Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 September 2

I'm looking for someone to review the new page I created for harmonica blues player Mark Hummel. Thanks for your help!
Smokehousebrown (talk) 01:44, 2 September 2010 (UTC)
 * Hmm, it's quite well written. There aren't any pressing concerns, but I would recommend that you find some more third party references.- Reconsider !  13:51, 2 September 2010 (UTC)

Nicely written and referenced. Looks Good!Tofutwitch11 (talk) 12:12, 3 September 2010 (UTC)
 * There's a lot of information there, and it's nicely organised, but I agree with Reconsider's point about maybe adding more references from third parties, i.e. not just pages to do with the article's subject. Chevy  monte  carlo  08:56, 5 September 2010 (UTC)

User:BlackImperial/Young_Jonii
Is it correctly formatted and organized,and I also need help with the names.. for IPA_for_English

BlackImperial (talk) 03:28, 2 September 2010 (UTC)
 * The formatting is correct, but the artist doesn't seem to meet the criteria of WP:MUSIC. Could you provide a source to verify his association with Island/Def Jam? - Reconsider !  13:56, 2 September 2010 (UTC)

- Yes.... BlackImperial (talk) 20:00, 2 September 2010 (UTC)

http://itunes.apple.com/us/album/baby/id390935446?i=390935451&ign-mpt=uo%3D4

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bhaktirasa/Ronnie_Nelson
Ronnie Nelson is running for Colorado State Representative HD5 does this article qualify and have merit? There are references to him in the Denver Post

Thanks for the feedback.

Bhaktirasa (talk) 07:58, 2 September 2010 (UTC)

Maurice Valency
This is a brand new (unreviewed) article. The New York Times obituary cited in the References so perfectly summarizes the life of Mr. Valency that you could hardly do better than to copy the entire thing into this article. But we cannot do that--can we?? What does an editor do in such cases? I am stumped. I have more material to add to this article, but I am going to wait until I get some feedback. Incidentally, I searched for most references in other articles to Valency and added the appropriate links to this article. (I had already placed these same remarks on the Maurice Valency talk page).

Foobarnix (talk) 16:42, 2 September 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/%22Night_Sky_%28play%29%22
Jdlewallen (talk) 17:08, 2 September 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/JC_MacNeil
Just wondering if this is up to general standards for an article as it's important my talent has a valid and accurate Wikipedia page with a new television show currently shooting all over the country people have been asking why there is little presence on the internet. I've used a couple of different types of sources including published articles and video. I truly appreciate your feedback.

76.216.229.189 (talk) 18:15, 2 September 2010 (UTC)

Ipas_(organization) Feedback needed
Created this page Ipas_(organization) sum]] because the organization Ipas is referenced in multiple places on wikipedia (including being a primary reference for other wikipedia articles) but there was no primary wiki page for Ipas itself. I do work for Ipas but have written article as factually as possible, included multiple references to external sources, and have revised the content after it was initially tagged as "promotional" in nature. Please provide feedback that would help to align the article to wikipedia standards. I also added a disambiguation page to distinguish between Intelligent Parking Assistance System, India Pale Ales (IPAs) and Ipas (organization).

Choiceforall (talk) 18:21, 2 September 2010 (UTC)

User:Caitlinmcfeely/Children's Health Fund
Looking to see if page listed above is considered valid and is ready for posting. Caitlinmcfeely (talk) 18:35, 2 September 2010 (UTC)
 * I think that basically the article is fine. For some editors, there may be a bit too much content that is not based on third-party sources, but as far as I can tell the organization seems notable enough. The article needs cleanup, especially the references, but I think you should be good to go. Don't forget: when you go live, use the "Move" function to preserve the article history. If you don't know how to do that, drop me a line on my talk page. Good luck. Drmies (talk) 19:02, 9 December 2010 (UTC)

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I've read how to do a hanging indent, but can't get it to work. Can someone please explain that to me? I'd like to use hanging indent for publications that take more than one line, and to replace the extra spaces between reviews by a hanging indent. Thanks!

Eboepple (talk) 20:49, 2 September 2010 (UTC)

Hanging Folders
I would love to add reliable sources, but since this is a topic of common knowledge for most people who work in an office I am not sure how to accomplish this. I thank you kindly in advance for your advice.

Ktaylor1986 (talk) 20:59, 2 September 2010 (UTC)
 * It's a nice little starting point for an article, but I think it could do with being merged into the Filing cabinet article, as has already been suggested on the page. Chevy  monte  carlo  08:51, 5 September 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/O2_Media_Inc.
This article describes a company involved in producing branded entertainment, infomercials, paid product placement and other related marketing methods. Would appreciate feedback on whether the article is properly sourced and constructed.

Brandonair (talk) 23:22, 2 September 2010 (UTC)
 * This link doesn't appear to lead to the right article. Are you sure that is the correct link? Thanks. Chevy  monte  carlo  08:50, 5 September 2010 (UTC)

Joseph Nicholds
Any comments or feedback on my article greatly appreciated. Hope to put up a picture soon.

Fynnjamin (talk) 13:13, 3 September 2010 (UTC)
 * A few points:


 * Try and add some web references - the printed references you have at the moment are great, but it's always nice to have some web references as well - they can be very useful to the reader.
 * Consider adding an infobox - you can use a template like this one. It helps to just summarise the key points about the article's subject.
 * Finally, maybe try and add some sections to the article - for example,

Early life
creates a section with 'Early Life' as the name. It helps to break up the article and make it easier to read. Chevy monte  carlo  08:48, 5 September 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Mcki6534/Sir_Rod_Entertainment&oldid=382692513
Just making sure I have enough reliable sources and content before submitting.

Sir Rod Entertainment Group is an American entertainment company started in 1995, that hosts charitable and non-charitable events. It is wholly owned and controlled by Rodrick Walker and is based in Austin, TX. The most notable event hosted by Sir Rod Entertainment is the Annual NFL Celebrity Weekend benefitting Dell Childrens Medical Center, Women Called Moses Center for battered and abused women & children, and the Boys and Girls Club of Austin. This charitable event takes place in Austin and includes a celebrity basketball game, casino night and autograph signing session to raise funds for these organizations. [1]

Mcki6534 (talk) 16:07, 3 September 2010 (UTC)
 * Try and add some names to those references, like this:

Also, there seems to be a problem with the images somewhere, so if you can fix that it'd be great. Chevy monte  carlo  08:40, 5 September 2010 (UTC)