Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 February 20

Chefs Center of California
New article, request for feedback made.

Dstringer71 (talk) 00:06, 20 February 2011 (UTC)


 * I don't see any real major issues with it there, although I'm not certain how notable it is, but I'm not going to pass judgement on that. Looks well constructed overall though. Good start overall.--L1A1 FAL (talk) 03:05, 21 February 2011 (UTC)

Rachel Fury
Looking for an independent review of this article on a Pink Floyd-related singer.

Jeffrw (talk) 00:12, 20 February 2011 (UTC)


 * I'm not really sure if this is a notable person - aside from being a touring member of PF, I don't really see anything . Also, I saw this line: "According to Pink Floyd fan sites, she now lives in London and maintains an interest in animal welfare." Which Pink Floyd fan sites? While fan sites aren't the greatest of sources, you should probably list which ones, and cite them for the purpose of validating that statement. Also, maybe list some of her other contributions to albums too. Overall, I think the article needs more sources, and more content to establish notability. Also, I have removed the 'new article' template from the article.--L1A1 FAL (talk) 03:22, 21 February 2011 (UTC)

Paul Whitehead (politician)
...we've written the page, but how do we get it posted? thanks:) holly...

DHS5646Calif (talk) 03:41, 20 February 2011 (UTC)
 * Hello Holly,


 * To post your article into the live site you simply type "Paul Whitehead (politician)" into the search box (making sure you capitalize his name correctly). Wikipedia will tell you that there is currently no such article, but will also say "You may create the page "Paul Whitehead (politician)" (with "Paul whitehead (politician)" being underlined in red) - simply follow the link and copy your formatted article text into the text box provided in the same way you did with your test article in your own user space. Then hit save. And that's it. No permission required.


 * Your article looks to be in pretty decent shape already; however, I would say it needs a little bit of tweaking, especially with references. Therefore I've taken the liberty of taking a copy and placing it in my user space here, where I'll give it a little bit of a polish. If that meets with your approval you can put that version live.


 * Any queries just shout. Arthur Holland (talk) 16:36, 20 February 2011 (UTC)

Warren Fales Draper (M.D.)
I just finished writing the article on a former Deputy Surgeon General of the U.S. who was also a major general on Eisenhower's staff during WWII.

Sarnold17 (talk) 04:07, 20 February 2011 (UTC)


 * This looks VERY thorough for a new article. I noticed and corrected several typos. Other than that, everything looks in order. I also removed the unreviewed article tag, too.--L1A1 FAL (talk) 03:32, 21 February 2011 (UTC)


 * Thanks for taking care of this; it took me months to gather up the sources and write the article.Sarnold17 (talk) 16:28, 21 February 2011 (UTC)

Paul Whitehead (politician)
Paul Whitehead (politician) ...we've written the page, but how do we get it posted? thanks:) holly...

DHS5646Calif (talk) 04:15, 20 February 2011 (UTC)


 * Hello Holly,


 * To post your article into the live site you simply type "Paul Whitehead (politician)" into the search box (making sure you capitalize his name correctly). Wikipedia will tell you that there is currently no such article, but will also say "You may create the page "Paul Whitehead (politician)" (with "Paul whitehead (politician)" being underlined in red) - simply follow the link and copy your formatted article text into the text box provided in the same way you did with your test article in your own user space. Then hit save. And that's it. No permission required.


 * Your article looks to be in pretty decent shape already; however, I would say it needs a little bit of tweaking, especially with references. Therefore I've taken the liberty of taking a copy and placing it in my user space here, where I'll give it a little bit of a polish. If that meets with your approval you can put that version live.


 * Any queries just shout. Arthur Holland (talk) 16:36, 20 February 2011 (UTC)

User:Simon.josey/Alex Josey
About the topic: Alex Josey Alexander (Alex) Arthur Josey (3 April 1910 to 15 October 1986) was a Journalist, political writer and commentator, biographer, and during WWII and The Malayan Emergency, a propaganda warrior. He is best known for his biographies on the former Prime Minister of Singapore, Lee Kuan Yew as well as other political writings, such as; Democracy in Singapore : the 1970 by elections, Socialism in Asia, and Trade unionism in Malaya...He wrote over twenty political novels and wrote many political articles on Singapore and Malaysia for various Singapore and international newspapers and journals. He became a good friend of Lee Kuan Yew who later became the Prime Minister of Singapore. He was the first foreign correspondent to be kicked out of Singapore (then part of Malaysia) by the Malaysian government. He returned to Singapore after its independence from Malaysia and became Prime Minister Lee Kuan Yew’s Press Secretary for 10 years, and biographer and public relations officer. He later became the Publications Manager of the Singapore International Chamber of Commerce (SICC) before being crippled by Parkinson’s Disease...

Thanks for your help!

Simon.josey (talk) 13:42, 20 February 2011 (UTC)

User:Shanekabel/Kent Eger
This is my first wiki creation. Hopefully this fits the criteria for inclusion.

Shanekabel (talk) 17:04, 20 February 2011 (UTC)

User:Poderedellaluna/Blackbird. The Black Stone Violin
Dear Wikipedia, I rewrote an article about Blackbird. The black stone Violin.This after being rejected. I made the text more encyclopedic to fit in.. Earlyer I comunicated with Fæ Styles and she gave the first article some recognition, like that it was OK with the copyrights and such.. I would like to add some photos of the violin as well but dont know how to do it? I Placed the article in the "Village pump. (proposals) Regards Lars. (User:Poderedellaluna)

Poderedellaluna (talk) 18:36, 20 February 2011 (UTC)

User:Dalton283/Emerson Cole
Can this article go live the way it is now? Also, I have this picture recently taken by Cole himself of the YMCA plaque that would document the YMCA section but I doubt Wiki would use it.

http://www.pinehurstbob.com/darien_ymca_plaque.jpg

Dalton283 (talk) 20:34, 20 February 2011 (UTC)

RHINO Poetry
This is an article on RHINO Poetry, a poetry journal that has published continually since 1976. I have had many people check the references for me. I would appreciate any comments.

Tuttitalia (talk) 21:29, 20 February 2011 (UTC)

User:VibPed/Erik Haahr
I have written this article on our newly elected president of the Copenhagen Toastmasters Club based on Internet research (and a few questions to himself).

Would it fulfill the requirements for an article on a notable person?

VibPed (talk) 21:30, 20 February 2011 (UTC)

Ronnie Wells
I have placed this article on the main page after incorporating the comments from Tkotc (thank you for your feedback). Now this article needs to be reviewed before it can be a final article. I would appreciate any feedback. Thanks.

MiChelliechellie (talk) 04:36, 21 February 2011 (UTC)