Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 November 28

User:GRMcMaster/Gail_Sidonie_Sobat
Hi again,

I may have asked for feedback at the wrong site. I am creating the above article and would appreciate feedback. In the interests of transparency, I am a journalist who does know the subject.

Thx.

Rowat 01:17, 28 November 2010 (UTC)

Gecko
i have many mediterainian gechos at my house in richmond,tx / but i didnt see any one say they are in tx

i have many mediterainian gechos at my house in richmond,tx / but i didnt see any one say they are in tx / i have never used wiki before / i guess ineed help / this is jusy an obsevation at my house in richmond,tx / if anyone sees this my e-mail addy is kenaholt@hotmail.com

65.55.67.206 (talk) 01:45, 28 November 2010 (UTC)


 * You'd need to ask this question on our reference desk.


 * This page is to get new articles reviewed.  Chzz  ► 23:59, 28 November 2010 (UTC)

User:Dacyksta7/Aston_Martin_Music
Written a new article on Rick Ross's latest single for a class project.

Dacyksta7 (talk) 01:54, 28 November 2010 (UTC)

Monte_Carlo_Methods_for_Electron_Transport
Toughpkh (talk) 07:10, 28 November 2010 (UTC)

Tr%C3%A8s.b
here is my first contribution! I moved it already, can you guys review it? Is it all fine? Let me know! Rockmysocken (talk) 13:22, 28 November 2010 (UTC)

User:Rapav/AcademiaSagradoCorazon
The Sacred Heart Academy in Santurce,PR has been an institution offering education to the community for just about 75 yrs. It is similar to another school with a Wikipedia entry, Academia del Perpetuo Socorro, and tended to serve the same communities for many of its 75 yrs. I created an article based on its history as documented in its 50th anniversary yearbook (1980) and its current website.

Rapav (talk) 14:56, 28 November 2010 (UTC)

Aftab Alexander Mughal
Aftab Alexander Mughal is a Pakistani journalist and a human rights activist. He is the editor of Minorities Concern of Pakistan, a monthly e-newsletter. For 13 years, he served the “Minority Rights Commission of Pakistan” and “Justice and Peace Commission of Pakistan” as National Director for Research and Publications and an Executive Secretary. From 1985 to 1992, he worked as Youth Director of Catholic Diocese of Multan, Pakistan.

He started his career as a journalist in 1979 and till 1985 he edited monthly magazines “Nishan-e-Rah” and “Mashal.” He has been working as a freelance journalist for various national and international magazines and newspapers. Moreover, he has been working for some news agencies as well. His main areas of interest are human rights, peace and religious freedom in Pakistan. In 1989, he has been awarded for his journalistic work by UCIP (International Union of Catholic Journalists, Geneva, Switzerland.) He has also awarded by UCIP with “International Award for Excellence in Journalism 2010.” The award was conferred at the World Congress which was held at Ouagadougou, Burkina Faso from September 12-19, 2010.

Born in 1956 in Muzaffargarh, Southern Punjab of Pakistan, Aftab has worked with many national and international civil society organizations, including Muzaffargarh District Minority Committee, the Amnesty International (AI), Human Rights Commission of Pakistan (HRCP), Pastoral Institute, Multan - Pakistan, Awaz Foundation, Pakistan Catholic Press Association (PCPA), National Commission of Christian-Muslim Relations of the Catholic Bishops Conference of Pakistan, Social Democratic Movement Pakistan, National Commission for Justice and Peace (NCJP), Freedom from Debt Campaign Pakistan and Jubilee Movement International in different capacities.

He has written a number of articles for local and international publications. He also has been contributing to various news agencies and has several books to his credit on minority rights issues including, “Death or Exile”, “From the Ashes of Shantinagar” and he is also a co-author of “Section 295 C, Pakistan Penal Code – Study of the History, Effects and Cases under Blasphemy Laws in Pakistan.”

Besides MBA, he holds a master’s degree in Political Science. He has widely travelled and represented Pakistan at regional and international conferences.


 * This not the place to post your article. See the Article Wizard to get started. Then post a link here to the finished article to get some feedback. -- &oelig; &trade; 01:48, 29 November 2010 (UTC)

William_Baldwin_(Journalist)
Can someone please look this new stub over and see if it ready to remove the clean-up template. Also, how can I make this article searchable through wikipedia and add this particular page to the list of articles on the disambiguation page. Thanks.

Chanfest22 (talk) 15:52, 28 November 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Smallbrook/Kelly_Quealy_%28choreographer%29&oldid=399347695
Is this article sufficiently clear to go "live"? If not, can it be made so by deleting some of the text? If so, what text should be deleted? Can any of the sources be removed to shorten references list, on the strength of the other parallel sources? What can be done about reliable sources whose records/databases will be wiped out over time, such as websites?

Smallbrook (talk) 17:24, 28 November 2010 (UTC)

Paul McDonald (Writer)
I've already had some useful comments on this in user space, and it's been deemed 'good to go', although if anyone can think of any more improvements I'd welcome suggestions (it's only my second piece).

Dandilion Dave (talk) 18:21, 28 November 2010 (UTC)

Pin Point recruitment Junior Football League
PPRJFL (talk) 20:02, 28 November 2010 (UTC)

Tain_%26_District_Field_Club
Please review this new page which is dedicated to the Tain & District Field Club. Thank you

Please review this new article which is dedicated to Tain & District Field Club.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Tain_%26_District_Field_Club#External_links

Thank You Phil Olson

Muymalestado (talk) 20:41, 28 November 2010 (UTC)


 * The article is much too promotional in tone. It needs to be rewritten from a neutral point of view and in an encyclopedic tone. It also needs to assert notability, needs to be wikified, and needs categories. I recommend moving this to your userspace where you can work on it. -- &oelig; &trade; 01:25, 29 November 2010 (UTC)
 * I've gone ahead and userfied it for you. You can find it here: User:Muymalestado/Tain & District Field Club. -- &oelig; &trade; 01:28, 29 November 2010 (UTC)

Willim_Welsyn
Alfa Somers (talk) 20:52, 28 November 2010 (UTC)


 * You forgot to add Categories! Also consider adding a WikiProject banner to the talk page to give it exposure to a wider group of editors. -- &oelig; &trade; 00:59, 29 November 2010 (UTC)

User:Widhnwlas/superhydrophobe
added the simple model to predict the effectiveness of a hydrophobic surface (reference 9), with equations and picture

added a few paragraphs about tunable wettability (2nd and 3rd paragraphs in recent research) references 19 and 20

Added more to the first paragraph of potential applications, references 25 and 26

Widhnwlas (talk) 21:26, 28 November 2010 (UTC)


 * I'm assuming this is an update to the existing Superhydrophobe article? I recommended posting at the article's talk page where other editors of that article can comment on your improvements. Most of that stuff is way over my head :) -- &oelig; &trade; 00:54, 29 November 2010 (UTC)

Marcus_Noble
New Article, need feedback. Haven't got much sources, just links.

Snowie22 (talk) 23:21, 28 November 2010 (UTC)


 * Good start. Just needs some expansion and minor tweaks in style. I recommended reading up on the WP:MoS. -- &oelig; &trade; 00:50, 29 November 2010 (UTC)