Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 November 2

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/John_W._Flores
I wrote an article and posted it a couple of days ago about a living writer named John W. Flores of Albuquerque. I know him well and he has made a great impact over the past 20 years and especially in recent years with his work, as a journalist and author, and I added many reliable sources to the article. But Wikipedia said the article may soon be deleted due to lack of sources. I added many, with their internet addresses. And can add quite a few more. Could someone review this page and let me know what I need to do to make it Wikified?

Thanks.

Rowena Flores

Christine2901 (talk) 01:57, 2 November 2010 (UTC)
 * The link you provided is not a link to a Wikipedia article. Please find the correct link. Thanks!
 * Found it! Your article looks well-written, however, it needs to be "wikified". Try looking at some other articles, and make your article look like those. Bold the subject in the first sentence, add some links, and divide it into sections.
 * When you are reading an article and see a references section near the bottom populated by a series of numbered citations, you might think that if you edit the page, you will see those citations typed in that section and be able to edit them. However, normally what you will see is code similar to this:


 *  ==References==
 * or 

The text of citations is actually in the body of the article, directly next to statements or paragraphs the citations support, using tags, which display as footnotes (e.g. [1][2] ) when you are reading an article. The template code shown above in the references section colates and displays all of the citations within the article in a numbered list in which the numbers correspond to the footnote numbers in the text. By clicking on the ^ symbol next to a citation display, you can easily find exactly where in the body of the article the citation text appears in order to edit it. For more, please see Referencing for beginners.

Hope this helps, mⓞnⓞ 03:16, 2 November 2010 (UTC)

Brisbane Housing Company
Please review this page, I am not sure how to ensure all the images fit within Wikipedia's regulations and guidelines.

Jasmine1805 (talk) 02:09, 2 November 2010 (UTC)


 * A couple of big things:
 * The article has several issues, ranging from the minor (needs wikification) to the moderate (written like an advertisement and over-reliance on one source) to the severe (possible lack of notability). I have placed a tag on the article indicating this.
 * The images need to be tagged with where they came from and a description (see Template:Information for details) AND an appropriate copyright tag (see WP:File copyright tags and WP:Non-free content for details).
 * If you need any additional help, please leave a note on my talk page. -- Bk314159 (Talk to me and find out what I've done) 19:01, 5 November 2010 (UTC)

User:Uporoff/Sherman%27s_Dam_%28Hinkson_Creek,_Columbia_Missouri%29
Uporoff (talk) 02:59, 2 November 2010 (UTC)
 * There is not article called "Sherman's Dam" so there is no need for the parenthetical phrase. That is usually used for disambiguation, not needed in this case.
 * You have no references. Please add some. See Referencing for beginners for help. (You have two items listed in a Reference section, but you need to use footnotes to show the source of the material in the main article.
 * The link in the External links section is an example to show you how to create one - if you have some place them here, if not, remove the section.-- SPhilbrick  T  19:47, 5 November 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/This_Is_Home_%28Every_Breath_Is_Magic%29
ArdieAutoExtreme (talk) 03:36, 2 November 2010 (UTC)
 * Article has been deleted.-- SPhilbrick  T  19:37, 5 November 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Belle_Isle_Park_Raceway
ArdieAutoExtreme (talk) 03:49, 2 November 2010 (UTC)
 * Article has been deleted.-- SPhilbrick  T  19:37, 5 November 2010 (UTC)

Chen_dongsheng
Biography for ChenDonghsheng, oil painter from Jiangxi, China. Gaining rapid prominence.

Supertrooper1986 (talk) 05:49, 2 November 2010 (UTC)
 * You have no references. Please add some. See Referencing for beginners for help. Biographies of living persons without references can be deleted. Make sure you have a copy saved someone, in case it gets deleted before you can add a reference.-- SPhilbrick  T  18:55, 5 November 2010 (UTC)

Aerial Stem Modifications
Will I get help in fixing pictures on my article"Aerial Stem Modifications" ? I have written a small article on "Aerial Stem Modification" Ill be editing it frequently to make it more profitable..I want help in fixing pictures to this article

Pearl 93 (talk) 07:07, 2 November 2010 (UTC)
 * Please read Article Layout in parricylar, and peruse Manual of Style generally.
 * You have no references. Please add some. See Referencing for beginners for help.
 * Please address the basics, if those can be fixed, we can help with pictures.-- SPhilbrick  T  18:46, 5 November 2010 (UTC)


 * The best advice I can offer is to look at other plant articles and click on the 'view history' tabs. This will allow you to see which editors have an interest in this field. Leave a message on their talk page asking them to review what you have written and how it may or may not fit into other existing articles. It is my feeling that there is an existing article that covers this topic but currently I don't know where. Possibly here: Plant_morphology?--Ykraps (talk) 19:11, 5 November 2010 (UTC)

State Universities Retirement System This page describes the State of Illinois' pension program for all public universities.
I am requesting feedback on the style and citing of the page.

Wrg20 (talk) 13:50, 2 November 2010 (UTC)

Click here for article.--Ykraps (talk) 17:32, 5 November 2010 (UTC)


 * Firstly you need to establish that the company is worthy of inclusion in an encyclopaedia (see WP:Notability). Is 68 a typo? Secondly, the references need to be from third party sources, so the company's own website is not acceptable (see WP:Reliable sources). I can't really comment on the subject matter as it didn't really 'grab' me. I would advise sorting out those two issues first and then seeking further feedback.--Ykraps (talk) 17:46, 5 November 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/East_Street_Arts
Is this page okay?

92.27.118.164 (talk) 14:07, 2 November 2010 (UTC)


 * The article needs a bit of a tidy up. Wikipedia often prefers prose to bullet points. Start with a good intro that explains what the company does and how it does it. Yes it provides support and opportunities in visual arts but how is this acheived? The history section could do with some expansion. You might like to talk about the background of the people who set it up. The notable projects sections would be better broken up under sub headings (not bullet points) by title not date. Another major problem are the references, many of which come from the company's own website or bloggs which don't count as reliable (See WP:Reliable sources). Newspaper articles are good to use as sources as they help to establish notability (see WP:Notability). If the company is a registered charity it should have a registration number which can be used to verify its charitable status, so it will be a good idea to include this somewhere. Hope that helps, regards--Ykraps (talk) 17:16, 5 November 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Fibitz/Mars_black
No current info on Mars black pigment, and needs disambiguation from musician Mars Black (not sure how to do this).

Fibitz (talk) 14:39, 2 November 2010 (UTC)
 * I fixed the wikilink. See Help:Link for more info on how too use them.
 * You need more references to reliable sources to demonstrate Notability. You have one, but one is rarely sufficient.
 * External link s don't count as references, although it is possible some might be usable.
 * Consider adding an info box, see Ochre for an example of a color info box (I note ochre is both a pigment and a color ; I'm unclear whether the pigment Mars Black has also an associated color).
 * Regarding disambiguation, this is done with a Hatnote, but that should happen after the article is ready. Also, this article can be moved to Mars black(pigment) --  SPhilbrick  T  16:13, 5 November 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Computer-supported_collaborative_learning
Please take a look and let me know if there are any changes to be made.

Kootron (talk) 16:20, 2 November 2010 (UTC)
 * Generally looks good, nice rewrite
 * In the Collaboration Theory section, there is a direct link to a PDF, I think you know how to fix this, if not, just ask.-- SPhilbrick  T  15:46, 5 November 2010 (UTC)

Hand Coolers or http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:FauxClaud/Handcoolers
Just looking to see if this will work to go live?

FauxClaud (talk) 17:17, 2 November 2010 (UTC)
 * The article isn't quite live yet (it's still in your user space). This page is so that users with new articles can get feedback and suggestions as to how their article(s) can be improved. As to the actual article, you can add links to other Wikipedia articles just by placing   around the word you want to link to, rather than linking the URL like you have done. Also, I do think the article contains quite a fair bit of original research, which perhaps need to be looked at as well. I hope my comments are useful, and good luck with your article!  Chevy  monte  carlo  21:41, 3 November 2010 (UTC)

Specular holography
I've put an article up on holography using an alternate physical principle (ray optics instead of wave optics). Comment on form & content most appreciated. Images to be added in a few days as time & web searches permit.

Comphoto (talk) 17:49, 2 November 2010 (UTC)
 * I think the article is coming along nicely but I do think the 'Overview and History' section could perhaps do with some more sections being added (simple bold text would be fine, please contact me if you need any help with that). Nice job with the references though! Chevy  monte  carlo  21:36, 3 November 2010 (UTC)

User:Scottb1010/Copiun
Once finalized and moved, I plan to link this article to List of Backup Software and add Copiun to the list. Please comment on general acceptability. thank you.

Scottb1010 (talk) 19:33, 2 November 2010 (UTC)
 * I've made a few formatting improvements to the sections, if that's okay, but I do think you need to add more references in addition to the ones you already have. I think you also need to be careful with the article's tone, as it's very easy to make articles like these sound like just like advertising brochures, which are not really suitable for Wikipedia. Thanks! Chevy  monte  carlo  21:31, 3 November 2010 (UTC)

HIT Character Appearance Program
Can anyone tell me why my article and all of my edits have dissapeared!!? Help!

OasisEvents123 (talk) 22:47, 2 November 2010 (UTC)
 * You have no references. Please add some. See Referencing for beginners for help.-- SPhilbrick  T  15:35, 5 November 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/IBSEAD
Hi,

I wanted some feedback on this article. This article reviews the IBSEAD algorithm in machine learning. This algorithm has been published in the IJCSET journal ( reference [1] in the page:- http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/IBSEAD ).

This is a good article and lists authentic sources. I request you to tag this page and help in making it posted permanently.

Thanks,

Jbdundas (talk) 23:06, 2 November 2010 (UTC)
 * First, too much bold! See Manual of Style
 * The main reference has yet been published, this article may be premature.
 * You need to establis Notability with multiple references to this algorithm in reliable sources. So far, you have none.-- SPhilbrick  T  15:30, 5 November 2010 (UTC)