Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 August 3

Laney Stewart
Randbfan1980 (talk) 03:23, 3 August 2011 (UTC)
 * It doesn't have reliable sources - see WP:BIO.
 * It isn't neutral - e.g. his creative genius and exceptional business acumen
 * It isn't an appropriate encyclopaedic tone, e.g. Laney was born with music in his DNA... - stick to plain, verifiable facts, don't give opinions.
 * It all needs references to reliable sources - all the claims. Such as, By age 9, Laney had taught himself how to play piano and drums. With the advertising business booming in Chicago, Laney started singing on jingles at the age of 12. etc.  Chzz  ► 03:56, 3 August 2011 (UTC)

Paul Gardner (journalist)
I'm not sure why this article still has the "unreviewed." Any help would be much appreciated. Thanks! -- Mike

Mikewoit (talk) 06:02, 3 August 2011 (UTC)
 * ✅-- SPhilbrick  T  23:50, 3 August 2011 (UTC)

User:LauraDH/The_Hague_Institute_for_Global_Justice
I have tried to create this page, but it was removed. I have added more sources and hope for your feedback to make it an appropriate Wiki article.

LauraDH (talk) 09:19, 3 August 2011 (UTC)

Wikisubmittor/Gaming_Chairs
Hi all, can you please review to ensure, I am not infringing on any copyrights, and that the information is a useful addition to wikipedia?

Wikisubmittor (talk) 10:14, 3 August 2011 (UTC)

User:Ncacosta/EIDIA
Would like to make sure that the article conforms to WP:CREATIVE that was the reason for the previous WP:PROD. Thank you.

Nono (talk) 12:35, 3 August 2011 (UTC)

User:Wefsctr/World_Economic_Forum_Supply_Chain_%26_Transport_Risk
Any feedback would be greatly appreciated!

Wefsctr (talk) 13:53, 3 August 2011 (UTC)
 * It isn't obvious in the article that:
 * The World Economic Forum Supply Chain & Transport Initiative is related to the World Economic Forum.
 * the Risk Response Network is related to the World Economic Forum.
 * It isn't clear who or what group is meant by the Mobility Team


 * This sounds very Crystal ballish.
 * The references are sparse, and both appears to be blogs, which do not qualify as Reliable Sources. They also aren't formed correctly. See Referencing for beginners-- SPhilbrick  T  00:03, 4 August 2011 (UTC)

User:Henk.Wiersema/OpCon xps
I have wrote this draft article and it would be helpful if you evaluate it before I publish it.

Henk.Wiersema (talk) 14:16, 3 August 2011 (UTC)

Josef Schmid (flight surgeon)
Requesting feedback to remove "new article" template. The article is mainly based on Schmid's public domain NASA bio. Only one other article (NEEMO) links to this one, but I have not added the "orphan" template because it is presently recommended only for articles with no incoming links.

Gildir (talk) 16:01, 3 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Looks good, nice work.-- SPhilbrick  T  00:06, 4 August 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Amyabaker/Noddle&oldid=441854769
Amyabaker (talk) 16:08, 3 August 2011 (UTC)

http://www.ericowenmoss.com/index.php?/projects/project/ton/
I think my company is deserving of a Wikipedia page and would love your feedback. Hayden Studios is owned and operated by the Tennis Channel, designed by world famous architect Eric Owen Moss, and is receiving additional press in American Builders Quarterly in their January issue. Additionally, Comedy Central's hit show "Tosh.0" films at Hayden, and Hayden has also hosted numerous other shows, commercials, along with myriad other forms of production since its inception.

Would information about our American Business Quarterly write-up help legitimize Hayden as a page?

Thank you for your time.

3555hayden (talk) 18:50, 3 August 2011 (UTC)

User:Rajam6/Fawzia Afzal-Khan
Hi: I think this is almost done. I would like any suggestions/ help before I move it to article space. Thank you.

rajam (talk) 19:48, 3 August 2011 (UTC)

Château de la Motte, Joué du Plain
I think I have enough references, but I'm trying to find a way to record personal interviews as they are important as well(I put a few of them in the notes), but I understand the interdiction in the main article.

I plan to add French wiki links later, because more content is available there. I wrote the article thinking the reader neither speaks any French nor knows much about WWII.

Besides the more typical Wikipedia subject-search-and-then-follow-the-links-user,I visualized a traveler to the Norman countryside interested in what was around. I envision more articles tailored to the anglophone-smartphone guide users.

I use heavily Photoshopped images as they visually enhance the article on the small screen as well. The subjects are what curious countryside users seem to be interested in; it is called "reading the landscape" or "reading the building". Mlane 19:50, 3 August 2011 (UTC)

User:Delightedlybookish/Coffee House Press
Any feedback would be appreciated, since this is my first article. Thank you so much!

Delightedlybookish (talk) 20:03, 3 August 2011 (UTC)

Hip Hop: A Cultural Odyssey
I would like some help editing this page to make it more substantial. I would like to be able to divide the article into categories and compile a table of contents for the page, but I'm having difficulty doing that. If you are an experienced Wikipedia user, can you help me? Thank you.

Jhgardner (talk) 20:16, 3 August 2011 (UTC)

User:Staysharp/Pattison's whisky
This is an article on a fairly notorious Scotch distillery of the 19th century. A few Wikipedia articles mention the distillery, so I thought I would put an article together for the subject. Does this seem proper and in line with WP's purpose and standards? If not, what changes would you recommend, or is there an article that better exemplifies the requirements in this genre? Thanks for your time!

Staysharp (talk) 21:14, 3 August 2011 (UTC)

The Dandy Warhols
I have recently updated the page and added a lot of new content, but I'm wondering what could be improved. For example I have added social networking websites to the external links, but I read that they are "not encouraged".

Lachlanusername (talk) 00:03, 4 August 2011 (UTC)