Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 September 18

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Richard_Hatem
I would appreciate any feedback you can provide on the article so that it can be safely taken live. Thank you InteractSM (talk) 16:39, 18 September 2010 (UTC)
 * I went to review the article and got carried away. I ended up copyediting it, forgetting I was just supposed to review it. Sorry, I have the flu and a scattered brain at the moment. I reviewed the "See also" links provided and used those as references, removing the cleanup tag indicating that it was an unreferenced biography of a living person. I changed the lists to prose and added sections. I also found a date of birth and added that, along with a quote from UCLA. I removed the wikilinks added as references, since WP is actually not considered a reliable source, since anyone can edit any article at any time, reliability cannot be guaranteed or secured. At this point, the article could use an image and more content, but I looked for an image and was unable to find one that indicated appropriate permissions for use on WP. Great job! (Hope I helped somewhat.) Cindamuse (talk) 20:59, 19 September 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ktraino1/Nerd_Girl
I'd love some feedback on how this entry is coming along. Thanks!

Ktraino1 (talk) 21:14, 18 September 2010 (UTC)
 * I don't think the article's subject is notable enough for a Wikipedia article to be written about it. Try and add more reliable references to the article in order to prove the article's notability. The best way to display these references are by using inline citations. Other than the references, I also think you need to add more sections and maybe also some links to other articles as well if you can. I hope you understand. Chevy  monte  carlo  06:32, 21 September 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your input :) I was trying to work on some of your suggestions and may have taken a step backwards.  After my revisions, I posted another request for feedback (I didn't think of coming here for some reason) and Chzz's comments got me even more confused and flustered, especially in regards to secondary and primary sources.  Chzz hasn't been able to answer my questions so I was hoping you could help me.  I do want to try to make this article work.  In this particular case, I am wondering what makes my sources (outside of Nerdgirls.com, of course) seem primary?  Thank you for your help.  If you need more information please let me know -- my assumption is that you have access to everything from here but I might be wrong :)

User:Cxds1991/Yorkshire Children's Hospital Fund (YCHF)
I would appreciate any feedback on this page so that it can go live. Thank You!

Cxds1991 (talk) 23:22, 18 September 2010 (UTC)
 * At the moment the article sounds like an advertisement for the organisation. Try and make it sound more neutral in tone, if you can. Chevy  monte  carlo  06:30, 21 September 2010 (UTC)