Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 October 30

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I've just typed my first wiki page, and am looking for feedback.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:1967dmc/EMNS,_Inc.
1967dmc (talk) 03:13, 30 October 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Animal_Rights_Zone_%28ARZone%29
Hello all,

I'm very new to Wikipedia and was hoping to get some advice on aspects of this article which may be problematic to Wiki, and, hopefully, garner some advice on improving this.

Thanks so much for any advice you're willing to give!

Carolyn2602 (talk) 10:55, 30 October 2010 (UTC)

Stoichiometry
I'd like some recommendations on how to promote Stoichiometry at least to B class, as in the last year it has been rewritten for readability to be accessible to non-technical readers. To me it seems to have good coverage and be referenced, and the Start class no longer makes it justice.

Diego Moya (talk) 13:42, 30 October 2010 (UTC)

Refractory lined expansion joint
Please provide feedback on my new article.

SylvIba (talk) 15:39, 30 October 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Yochay/new_article_name_here&action=submit
hi. i need help doing simple stufe. first i want to name my article lily@pepper i want to upload a picture that should go in the square on the right and i want to find out why doesnt all the information that i wrote in the squre apear there. i want to post my referce for the information in the article which is:

reference for the spread of babytv around the world -    http://www.babytv.com/around-the-world.aspx reference that lily&pepper is broadcast in babytb  -     http://www.babytv.com/lily-pepper.aspx reference that sharon animation created lily&pepper -   http://lilyandpepper.com reference for a hebrew viki site for lily&pepper    -      http://he.wikipedia.org/wiki/%D7%A9%D7%A8%D7%94_%D7%95%D7%A6%D7%99%D7%A3_%D7%9E%D7%92%D7%9C%D7%95%D7%AA

thanks alot yochay

Yochay (talk) 16:32, 30 October 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Svdlwiki/Enter_your_new_article_name_here&oldid=393298487
Svdlwiki (talk) 17:28, 30 October 2010 (UTC)
 * I'm concerned about whether she meets ourNotability standards, which require multiple references in reliable sources. You have included three references, but only one is online, so it is difficult to determine her notability. The one that is online appears to discuss Marshall, not Susan van der Linde. By it's placement, I'm guessing the third reference is also about Marshall as well. It is not a requirement that references be to online material, but if you tell me that both magazine article are primarily about van der Linde, as opposed to minor mentions, that will still be borderline.
 * Your final sentence requires a reference to show that it is verifiable.-- SPhilbrick  T  20:39, 3 November 2010 (UTC)

Rescue "The Arrival of the Visitors"
Can review my Article of this videogame in development by Darkleaf Entertainment??

Alieneks (talk) 20:40, 30 October 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rebecca_Tobey
Hello,

Thank you so much for reviewing this article on Rebecca Tobey. I would be open to any suggestions for improvement.

Best,

Weaverb12 (talk) 21:18, 30 October 2010 (UTC)

Seema Parihar User:Wiki_admin_nyc/Seema_Parihar
First page to wiki, can you give me you comments.

Thank you

Wiki admin nyc (talk) 22:34, 30 October 2010 (UTC)
 * A biography claiming the subject leads a gang, enages in robbery and is a bandit needs to be impeccably sourced. While you have some decent references, you have included them as if they are external links. Please read Referencing for beginners and/or footnotes to see how to properly cite the claims.-- SPhilbrick  T  19:24, 3 November 2010 (UTC)
 * I'm also sorry to report that your username is probably not acceptable. See Username policy. One option is to request a new name, however, given your low number of edits, the better approach will be just to create a new account.-- SPhilbrick  T  19:30, 3 November 2010 (UTC)

PUT TITLE HERE within Commentaries on the Constitution of the United States by Joseph Story e.g. User:Example/Lipsum or Cats or http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Example/Lipsum
I have added an article on Joseph Story's Commentaries on the Constitution of the United States. I gave a general discription of the commentaries, the preface, the dedication, and the three books. I gave information about the editions and the abridgments. I referenced Story's Life and Letters, Newmyer's biography of Story, and an introduction in a reprint of Story's abridged commentaries. I believe I have written a neutral article with pertinent fact, and I have reference my material.

Taikohediyoshi (talk) 01:43, 31 October 2010 (UTC)