Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 February 23

User:Siberiophile/Two Siberians
Hi. First Wiki article. Could someone please give it a look? Thanks! My biggest concern is proper reference to the Russian Wiki articles about this topic.

Siberiophile (talk) 00:13, 23 February 2011 (UTC)

Clancy Philbrick
I believe I have enough reliable sources for the length of this article, but was simply hoping to get some feedback on the layout, info, and overall structure of the article. Thanks

Yosyrus (talk) 00:19, 23 February 2011 (UTC)
 * A good job so far. You should have in-line citations, which you can add by putting   after a sentence which needs an inline citation.  The next time you want to use the same reference, put   .  At the end, in the reference section, add   .  This will automatically put your reference text for all your inline citations at the bottom.  If you want to read more about all this, read Help:Footnotes.  I hope all this makes sense.  If you need any help, leave me a message at User talk:E2eamon.  ALSO: you may want to edit some related articles and have them link to this article.  Then you can remove the orphan tag at the top of the article.  I removed the unreviewed tag.--E♴ (talk) 23:59, 23 February 2011 (UTC)

User:SHEKHARTV/Venkannaiah TS
You are asking for reliable source and I am not able to understand what is the source that you need. Actually the article contains only reliable information and the sources are not in the internet as it is a new post about a scholar. The sources for the above article are from his books, and the place where he worked. and the institution where he worked for more than 32 years i.e JCBM college Sringeri. India. Kindly guide me in this regard. thank you.

SHEKHARTV (talk) 03:17, 23 February 2011 (UTC)

Child's Play Touring Theatre
Hey! I just finished writing a new article and would like it reviewed so I can get rid of the banner on top. Thanks!

Creativityfan (talk) 03:41, 23 February 2011 (UTC)

Hubert G. Chevis
Hi, this is my first article, so if someone could double check it, that would be great. Thanks!

Sakurakaze (talk) 11:59, 23 February 2011 (UTC)


 * You've made a good start, but I'd suggest renaming the article to something like Murder of Hubert G. Chevis. I don't think Hubert G. Chevis is notable enough for an article dedicated to him, but it seems that the unsolved murder is notable, judging by the references you've cited. Also, the article needs some links to it because it is currently an orphan. It could be added to List of unsolved murders in the United Kingdom for example. If you need any help, please leave a message on my talk page. —Bruce1eetalk 06:49, 24 February 2011 (UTC)

Colin Hatch
This is my first article here on Wikipedia, and I just wanted to know how well written it was and if there was any need for improvement etc...

Thanks,

Mezuu64 (talk) 14:36, 23 February 2011 (UTC)

User:JohnGDrever/MALPAS Software Static Analysis Toolset
Hi all, this is my first attempt at Wiki. If there is a computer science person out there, can you review this article for general content, understandability and neutrality? Kind regards John

JohnGDrever (talk) 15:25, 23 February 2011 (UTC)

User:Ryanmiller50/Student SPILL
Just want to make sure this article fits all necessary criteria for posting. Thanks!

Ryanmiller50 (talk) 16:17, 23 February 2011 (UTC)

Instructure
I just wrote this article (my first). I think I'm ok with having enough notable sources, but I'm definitely looking for feedback to improve the page.

Jazzcat2283 (talk) 16:23, 23 February 2011 (UTC)

User:Staccato20/OdanLaboratories
This is my first article and I wouldn't like for it to be deleted. Is it any good? What else should I do before I "go live" with it? Thank you for your advice!

Staccato20 (talk) 17:18, 23 February 2011 (UTC)

User:DGANJ/Synthetic Magnesium Silicate
I've written an article about Synthetic Magnesium Silicate (with its appropriate sources) and would like for it to be approved to be live on Wikipedia.

If it is ready/approved, please let me know. Otherwise, let me know what needs to be edited.

Thank you for your time and guidance.

DGANJ (talk) 17:20, 23 February 2011 (UTC)

Harveys (handbag design and manufacturer)
I was wondering if an editor can review this article and tell me in what way is it written as an advertisement. I would like to correct any mistakes and fix the article. Can someone please help me to remove these warnings on the top of the page as other editors have approved it in the past without these warnings, and they do not seem fair. Thank you so much.

SJayQ (talk) 19:11, 23 February 2011 (UTC)

C. Michael Smith (aka Mikkal)
I am seeking feedback on the new article submitted on a notable person, C. Michael Smith (aka Mikkal). After carefully reading the Wikipedia policies and creating my own user page, I believe that I have met all of the criteria for notability and for citing reliable references. However, I would like to receive feedback to ensure that my page is fulfilling all of the requirements. I modeled this page after Stan Grof's which seems to be meeting all of the criteria. I look forward to adding more about this notable person in the near future. Wikipedia is such a great world-wide resource! Viva la Wikipedia:)

Mowolverton (talk) 20:18, 23 February 2011 (UTC)
 * I think you need to come up with some references, sources where third parties talk about your subject. You have only one reference, and I may have missed it, but that reference doesn't even mention him. It seems like you should be able to do this. After all, with all the literature he has produced or edited, hasn't someone written about him? Also, unless the subject operates under the "Mikkal" AKA, the convention is that you refer to him by his surname in the article. The whole AKA business is somewhat distracting in the article, unless there is more to it, which is as yet undescribed. The subject is interesting and the article otherwise looks like it should end up ok, but it does need this additional tidbit of work. Tkotc (talk) 03:04, 27 February 2011 (UTC)

Grasshopper (Phone System)
Adjusted based on feedback, any other suggestions appreciated/welcome. Thanks!

Casieg (talk) 20:20, 23 February 2011 (UTC)

User:Mattwmsatl/Greenway Medical Technologies, Inc.
Wanting to make sure this article meets all necessary criteria for posting. Thanks!

Mattwmsatl (talk) 21:57, 23 February 2011 (UTC)

Baise horse
I'm a member of the WikiProject Equine horse breeds task force.

Wi2g 22:00, 23 February 2011 (UTC)

SVA MFA Design Criticism (D-Crit)
Dinah Ridge (talk) 22:05, 23 February 2011 (UTC)

Fives Athletic
Article about a soccer club in the Manchester Football League. Good sources.

Doh5678 (talk) 22:26, 23 February 2011 (UTC)

Geoff Diego Litherland
This is my first post on Wikipedia and I just wanted to check that this article meets all of the criteria and that it will be published. Thanks, Abi

AbiDiamond (talk) 23:53, 23 February 2011 (UTC)
 * You already published it by creating it in "mainspace" instead of your userspace. Now you're going to have to scurry to fix the references. Next time, consider drafting the article in your "userspace" so you can do this at your leisure.


 * All those references in the body of your article must be formatted either as "Wikilinks" (where the link is to another Wikipedia article), or as inline references (where the reference is to a non-Wikipedia web site). A Wikilink is done by enclosing the word or phrase that is the title of an article with double square brackets. Look how I fixed Grayson Perry for you. Inline references must be between a pair of "ref" tags. So in "Recent exhibitions" you need to change the referencing. See "Art Work Space" for example. Are you sure that the title is "John Moores 25"? I think that was title shorthand for " the 25th John Moores Contemporary Painting Prize". Tkotc (talk) 07:33, 26 February 2011 (UTC)

Thanks, I've made the neccessary changes and a few more too. Is it ok now? How do I get it reviewed so that the banner at the top is removed? Thanks, Abi

The Return of the Native
I just wanted to congratulate Wikipedia on the quality of this article. If this wasn't someone's thesis, it should have been.

71.92.11.254 (talk) 01:34, 24 February 2011 (UTC)
 * Sometime look at the article's history. Started as a stub in 2004. A lot of effort went into it.Tkotc (talk) 07:10, 26 February 2011 (UTC)