Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 August 6

Kip Tiernan
Please review my article about Kip Tiernan. Thanks.

Dante8 (talk) 01:07, 6 August 2011 (UTC)


 * Hello, the article is interesting, and I don't think that it has any major issues, but I have a few comments about relatively minor issues:


 * There are a lot of red links, these are links to articles that don't exist yet. Red links can help the encyclopedia because they help identify articles that need to be created. I would question whether all of these topics are likely to be suitable for having an article in Wikipedia. See WP:REDLINK for more.
 * I would like to see more references to third party reliable sources to prove notability, there is this article from NYT which should help.
 * Articles should be written in a formal tone, so we generally don't refer to a person by their first name, for example: "Kip was also..." could be written as: "Tiernan was also..." or "Kip Tiernan was also...".
 * You can cite the same reference several times (see refs 1, 5, 6, 10) by giving the ref tag a name, for example:, then to cite that ref again:
 * Try formatting the references using citation templates, bare URLs are not recommended for a number of reasons, see WP:BURL.
 * Quasi human  &#124;  Talk  12:22, 7 August 2011 (UTC)

Negative capability
I just overhauled this article and would appreciate any feedback.

Archivingcontext (talk) 05:27, 6 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Nice work. I improved some of the refs. There are various schools of thought on how to reference differing pages from the same book; I took one approach, if you disagree, and want help changing, let me know.-- SPhilbrick  T  13:09, 7 August 2011 (UTC)

User:Lameattack/Kurt Yaeger
Any content, editing or aesthetic feedback would be great. Also if the links can be double triple checked. Does it sound neutral enough? Much appreciated!! Lameattack (talk) 07:42, 6 August 2011 (UTC)


 * Something happened to your references and they got left down at the bottom of the page. The footnote numbers should be in the text. Look at an example page and see how the code is embedded in the article while "editing." Although it is hard to tell without knowing what you are citing, some of the claims sound a bit biased or unverifiable, e.g. his passion: film. Unless you have a quote of him saying as much, this is not a verifiable statement. See WP:REF and WP:ORS. Archivingcontext (talk) 12:27, 6 August 2011 (UTC)

Thanks so much! I had noticed the citations in other pages but wasn't sure how to attack that issue. Your guidance helped. --Lameattack (talk) 03:47, 19 August 2011 (UTC)

Narmada_Valley_Development_Authority
I have written an article about Narmada Valley Development Authority. This being my first attempt in writing an article in Wikipedia, can some one please review the article and provide any feedback or suggestion(s) to improve it. Thanks in advance.

Gyan4u (talk) 10:02, 6 August 2011 (UTC)

User:Macavalon/Andrew_Blain_Baird
This is a biography of Scotland's aviation pioneer Andrew Blain Baird. The content has mainly been reproduced from http://www.bairdofbute.com/ at the request of the author Christopher Markwell. He as no experience of wikipedia, but wanted a wider audience to know about this historical figure, and how residents of Bute celebrate this historical figure. Please add feedback on content, suitability, any issue with the Article thanks.

Macavalon (talk) 13:15, 6 August 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Dream_of_a_Common_Language
Please review my article on The Dream of a Common Language. Thank you!

Rebelgrrrl (talk) 13:40, 6 August 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Just-eat
Looking for some advice on the Just-eat page. To me it reads like an extended company promotion with little encylopedic content. What's the best way forward? Should it be deleted or can it be improved?

Rwickham (talk) 15:45, 6 August 2011 (UTC)
 * A fair number of references, but not many substantive, independent sources. I agree with you that it reads like a promotion. I take a softer line on this issue than some editors, but I think it is likely to be a problem, with no trivial fix. I'm surprised it hasn't been flagged by now.-- SPhilbrick  T  12:32, 7 August 2011 (UTC)

User:Enniskerryhist/Liam Price
Writing a short summary of an important contributor to Wicklow history, Dr Liam Price

Enniskerryhist (talk) 17:52, 6 August 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Annj87/Roy_Orbison%27s_sun_recordings
Annj87 (talk) 18:22, 6 August 2011 (UTC)

Jennifer Jazz
I can't format the references or the category that should go at the bottom of the page. I'm doing something wrong when bracketing information between the code. Please help!

JosiahTree (talk) 20:28, 6 August 2011 (UTC)
 * I did a partial fix, however, you need to place the references in the text where they belong. I moved one, not sure if I got it right, but you can see what I did.


 * I removed the link to Wikipedia, the wikilink is fine, but Wikipedia should not be in the list of references.


 * See Referencing for beginners for more help regarding references-- SPhilbrick  T  12:42, 7 August 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/New_Exploration_Licensing_Policy_(NELP)
I am looking to add few images. I have tried but it says I don't have the authorization rights to do so. Kindly help on this..

Aliphatics (talk) 20:44, 6 August 2011 (UTC)

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I am having problema uploading the picture of the VHS Box, I am new at this but this is my favorite film and know all about it, I have watched it 1000 times, I know the page is bare bones but I will edit in more info later.

Dean Hagerman (talk) 23:36, 6 August 2011 (UTC)

Nakhachitra
This is an article about Nakhachitra - an ancient Indian art form, rarely practiced outside India. Suhas Tavkar of New York is one of the well known exponents of this art outside India, who is trying to gain more recognition for this unique ancient art form.

Sanjayvg (talk) 23:49, 6 August 2011 (UTC)