Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 January 12

Assistive Technology Industry Association
I had created this article as a User subpage, solicited feedback, made changes based on feedback(converting some end references to in-line sources), and added some more sources. I just moved it to mainspace. The article is about the Assistive Technology Industry Association. This association represents the industy and is involved in standard setting, but also provides important opportunities for consumers to learn about assistive technology. Ben Slotznick (talk) 01:33, 12 January 2011 (UTC)

User:ClammieR/Hellwars
Please take a look at my article (skip tutorial parts, I explain there how to do something in the game and what it means, it's really irrelevant when you are reviewing it) and tell me what is wrong with it, what I have to edit/remove/add so it wouldn't get deleted, because I've put too much time into it :/

Also, website www.hellwars.com is blacklisted by Meta (?), what should I do about it?

ClammieR (talk) 10:02, 12 January 2011 (UTC)

Pneumatics automation
I want to create a page that will give adequate information about the subject pneumatics and hydraulics..Any suggestions???

Vivek 12:41, 12 January 2011 (UTC)

Emmanuelle Zeesman
General professional biography

Konacq (talk) 13:03, 12 January 2011 (UTC)

Dr, Paul Knapman
To all Editors

I would appreciate any feedback from any editor about my submission about Dr Paul Knapman DL. It is my second attempt at the article about this very notable person.

Your feedback would be great received.

WebManAtTheNetShop (talk) 15:47, 12 January 2011 (UTC) Hi WebManAtTheNetShop, and welcome.

The text of your article looks good to me, but it appears you are confused between references and wikilinks on wikipedia. Hope that makes sense, contact me on my talk page if you have any questions at all. --Physics is all gnomes (talk) 19:43, 12 January 2011 (UTC)
 * A references, or citation, is used to back up the article's claim. It gives a link to a reliable, independant source (eg a book or newspaper). The source has to say whatever it is your article is trying to claim. You can add a reference by clicking on the little book icon in the editing screen, or typing around your reference. For example, at the end of the claim "He has an entry in Debrett's" you should add . For more details see WP:V and WP:REF.
 * A wikilink is a link to another wikipedia article. In your first sentence, the word coroner should be wikilinked, so in the edit box, instead of writing coroner, you'd write coroner.
 * I cleaned up the Wikilink issue that gnomes talks about. You can see how I did it. You must find some reliable sources external to Wikipedia for the facts you state in your article. I think the most useful item you can document is the report you mention. Can you find a link to the actual report? How about a good news article describing it? You describe two significant appointments your subject got and four or so significant events he was associated with. That's six things you should try to find references for. Good luck. Come back and ask any further questions.Tkotc (talk) 21:07, 12 January 2011 (UTC)

User:Albina Bulatova/Governance and Problem Analysis Center
Good afternoon, it has been a month since I've posted my article for your review - but nothing happened. I want my article to be shown on Wikipedia,what can I do next? could you please help? I would appreciate it alot.

Albina Bulatova (talk) 17:00, 12 January 2011 (UTC)

User:Leonard Pickel/Enter your new article name here
HAuNTcon is an acronym for the Haunted Attraction National Tradeshow and Conference. An annual expo and educational convention, which moves to a new city each year to offer off-season behind the scenes tours of local October-seasonal Haunted attractions.

65.127.9.5 (talk) 18:15, 12 January 2011 (UTC)

Wikipedia talk:Articles for creation/Heather Spohr
all requested changes have been made.

Stolafrosie (talk) 18:47, 12 January 2011 (UTC)

Social real estate investment trust (SREIT)
http://www.sundaytimes.lk/091011/FinancialTimes/ft16.html

http://www.unhabitat.org/downloads/docs/8243_79897_ReportOnPrivateSectorWUF5.pdf

Wiroshermes (talk) 19:02, 12 January 2011 (UTC)

Ben Lovett (disambiguation)
Hi there

Please see page: Ben Lovett (disambiguation)

As the current page :  redirects to Mumford & Sons page, I would like to argue for the following URL address:  be the address for this page: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ben_Lovett_(disambiguation), as this is another notable person named Ben Lovett.

Thanks for your help and I hope this can be published! Thank you

The MuseBox Canada (talk) 19:32, 12 January 2011 (UTC)

I would like to verify that the following article is okay for publication/moving to its own page
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Slackalicefilms/Enter_your_new_article_name_here

Slackalicefilms (talk) 22:51, 12 January 2011 (UTC)

User:Slackalicefilms/Enter your new article name here
Please verify this article and explain how I can move it to its own page... http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Slackalicefilms/Enter_your_new_article_name_here

Slackalicefilms (talk) 22:53, 12 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Here's a problem: Your user name, "slackalicefilms", sounds like the producer you named ("Slack Alice Films") of the film that is the subject of the article. This is going to suggest a conflict of interest and undermine the notion of neutrality that an article must adhere to. See, WP:COI. Unfortunately, I've seen a couple of articles deleted for this reason recently. So in order that this issue is dealt with in an orderly manner, you should disclose on your user page and on the article's talk page how you are associated with that producer, or note that you are not. Dealing with this up front should help resolve any problems.


 * Additionally, I saw that someone objected to moving the article to the regular Wikipedia pages on the basis that the subject was not notable. Maybe look at WP:MOVIE to see how you can write your article to highlight notability.Tkotc (talk) 00:02, 13 January 2011 (UTC)

User:Gregwgtnz/Chamber Music New Zealand
I am writing the history of Chamber Music New Zealand (CMNZ), a non-profit organisation. This is my first complete article for Wikipedia. The Help items are great but some of the American nomenclature takes a little getting used to, so please excuse any Antipodean misunderstandings. Things should get better with frequency of use!

My primary references are two published books, both commissioned by CMNZ. The first covers the early year up to 1985 and has been out of print since it was published in 1985. The most recent, covering the years 1980-2010, was printed in 2010. I also have authorised access to CMNZ's archives of newsletters, printed programmes and photographs.

Gregwgtnz (talk) 23:12, 12 January 2011 (UTC)

Clive Bradley (screenwriter)
I have added links to my article. I really want to know how to post it as a finished article. Thanks in advance

Edward G Ellis (talk) 23:41, 12 January 2011 (UTC)