Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 February 13

User:220.239.171.65/Glyco Thymoline
Hi I am a new user and would like help and or comments on my new article about Glyco Thymoline Mouthwash.This is my first ever article all comments appreciated.

Conwayboys (talk) 00:33, 13 February 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Nama_sankeerthanam
Iamtheealmighty (talk) 00:41, 13 February 2011 (UTC)

Little Rock (poem)
seeking for suggestions to upgrade the article. The idea of doing it was because of the lack of any reference in main entry Orval Faubus about the use of his name in the anti-racist poem. It's, actually, important because of his presence in cuban and Latin America popular culture...

Coyinyo (talk) 00:49, 13 February 2011 (UTC)

Aurelian Honor Society
I want to seek feedback as to style, format, content, of the Aurelian Honor Society WikiPage. I created it in the hopes that Yale students would have a better public understanding of the honor society at Yale, as there are WikiLinks with other Yale society information. I've included relevant sources.

Please advise. Thank you very much.

Marcus 02:08, 13 February 2011 (UTC)

User:Pmiller42au/Kenneth_Bowles biographical article
Dr Bowles is referenced by a number of other Wikipedia pages.

Peter Miller (talk) 08:03, 13 February 2011 (UTC)
 * I did some minor clean-up formatting on your article. I liked that you used the citation templates. A couple of your External links references could use a bit more bibliographic data. Nice article. Tkotc (talk) 09:02, 15 February 2011 (UTC)

Mitraniketan
Please help to review this article to make it better.

Mejaitheknight (talk) 13:08, 13 February 2011 (UTC)

Pedro Ernesto Baptista
Made a page for this person who had taken an important role in the emergence of Populism in South America

Uriman2 (talk) 16:27, 13 February 2011 (UTC)

Mother Earth (UK Band)
Hi -- help needed. Do I have enough references? Other comments welcome -- thank you!

Jonthegeologist (talk) 17:03, 13 February 2011 (UTC)
 * You used Myspace as one of your inline references. This will probably be discouraged on the basis of reliability. Maybe you could change where that particular reference appears to External links. I've reformatted the other references for you, just to add a bit of bibliographic data. If you had more good links like the BBC links you used (and they were good), a couple of more would always be insurance. Tkotc (talk) 09:23, 15 February 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Davidreskin/Joan_Field
I've just created this page and would welcome any comments.

Davidreskin (talk) 17:58, 13 February 2011 (UTC)
 * Nice article! My quibbles would be:


 * 1. The references could be done better. Although it is a real pain to do them right, your article deserves it. Take a look at Citing sources/example style, Citing sources, and Citation templates. To me, the easiest way to do this is to use one of the templates, fill in the blanks, and paste the result between the tags at the appropriate place in the article, thereby forming an "inline" reference. However you do it, you need to convert your references to inline references. If you have problems, ask us for further help.


 * 2. I think the discography could be a little nicer. I suggest looking at a couple of famous musician articles and getting ideas that way. To me, the nicest looking ones appear as tables. This is certainly not a Wikipedia requirement, as MOS:MUSIC only talks about lists. (Note that to do yours as a list, each item should be preceded by a "*".)


 * 3. The violin dealer doesn't belong in external links. If you want to refer to the fact that she owned some named violin, say so in the article and make the link an inline reference. Again, nice article! Tkotc (talk) 22:54, 13 February 2011 (UTC)

Ok thanks - I've made the changes and put the article up for the world to see. DR

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Iam7/RogelioMills
I wrote an article about Rogelio Mills/Roger Mills and was looking for a review and some general feedback before I submit it.

Iam7 (talk) 19:34, 13 February 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Tom_Hartle
Does this article meet Wiki standards? It's my first one!

Z

Zacharyreedsmith (talk) 20:19, 13 February 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Harry1167/GoMeanGreen.com
Hello, I am writing my first Wiki page and wanted to get your feedback. This is on a website that has been around since 1995 that follows sports and news at the University of North Texas. I tried to keep it short and sweet but there is much more detail that I could add if able. Please give me your feedback on how it needs to look and I will make any changes.

Harry1167 (talk) 21:14, 13 February 2011 (UTC)

User:Noamross/Extinction_Debt
I'd like to make sure that my article is (1) readable at an appropriate level for Wikipedia, and (2) is sufficiently neutral, given that it may relate to some environmental controversies. Any other feedback is welcome!

Noamross (talk) 22:22, 13 February 2011 (UTC)


 * The article seems to be shaping well. Some of the minor issues are:
 * Check the links before adding them as references. Sometimes they redirect to a new page.
 * Check (again) for any prose errors (or grammar issues).


 * It seems to be neutral, and not biased. Good job. – Novice7 (talk) 13:32, 15 February 2011 (UTC)

Thanks! Noamross (talk) 16:35, 15 February 2011 (UTC)

Rogelio Mills
Please review this new article.

Iam7 (talk) 23:43, 13 February 2011 (UTC)