Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 April 3

Allen Young (writer)
I tried to create a disambiguation page to distinguish between Sir Allen Young that article is title Allen Young and my new article titled Allen Young (writer)....I know I made a mistake but I'm not sure what I did and what I should have done...I very much appreciate the help

Pjefts (talk) 02:47, 3 April 2011 (UTC)


 * I don't see any major problems; what concerns do you have? One minor thing: you may want to go on the Discussion page and add him to a WikiProject.  To figure out what to apply, try checking out a long-running article about a similar figure and see what Projects have added that article to their list. MatthewVanitas (talk) 13:42, 4 April 2011 (UTC)

Evelyn Grubb
Hi,

I have written a new article (stub) and need to get it reviewed.

Please also see my comment in the "Discussion Area" of the article.

Thanks,

Telemachus.forward (talk) 03:08, 3 April 2011 (UTC)

173.246.35.182 (talk) 03:05, 3 April 2011 (UTC)
 * I cleaned up some minor errors and removed the "unreviewed" tag. I think the article could still use a little wordsmithing though. Please get her dates and put them in parentheses after her name. That's kind of standard with biographies.


 * You did a lot of unnecessary work with your references. When you construct a "named" reference, after writing up the whole reference the first time, you only need to use the name thereafter; e.g. . But note the extra space and the way the tag is terminated. I edited the article to accomplish this so you can see what I did (and check for any unintended mistakes on my part). Tkotc (talk) 06:26, 4 April 2011 (UTC)

Nigeria Airways destinations
I'm actually needing feedback on this newly created article, in order to get the annoying message at the top of the page removed. The article does not differ from others listing airline destinations, and I've already edited a number of them. Any kind of comments will be much appreciated. Regards. Jetstreamer (talk) 04:44, 3 April 2011 (UTC)


 * Done. MatthewVanitas (talk) 13:35, 4 April 2011 (UTC)

Allen Young (writer)
Allen Young is a journalist who early in his career worked with the Liberation News Service...later interviewed Allen Ginsberg..at least this is a beginning..I hope other people will help fill this out

Pjefts (talk) 04:59, 3 April 2011 (UTC)
 * To me this seemed a well written article on an interesting fellow who has lived an eventful life. The only problem I can see is that the roving horde of deletionists is going to happen upon the article and ask, "Is this guy notable?" No doubt you're familiar with the basic rule (at WP:BASIC). OK, I put myself in their shoes and look through the article for the multiple published secondary sources of which he is the subject. Problem: they just didn't jump off the page and say, "Here I am!" Unless you make this clear, it's possible you will have some rough sledding ahead. Remember, it's not about what he did; it's about the publicity he got for it. Sadly. Anyhow, nice article otherwise, and good luck. Tkotc (talk) 05:44, 4 April 2011 (UTC)

Tony Christiansen
This article has been marked as a new article since August 2010. It has been properly and well-reference and I would appreciate some feedback to fairly remove this status. Thanks much!

115.135.113.90 (talk) 08:43, 3 April 2011 (UTC)

User:Shankarr1977/PALLURUTHY RELIEF SETTLEMENT
VALUABLE SUGESTIONS INVITED

78.93.35.174 (talk) 10:37, 3 April 2011 (UTC)


 * You need to properly footnote your article; your current list of sources at the bottom are not clearly linked to any particular facts you state above. What you want to do is place a footnote to a given link immediately following whatever fact is evidenced by said footnote. Please read WP:FOOTNOTES for some explanation of how this process works and how they are formatted. MatthewVanitas (talk) 13:07, 4 April 2011 (UTC)


 * I did some minor copyediting (spaces go after the period at the end of a sentence, not before), and also removed a sentence which predicted/recommended the future (which is not done on Wikipedia). It'd be good if you also included the date of founding.  When you publish the article, the title needs to be in standard capitalision (not all-caps), and you'll need to add categories.  But first things first, the sources need to be turned into footnotes. MatthewVanitas (talk) 13:31, 4 April 2011 (UTC)


 * Why are you both asking for review of a Userpage draft, and yet also posted the article here PRS COCHIN? The PRS article is not properly formatted or footnoted.  Please delete that version by copy-pasting the following to the top of that article page:  . MatthewVanitas (talk) 14:20, 4 April 2011 (UTC)

User:Karrattul/Dharmalok
This article is about Dhammalok (1892-1968), a Nepalese Buddhist monk who played a leading role in the revival of Theravada Buddhism in Nepal in the 1930s and 1940s. Would be grateful for any feedback.

Karrattul (talk) 11:24, 3 April 2011 (UTC)


 * It's a little dense, but the basic structure is good and it's well sourced; I'd go ahead and publish. MatthewVanitas (talk) 13:34, 4 April 2011 (UTC)


 * Really value your feedback. Will work on it some more, remove trivial details and streamline the article.Karrattul (talk) 10:30, 5 April 2011 (UTC)


 * Help. The "move" button doesn't work. Also, I would like to change the name of the article to "Dhammalok Mahasthavir" as the person is better known by this name.Karrattul (talk) 09:42, 8 April 2011 (UTC)

User:Karrattul/Dharma Ratna Yami
This article is about Dharma Ratna Yami (1915-75), a Nepalese freedom fighter, author and government deputy minister known for his radical views on social mores. Would be grateful for your comments.

Karrattul (talk) 12:05, 3 April 2011 (UTC)


 * Looks pretty good, definitely ready to move to the article mainspaces. Can you just hit the "Move" tab (next to the "watch page" star button) and just move it off your userpage and to a standard article title? MatthewVanitas (talk) 13:33, 4 April 2011 (UTC)


 * Thank you for reviewing my article. I will move it to the article mainspace.Karrattul (talk) 10:35, 5 April 2011 (UTC)


 * Help. I can't move this page either. I have written a number of articles and moved them to mainspace previously without problems. Thanks in advance.Karrattul (talk) 09:44, 8 April 2011 (UTC)

Zynga Poker
I just created an article for Zynga Poker. Would an editor mind reviewing it? Thanks.

JovanWelks (talk) 15:03, 3 April 2011 (UTC)

Carnival Magic (disambiguation)
Created my first disambiguation article. But need help completing, as uncertain of redirect protocol. Thank you.

Vitamin Zeal (talk) 16:52, 3 April 2011 (UTC)


 * Looks just fine so far; any question in particular? Did you check WP:Disambiguation for any answers to your questions? MatthewVanitas (talk) 13:14, 4 April 2011 (UTC)


 * Hi Matthew. Yes, I did, but still uncertain.  My question, Article search still directs user straight to Carnival Magic, vs Carnival Magic (disambiguation) or Carnival Magic (film).  How to clarify or redirect?  Thanks again.  (talk)

John Monash Scholars
New page on a major Australian postgraduate scholarship. I've just moved this page out of my user space and so it needs a review (and this is my first page so feedback would be greatly appreciated!)

Jonathankk (talk) 18:29, 3 April 2011 (UTC)

Collage
I created a new section called Collage in Film within this existing article. I would like some feedback about this article's style, organization and cohesiveness within the larger article. Thanks!

LaurenPen (talk) 20:20, 3 April 2011 (UTC)

Chandrakant Shah
The info-box on the right is not coming out right. Don't know how to fix that. Please help. The person I am writing about is a medical doctor/researcher.

CaptainDickie (talk) 22:01, 3 April 2011 (UTC)

Speed Your Love To Me
Help with formatting, image, referencing technique.

Laydsb (talk) 22:16, 3 April 2011 (UTC)