Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 November 22

User:Bharat.mk/Torry_Harris_Business_Solutions
This article is about Torry Harris Business Solutions, a company identified as a leader in SOA by Forrester Wave in 2009 and a Cool Vendor by Gartner research in 2010.

Bharat.mk (talk) 04:21, 22 November 2010 (UTC)

User:Dmargolius/Email Banking
I would appreciate your feedback on this article describing a new kind of online banking

Dmargolius (talk) 13:25, 22 November 2010 (UTC)
 * I personally think the article could be just merged into the Online banking article. I think the opening section needs some work - it just reads like an essay. Chevy  monte  carlo  06:54, 23 November 2010 (UTC)

Thank you for your feedback. I have reworked the opening section. Is it OK to post? Dmargolius (talk)

Alternatively, how would you suggest merging it into the existing online banking article? Dmargolius (talk)

User:DaisyMae2005
Is this page ok to move to active status?

DaisyMae2005 (talk) 15:54, 22 November 2010 (UTC)
 * The article does need to be wikified, so to speak, because it lacks the correct formatting suitable for Wikipedia. I'll try and make some improvements for you, if you don't mind, as it's easier that making suggestions and explaining how to do it! :) I also think you need to work on adding more reliable references, wikifying the article more a little bit, and removing sections like the 'Accomplishments' sections, which I think just make the article sound like a CV than anything else. Chevy  monte  carlo  07:05, 23 November 2010 (UTC)

User:Lmaggiesmith/kristie'slaw revision
is a response to the multiple problems with http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kristie's_Law, please provide feedback before I submit.

Lmaggiesmith (talk) 16:32, 22 November 2010 (UTC)
 * I think you should perhaps incorporate your article into the existing Kristie's Law article perhaps, it might make things easier. There's nothing wrong with making major edits to an existing article. Chevy  monte  carlo  20:53, 26 November 2010 (UTC)

Cherry picking (basketball)
Can I get some help with this article? I worked very hard on it and I hope it will be successful. Any positive help or assistance on this article would be greatly appreciaited.

Thanks

Awolf58 (talk) 18:09, 22 November 2010 (UTC)
 * One suggestion I have as to improving your references is to perhaps add some names to them, like this:

It seems like a notable subject, so I'm sure you could maybe find some additional references if you can...perhaps you could start with some of the references used in the basketball article maybe...they might be related. Good luck! Chevy monte  carlo  20:50, 26 November 2010 (UTC)

Ebiquity
General feedback

Wwjx0p (talk) 18:24, 22 November 2010 (UTC)

QA Technologies - can you remove the statement that the article is written like an advertisement?
Dear Wikipedia Editors,

The article was edited some time ago to be written from a neutral point of view. On October 15th an editor kindly helped me to upload the QA graphic in the textbox, but didn't make any other mention of text edits at that time.

Can you or I remove the statement that says it sounds a blantant advertisement? Or can you please help me by making any changes you see fit or recommending what section for me to revise again?

Advance thanks for your help.

Suzy Huber (talk) 18:55, 22 November 2010 (UTC)
 * You seem to have found and removed that advertisement tag since, which is okay, because I don't see any immediate problems as to the neutrality of the article. Chevy  monte  carlo  21:01, 26 November 2010 (UTC)

User:lee-tree/Jussle
Hi. I have completely re-written the article (which is why there is no diff added) as suggested and would appreciate any assistance in what I need to do to allow the article to be added to Wikipedia. The article is fashioned after Wikipedia articles Cozi and Skate 3.

The article is about a cloud based software which reads email and places schedule events on a calendar without user interaction. This product is the first of its kind and is patent pending (There are no reliable sources to quote as the product does not exist according to a prior arts search for the patent application).

Thanks for your time.

Lee-tree (talk) 21:19, 22 November 2010 (UTC)

User:Mark_A._Hillman
I am trying to help a friend create a page about his boss. So far I have created a User Page, but I want to publish it live. Am I anywhere near being close to reliable or will my page be deleted immediately. I am brand new to Wiki and trying to learn how to use it correctly.

Mark A. Hillman (talk) 21:37, 22 November 2010 (UTC)

User:Fergusonian/RocketLawyer
Is this article a good, neutral starting point? Is it ready to go live? Fergusonian (talk) 23:02, 22 November 2010 (UTC)