Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 August 11

Charter Amendment One (Gainesville, Florida)
Please read and review my article. It describes the causes and outcomes of a 2009 referendum in Gainesville, Florida that had both local and national significance. I have 10 sources so far.

Lephantome (talk) 00:06, 11 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Looks good. I removed the unreviewed template.-- SPhilbrick  T  13:23, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

User:Jtetrick/Athletes Without Limits
Is this sufficiently notable for a listing of Athletes Without Limits on Wikipedia? I'd like some help editing the article.

Thanks!

Jtetrick (talk) 02:42, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

User:MPIntl/ITMA (Internationale Textilmaschinen Ausstellung)
Dear editors, the article has been edited after feedback from user:miguel (thanks for replying!). References has been added. Please do provide me with further feedback if this article looks ok to move to wikipedia. Thanks!

MPIntl (talk) 06:32, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

Australian Citizenship Day
Australian Citizenship Day is celebrated each year on 17 September. Managed by the Department of Immigration and Citizenship, Australian Citizenship Day is an opportunity for all Australian citizens, whether by birth or by choice, to reflect on the meaning and importance of their citizenship. The day is used as an opportunity to think about what unites all Australians, to take pride in Australia’s democratic values and to celebrate the role citizens play in shaping the nation. This year is the 10th anniversary of Australian Citizenship Day

CCCE (talk) 06:37, 11 August 2011 (UTC) A couple comments;
 * Not enough references for a Day that has been in existence for a decade. Surely there should be hundreds of references discussing what takes place if it is a notable event.
 * You have two embedded links that should be converted to references. -- SPhilbrick  T  14:19, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

Motivations of Wikipedia Contributors
I've recently created this page and am still working on it. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated, for example is the style too academic/essay like?

I think it's good, could add a section where people can input their own subjective reasons/experiences.

Fmhf87 (talk) 14:05, 11 August 2011 (UTC)


 * The article is interesting, and probably notable. I don't see any problems with the tone, Wikipedia articles should be written in a formal tone. I think having users write write their own experience might be original research. This Guardian article by Nicholson Baker aka User:Wageless might be useful.  Quasi  human  &#124;  Talk  10:19, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

Cryoshell (band)
I have created a page for the Danish rock band Cryoshell. I am aware that this article has been deleted for a reason, but I have provided the name of their record label, which is seen on the article. Feedback would be helpful.

Metalla515 (talk) 14:09, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

User:Ladyshauncia/Pikahsso
1st Draft for review.

Ladyshauncia (talk) 15:47, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

[| Important Civil Libertarian]
2nd request for peer review on a new article I added. Important constitutional lawyer in Canada who has helped shaped how we interpret our civil rights in Canada. Especially for gay and lesbian rights.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Joseph_Arvay

Britcruise (talk) 15:49, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

BRANSEL
Mrbazha (talk) 16:04, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Zorotools/Zoro_Tools
This article is about Zoro Tools, a subsidiary of WW Grainger. The company supplies small and medium businesses with tools and industrial equipment. Please review the page and let me know what kind of updates will be beneficial for the article. Thanks.

Zorotools (talk) 16:19, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

Dylan Morgan
I have just written a new article about a scientist and hypnotherapist, Dylan Morgan. I'd be grateful for any comments to improve the article.

Also I have a specific questions regarding variants of names. Although he referred to himself as Dylan Morgan and this is how is best known, his full name is John Dylan Morgan. How can I arrange it so that both names link to the article?

Many thanks in advance.

Farzin

Wikifarzin (talk) 16:42, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

GASL - General Applied Science Laboratory
Wikipedia mentions the name GASL in multiple articles. This article provides more information about GASL.

gaslname 17:32, 11 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Has many problems. As does your user name, since it implies a connection to the subject. Read conflict of interest guidelines and the others. Looks like you moved it to user space without waiting for feedback from yesterday. Please have more patience (as a sign of your good faith) if you expect the article to stick around. We are all volunteers; runing around the guidelines just annoys the ones who might help. W Nowicki (talk) 17:47, 13 August 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Anusha90/Dr_T_P_Sasikumar
Hello I would like to add this page to wikipedia as most of the students like me are getting motivated and thus benefited through Dr T P Sasikumar sir's lectures.

Anusha90 (talk) 17:38, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

YMCA Training, Inc (Boston)
I would like this article to be published and visibile to interested Wikipedia readers. Could you please review my article and give me feedback if necessary? Thank you. Sadie Y542.1800TI (talk) 17:40, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

Zoe Nicholson
Please review my article on Zoe Nicholson. Thanks.

Dante8 (talk) 19:33, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:EzzetYou/Lucille_Corcos
This is my first entry and I would be glad for any advice. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:EzzetYou/Lucille_Corcos

EzzetYou (talk) 19:45, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

Nemo auditur propriam turpitudinem allegans
Please review this new article which was requested at Requested articles/Applied arts and sciences/Law.

Otherthinker (talk) 19:46, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ladyshauncia/Pikahsso
This draft is submitted for review.

Ladyshauncia 19:58, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

User:Mfavero33/Mfavero33/Draft Article Mission Regional Chamber of Commerce
I am employed by the Mission Regional Chamber of Commerce (MRCC) and am a university student. I am drafting this article about the MRCC because the organization played a notable historic role in the development of the city of Mission. A similar organization, the Vancouver Board of Trade already has an article published on Wikipedia, which leads me to believe that the MRCC is also entitled to an article because it was the first Board of Trade in British Columbia. There are also several independent, notable sources that provide information on the organization. I want to avoid a conflict of interest and hope to write this article from a completely unbiased, fact-based point of view. If you have any suggestions, comments or critique please let me know what I can do to improve.

Mfavero33 (talk) 21:53, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Goodbye_(Grey%27s_Anatomy)
Bexby99 (talk) 22:03, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

L'arte del Violino
I would appreciate a bit of initial feedback. The page is a good start, and I have plans to make additions later.

Bottre73 (talk) 02:25, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

Roy Cleveland Nuse
This is an article about the Pennslyvania Impressionist painter, Roy C. Nuse. I would like to know if the article seems complete and if you have any formatting suggestions for me. I wanted to show a few examples of his paintings, but didn't have enough to warrant making an image gallery. I am hoping the formatting looks good on various browsers and computers. I would also like to have the article reviewed by a third party user so the disclaimer can be removed from the top.

Thank you for your feedback!

Crwza12 (talk) 02:26, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

2011–12 Real Madrid C.F. season
I am seeking feedback for the quality and style of the Season overview section, specifically for objectivity, as well as for the general organization of the page. All comments and suggestions for improvement are appreciated. Thank you!

Bobby (talk) 04:44, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

Canoe Slalom World Cup
This article is about a world cup series organized by International Canoe Federation in a sport called Canoe Slalom. Canoes Slalom is an Olympic sport and I felt that its world cup series should be mentioned on Wikipedia. Apart from a brief description of the competition, there is also the list of champions. Your feedback would be appreciated. I intend to expand this topic by covering individual seasons in separate articles.

Vladyreaper (talk) 08:01, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

Michael Ashikodi Agbamuche
Michael Ashikodi Agbamuche was a former Attorney General and Minister for Justice in Nigeria, Senior Advocate of Nigeria, former member of the National Assembly and graduate of kings college london(LAW). Its a new article and I would like an editor to please help review it. Thank you.

Uncommonj (talk) 11:06, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

Semble
Please review this new article in response to a request at Requested articles/Applied arts and sciences/Law. Please note that an previous article (not edited by this user) was deleted.

Otherthinker (talk) 11:47, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

Kingdom Tower
I would like some feedback on this article I recently overhauled. It's a Good Article and is going through a DYK submission right now, which is almost done and it should be on the front page soon. I just wanted to throw it out there and ask, how far is this from Featured Article Candidacy? It's about as good and broad and as engaging as it can be for the subject matter, so far. The building has not even begun construction yet, so I see it as pretty good for it's real life progress. Please read the article and decide how close or very far it is from meeting FAC. Thank you. Daniel Christensen (talk) 12:56, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

Daniel Christensen (talk) 12:56, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

Osprey Capital Partners Inc.
I would like to make sure this complies with Wikipedia guidelines from a marketing perspective. We by no means are using Wikipedia for that purpose. We are a sizable company whose name many people in Canada recognize. And we thought it prudent to add an educational article on our company and a few key points about us.

Any feedback is appreciated.

Thank you,

Osprey Capital Partners Inc.

Ospreycapital (talk) 14:58, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

TRE ‎(Thugs, Revolutionist & Entrepreneurs )
Biography of the TRE criminal gang.

TrueTre (talk) 15:13, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

User:TrueTre/TRE
Biography of the TRE criminal gang.

TrueTre (talk) 15:14, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

Time distance diagram
This new article is certainly a specialist's topic in the area of project planning / scheduling but maybe one of you out there would be kind enough to review it, please. Thank you. Wribln (talk) 15:54, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

HyperSizer
I have--I hope--plenty of reliable third-party sources, and draft article for HyperSizer. I'm trying to stay hands-off as I am an employee of the company that created the software. If that wasn't enough, it's also my first time editing wikipedia, so if another editor could review the article and create it for me, I'd really appreciate it.

Like I said, I'm new, so please let me know if I'm violating any rules or SOPs, written or unwritten. Vtaber02 (talk) 16:57, 12 August 2011 (UTC)
 * It is a better start that most but still needs work before being published. Needs wikilinks, filling in citations instead of raw URLS, etc. will talk on your page. W Nowicki (talk) 22:33, 13 August 2011 (UTC)

Poonam Pandey
Two articles on this person has been deleted previously by admins. I have rewritten this article. Please have a look.

 Boolyme बूलीमी   Chat बोलो!! 18:02, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

The Sidney Historical Museum and Archives
Just wondering if I can get some feedback on this article.

Thanks!

MuseHistorical (talk) 18:25, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

User:ADI64/DeaDBeeF
Please take a few seconds, look over my article about the Linux music player DeaDBeeF and tell me what improvements I can make. Thanks!

ADI64 (talk) 20:06, 12 August 2011 (UTC)


 * Alas, your sources are all from the project itself. So the article would probably be deleted due to the general notability criterion. This does not mean the project is not "good", but just that you might want to keep it in your user area as a draft until there is some recognition of it by an independent party. W Nowicki (talk) 21:29, 13 August 2011 (UTC)

St._John_the_Evangelist,_Ravenhead
New article currently tagged as 'unreviewed'

Sjecr (talk) 20:14, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

The Doctors Company
New article up for first review.

Ekuipers (talk) 21:21, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

Tanya Bastianich Manuali
This is my first wikipedia article. I would like to be sure that this won't be deleted--I can provide more sources if necessary. Thank you for your help!

Rhf627 (talk) 21:30, 12 August 2011 (UTC)