Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 April 28

User:Podoco/Neil Slater
I got this information off of his website. Now i would like to post it.

Podoco (talk) 03:05, 28 April 2011 (UTC)


 * Greetings, taking info off someone's own website doesn't quite work. At worst, it's WP:COPYVIO if you take it word-for-word. At best, it's using WP:Primary sources, which don't really prove anything since folks can say whatever they want on their website. What you want to do is prove the assertions with independent, reputable, substantive coverage from books or news/academic articles. This is absolutely mandatory for biographies of living people to avoid libel. To see what kind of referencing is needed, check WP:Music (notability). Feel free to post back in this thread with any questions. MatthewVanitas (talk) 03:44, 28 April 2011 (UTC)

User:Architectsea/Saint Thomas School
I would appreciate comments on form and content of this article before going "live". Thanks.

Architectsea (talk) 04:16, 28 April 2011 (UTC)


 * Greetings, I'm not at all familiar with schools article, but recommend you read Notability (schools) and give your article a look over to see if you feel you've met all the benchmarks laid out there. Likewise WP:Schools. MatthewVanitas (talk) 04:24, 28 April 2011 (UTC)
 * For full details and recommendations on creating school pages, please see WP:WPSCH/AG. Help is also available at WT:WPSCH. We are quick to respond.

I was not familiar with the recommendations on creating school pages - thanks! I believe this school is sufficiently noteworthy for both a school and a building recognized for its leading edge educational and sustainable design. I will continue to review and improve the draft further. I appreciate the input. Architectsea (talk) 02:50, 29 April 2011 (UTC)

Gainful employment
Please review the article on Gainful Employment. The sources are verifiable. I just haven't been able to understand how to link multiple parts of the document to one source, so some of my sources are listed multiple times.

HappyFeelings2011 (talk) 04:27, 28 April 2011 (UTC)


 * Greetings, the answer you seek is in WP:REFNAME. Cheers. MatthewVanitas (talk) 16:51, 28 April 2011 (UTC)

Thank you MatthewVanitas - I found WP:REFNAME very helpful, and now have linked my sources. HappyFeelings2011 (talk) 21:50, 30 April 2011 (UTC)

User:Architectsea/Esquimalt High School
Architectsea (talk) 06:01, 28 April 2011 (UTC)


 * See my reply to your other request above, and you need to fix your WP:Bare URLs. MatthewVanitas (talk) 18:21, 28 April 2011 (UTC)
 * For full details and recommendations on creating school pages, please see WP:WPSCH/AG. Help is also available at WT:WPSCH. We are quick to respond. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 00:28, 29 April 2011 (UTC)

I appreciate the input. There is also a note in my draft about this school not meeting the notability guidelines. The Notability guidelines (schools) say that (and I paraphrase) in general all secondary schools are considered notable, and that in the US and Canada this includes High Schools of grades 9 and above. This school meets that criteria. The guidelines also require external citations - I believe this school article also meets that criteria. If I am missing something I would appreciate more input. I will clean up the bare URLs. Thanks Architectsea (talk) 03:00, 29 April 2011 (UTC)

User:Leora-l/Ric_Militi
I would like to know if my article is good enough to post and if I have built it correctly. Thank you for your time.

Thank you very much for your feedback. I have made tweaks as suggested and I hope the article is ready to go live. I checked on the IMDB site and it appears that the information is not user generated but supplied by the industry. Also, I have made ISBN numbers of books that list the subject of the article as back up for the IMDB links. How do I push the article live if you agree that it is ready? Leora-l (talk) 06:34, 28 April 2011 (UTC)


 * A few minor format tweaks and you'll be good. You need to add WP:Categories (specific, not "film", "America"), you're using === subsection markings where you should use == section markings (you need sections, and subsections are a rank below that) . Last, for neatness, you want to "tuck" your links into your titles in the footnotes like so: You just put single brackets around the link and title both, and leave a space before the title. Nice work overall; your footnotes are awesome, except that I think IMDB doesn't count as a WP:Reliable source since it's user-submitted, but you might want to check on that in WP:Notability (film) and/or WP:FILM. MatthewVanitas (talk) 16:56, 28 April 2011 (UTC)

User:Judy Seidman/Anita Parkhurst Willcox
Thanks yet again Mathew; have tried to improve the lede and correct the web-links; also (in a fit of exuberance) added a few more pictures, which I feel "says it all", plus responded to a comment a colleague made about spelling out Anita's changing use of her maiden vrs her married name (hopefully this will address possible confusion).

Also, I have attempted to draft another article on artist Thami Mnyele (at User: Judy Seidman/Thami Mnyele draft) - this one being proposed replacement for a stub already there (which is actually not too accurate); I have tried to pick up on the editing points you made re. Anita in this one too. I am hoping (sometime) to do an article on Medu Art Ensemble as well.

I look forward to responses on Anita, and on Thami if you feel up to it -- the help is very appreciated.

Judy Seidman (talk) 14:22, 28 April 2011 (UTC)


 * At this point, I'd say "tuck" your links on the two footnotes showing URLs (was it #s 10 and 11?), bullet the individual items under "Murals", and then publish. If you don't get a response on Thami by next week, feel free to repost it on some day next week; I'm trying to stir up more editors to come help out here so I'm not the guy holding down the fort. MatthewVanitas (talk) 18:15, 28 April 2011 (UTC)


 * Oh, you're also jumping to sub-sections (three = signs) too soon; sections (double =) come first, and triple = is used for sub-sections thereof. MatthewVanitas (talk) 18:16, 28 April 2011 (UTC)

TULIP Cooperative Credit Union
I've requested edits on this page several times as a draft and now just took it live. If there are any corrections or comments that can be made to help the page it would be greatly appreciated.

Dkinsella (talk) 16:57, 28 April 2011 (UTC)

User:BookEndsLA/BookEnds
This is my first posting and I would love if someone could review this and give me feedback on what I may be missing. Thanks you, Gayle Baigelman

BookEndsLA (talk) 17:40, 28 April 2011 (UTC)


 * I note your username is the same as your subject, so ensure you read WP:Conflict of interest. MatthewVanitas (talk) 18:09, 28 April 2011 (UTC)

User:PFSchaeffer/Dryad
This is an initial draft of an article about a scientific data repository; would appreciate feedback and comments. Also have had trouble getting the right copyright information inserted about the logo-- it is a non-free logo. Thanks.

PFSchaeffer (talk) 18:22, 28 April 2011 (UTC)


 * If it's a non-free logo, the choice in the drop-down menu for "Licensing" should be something like "Fair Use - company logo". MatthewVanitas (talk) 18:37, 28 April 2011 (UTC)

User:Yen at the Bridge/The Yukon Suspension Bridge
I have found reputable references and I believe the content is neutral please let me know if there is something more to do I don't want it to get deleted it was a lot of work.

Yen at the Bridge (talk) 21:43, 28 April 2011 (UTC)


 * The main issue is that it's not clear where the info comes from, and there is a slight promotional/advertising feeling to it. WP is not for tourist info, so we're more interested in the history, architecture, etc. of the bridge, etc. I've left a few tags of things to address at the top, particularly that you need WP:Categories (as specific as possible, so not "Bridges", "British Columbia"). MatthewVanitas (talk) 01:19, 29 April 2011 (UTC)

User:Hjimker/Enzyme Function Initative
The Enzyme Function Initiative (EFI) is listed on the Wikipedia page for the acronym EFI, but the page has not been created yet. I used the Wikipedia page for the Consortium for Functional Glycomics, another NIGMS Glue Grant Consortium, as 1) evidence that such consortia clear notability criteria and 2) as a guide on style and neutrality. However, I serve as the Executive Director of the EFI so this may be a conflict of interest. I thought it would be more efficient to create the page myself given my experience and then have it vetted by Wikipedia editors for neutrality instead of requesting creation.

Please advise if I should request that the page be created independently instead (with this as a starter?) and/or if other issues are noted. Thank you for your time and guidance.

Hjimker (talk) 21:58, 28 April 2011 (UTC)

User:44Columbia/Eugenia_Kim
Another Eugenia Kim page exists, but she is a hat designer who is not the same as Eugenia Kim, the author. Is there a way to differentiate? Also, mea culpa, but I do have a Conflict of Interest here; however, I also believe that the article is appropriate and has merit notwithstanding my COI, and it is substantially and carefully referenced.

44Columbia (talk) 22:16, 28 April 2011 (UTC)


 * You disambiguate with a title like "Eugenia Kim (author)". On the page of the other, you type: . MatthewVanitas (talk) 00:10, 29 April 2011 (UTC)


 * You need to fix your in-line external links; that is, during the article itself you should not have things like "National Writing Society." Links to outside sites belong only in places like the "External links" section. Also, you don't need the "br" tags in Wikipedia, just leave a blank line and it'll create a space. I made other mods and explained my changes, so use the History tab to see what I did. MatthewVanitas (talk) 00:15, 29 April 2011 (UTC)

Thank you MatthewVanitas. I created a new page Eugenia Kim (author) with your suggestions incorporated. I now need to delete the old page. And once I get this under my belt, I have a few more pages to create.


 * Not a problem, but in the future don't copy-paste pages, instead use the "Move" button to move them to a new title. When you physically copy and paste text, you lose the entire edit history of an article, because WP treats it as creating something "new". When you Move instead, the edit history and all other attachments move with the page, so definitely do that instead next time. Note that the Kim page is still in your userspace, not the articlespace, so you'll need to Move it to Eugenia Kim (author) when you're ready to publish it. MatthewVanitas (talk) 03:12, 29 April 2011 (UTC)