Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 September 11

Dulcis_foetidus
Page relating to botantical Dulcis foetidus from South America in relation to polination method and in comparison to Amorphophallus titanium (Titan arum) and Rafflesia arnoldii. Reference made to VOC production in role of pollination.

Cody primavera (talk) 16:32, 11 September 2010 (UTC)


 * Hm; I'm a bit suspicious of this article, at the moment. A species...but nothing on Google, except for a rather obscure presentation at "British Science Festival". No Google News, etc. There is no genus called "Dulcis". Durio dulcis is a type of Durian, which is quite smelly.


 * If the thing was only discovered recently, how come it is in a book from 1973? And if it is in that book, why is there no other information on the internet about it?


 * Where does this information come from? When the active volatile organic compounds from these plants are reduced to extract they are smaller in lesser in olfactory units than that removed from the much smaller Dulcis foetidus flower. This is a single flower of modest size, peaking at a mean height of approximately 45 cm (18 inches).


 * So, OK, it was in a presentation thing, yesterday poster PDF YouTube. But is there any actual information about it, published anywhere?  Chzz  ► 06:19, 16 September 2010 (UTC)

The species is fake, and the PR about it before this week is all cover; it is all a psychology experiment. A notable one. 69.3.72.249 (talk) 02:24, 19 September 2010 (UTC)


 * Article nominated for deletion: Articles for deletion/Dulcis foetidus, so now is the time to find out if it is notable. It is a recent event, so maybe too soon to know if notable.  69.3.72.249 (talk) 15:10, 19 September 2010 (UTC)

User:Alexed1/Alex_Edelstein
Looking for general feedback. This is my first create.

wmbsh (talk) 17:31, 11 September 2010 (UTC)

Infernal Underground: "The Project Rescue"
Plese can review my article about the game of Darkleaf Entertainment ??

Thanks

Alieneks (talk) 21:17, 11 September 2010 (UTC)

Alf Bigden
Hi, I'd just like some feedback on this, my first article. It's regarding a UK based drummer who was rather well known in the 1970s and 1980s. I've added a few sources, which I hope are sufficient. Any feedback at all would be most helpful!

Sweeney4547 (talk) 21:27, 11 September 2010 (UTC)
 * A few points:


 * Maybe try and add an infobox, just to summarise the key points about this person.
 * Use sections to break the article up into more easily-readable parts - If you need any help with that, please contact me over on my talk page.
 * Be careful with the article's tone and language style - Wikipedia articles are supposed to be neutral in tone, and not sound like advertisements. Chevy  monte  carlo  15:54, 13 September 2010 (UTC)

Thanks a lot - that's excellent feedback! I've done the infobox and split the article into sections, and it definitely does read better. Could I possibly ask for more specific advice about the tone of the article? I'd like to keep it neutral, as you suggest.

Sweeney4547 (talk) 10:45, 14 September 2010 (UTC)

User:Google_Child/Darren_LaCroix
Hi all, I would appreciate any feedback on the article and how to make it better. Thank you! Google Child (talk) 23:48, 11 September 2010 (UTC)
 * Perhaps try and add some names to the references and external links, like this:

I hope you understand, but if you have any questions or comments, please send me a message. Thanks! Chevy monte  carlo  15:49, 13 September 2010 (UTC)

Sobrato_Tower
Jatkins679 (talk) 02:51, 12 September 2010 (UTC)
 * Try and add some more descriptive names to the references, and also perhaps a picture if you can! Chevy  monte  carlo  15:50, 13 September 2010 (UTC)