construction_Management_Technology
May I please have some feedback regarding how to make this article better or more interesting? Jbegue (talk) 16:56, 23 June 2010 (UTC)
 * To be honest, I'm not seeing a very clear reason why we need a separate article about this particular program; we don't have separate articles about any other individual program at Cape Fear Community College. What we need to see is references in reliable sources (media, books, etc.) to demonstrate why this program is notable enough to have a separate article instead of a redirect to the main article on the college. Bearcat (talk) 21:52, 28 June 2010 (UTC)

Request for feedback
Hi there, can someone help me with this short article? I'd like to know if it's good to post live?

Kombat Mobile

Many thanks, Alda

Aldalo (talk) 17:08, 23 June 2010 (UTC)

ShootingStarsProductions
Hi, I'm trying to get some feedback for this article. Shooting Stars Productions is a youth sports portraiture company. They are a prominent part of the growing Dogpatch community of businesses and residents in San Francisco, CA.

Ichibanhuguenor (talk) 18:09, 23 June 2010 (UTC)

Bhavan's_Vidya_Mandir_(Poochatty)
Hi,

I wrote an article about the high school I studied in. Please review it. Advance thanks for everything.

117.204.96.18 (talk) 19:31, 23 June 2010 (UTC)

Jones Pharma
This is the initial article for Jones Pharma. I'm unable to remove the userspace draft heading. I am asking for feedback if I have provided too many sources or links

Entrepreneuradvocate (talk) 19:41, 23 June 2010 (UTC)
 * One mention in a book does not come close to meeting the Notability guideline. You need to show evidence this company has received significant coverage in reliable sources -- SPhilbrick  T  17:07, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

Blurpalicious
I have created this page about a social bookmarking website. I plan to create wiki pages about more similar sites, but I need your feedback and guidance on this first one. I also need someone to add the site logo if possible. Thanks!

Zddom (talk) 21:13, 23 June 2010 (UTC)


 * Unfortunately, this article is very weak in terms of meeting the Notability guideline. There are only two references, both of which are not much more than directories identifying that the company exists. You need multiple examples of references in reliable sources discussing the company, and not just in passing.


 * The site features are not referenced, so they read like they were written by someone associated with the organization. That may not be the case, but you need independent coverage (not company website) sources to cite the information.-- SPhilbrick  T  00:13, 24 June 2010 (UTC)

Uncrowned_%28band%29
I am looking for suggestions on how to improve the page and if it is ready to go live with the information given.

Sythas (talk) 21:47, 23 June 2010 (UTC)

Terrain.org
Please review and remove the new page tag so this page on the online journal Terrain.org can be added to Wikipedia, thanks. I used the article wizard in creating it and tried to make the wording as neutral as possible. Thanks much.

Sbuntin (talk) 23:32, 23 June 2010 (UTC)

Richie_Chance
I have about 20 hyperlinks in this article but it says it is an orphan with little or none hyperlinks. How do I fix this?

SaharaHite (talk) 00:01, 24 June 2010 (UTC)


 * When an article is deemed an "orphan", it means that other articles do not have links to your article. The best way to fix this is to find articles which are relevant to your article, and integrate links pointing to yours. But remember not to just blatantly insert links; make sure they are relevant. Eric Leb 01 (Page &#124; Talk)  00:16, 24 June 2010 (UTC)