Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 July 13

User:Nathanrnr/Winmalee Rural Fire Brigade
Can poeple review this artical and let me know your thoughts. Its the first artical I have created Nathanrnr (talk) 00:57, 13 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Welcome to Wikipedia! Unfortunately, the article as written continues to be presented in the same manner as the previous version that was deleted. Many people have a misunderstanding of the purpose and design of Wikipedia. Encyclopedic articles require notability, established through significant coverage in reliable sources that are independent of the subject. The article lacks independent sourcing to establish notability. Additionally, we cannot accept articles which are created and written to promote the subject in any manner. Articles must be written from a somewhat disinterested or detached manner. This is often very difficult for individuals that are associated or closely aligned with the organization. It is a clear red flag when articles are presented in language which states "we are..." or "we have..." Generally for organizations, we look for organizational history or background, focus and goals, accomplishments, programs, strategic partners, and principal partners. For more information about promotional articles, make sure to review the content provided on your talk page, when the first article was deleted. Please feel free to contact me if you have questions. Best regards,  Cind. amuse  07:42, 13 July 2011 (UTC)

Debt Conciliation Board
Please help me in expanding article about Debt Conciliation Board of Haryana Garvitkamboj (talk) 04:25, 13 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Welcome to Wikipedia. At this point, I would suggest removing the list of 40 organizational members, since it does not add to or enhance the article, but rather detracts. The lead section may need to be revised to summarize the article and present why the organization is important or significant. Please review the Manual of Style for compliance issues in format, italics, and capitalization. Remove ordinals and commas from British formatted dates. Place all citations after punctuation, rather than before. Link technical, specialized, or commonly misunderstood terms to other articles within Wikipedia for clarity. Remove press releases used as citations, since they do not meet requirements for reliability and independence. Revise reference grouping from two columns to only one. Two columns become necessary for better management of articles with 20 or more citations. Not necessary for only four references. Articles on Wikipedia are required to establish notability through significant coverage in reliable sources which are independent of the subject. At this point, the content is solely sourced to the Tribune India. In order to establish notability, please continue researching the subject to ascertain and solidify notability through significant coverage. While this is the forum for requesting feedback on articles, if you continue to need support in expanding the article, I would like to invite you to check out our group of editors that work together to create and expand articles on subjects specifically related to India. You can find the link HERE. Please feel free to contact me if you have additional questions. Again, welcome to Wikipedia! Hope you're having fun! Best regards,  Cind. amuse  08:12, 13 July 2011 (UTC)

Tigers Jaw
article on the indie rock band tigers jaw; article is still listed as unreviewed, want feedback

Angelinthesnow (talk) 04:27, 13 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Well, you may want to look for more third-party reliable sources. Other than that it looks okay. Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:14, 14 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Insanejack/Geniaware SRL
Please help me by reviewing my article on the games developer Geniaware. The article is an introduction about the company and the title that they are currently working on.

All assistance is well and truly appreciated.

Insanejack (talk) 08:47, 13 July 2011 (UTC)
 * You should try and add some more reliable sources to show notability. If notability has not been shown, it might be deleted. Other than that:
 * The article title does not need to be written again as a separate item, it is already included.
 * Per our policy on external links, external links should not be put in-text. Use a reference template.
 * You should wikify a little more.
 * Try and adjust the tone to be less promotional.
 * I hope that helps. Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:21, 14 July 2011 (UTC)

Thank you for your assistance Crisco 1492 it was most helpful, regards insanejack

Omobono
Could you review this short article on a Cambridge based advertising agency called Omobono and let me know what you think?

Thanks!

Tommymk (talk) 12:55, 13 July 2011 (UTC)

Taobao_Marketplace
I have added 13 references to Taobao_Marketplace and don't understand why I am getting the "Reliable sources" message. Can someone help please?

Vze2656h (talk) 14:36, 13 July 2011 (UTC)

Taobao_mall
I have added 5 references to Taobao_Mall and don't understand why I am getting the "Reliable sources" message. Can someone help please?

Vze2656h (talk) 14:40, 13 July 2011 (UTC)

Poetry in Africa
Hi. A lot of work has been done on this article. Please could someone from the Poetry portal, or Literature portal, or from any of the African literature or poetry networks add to it or give me feedback on it. All grammatical and Wiki-style help is also gratefully received. Thank you.

Islahaddow (talk) 14:42, 13 July 2011 (UTC)
 * It is rather well developed. However, there are a few things.
 * You should add more references; right now a lot of the article is under-referenced.
 * The references are bare URLs, which is disapproved of.
 * The title Poetry in Africa should be worked into the lead.
 * The article needs some more Wikifying.
 * Hope that helps. Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:27, 14 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Thanks for that Crisco 1492, I will definitely do what you suggest! Islahaddow (talk) 10:01, 15 July 2011 (UTC)

Anna Gmeyner
Just made this on the Austrian writer/playwright/scriptwriter, Anna Gmeyner. She has a page on the German Wikipedia, but nothing on here even though her work is still published in English. I wrote it myself, though used the German site as a reference (I don't speak German so it was just deciphering what I could from google translate). I hope to add a comprehensive list of her work at a later date unless anyone gets in there first. Please let me know what could be edited.

LambsC (talk) 14:49, 13 July 2011 (UTC)

Paducah Bank This is not intended to be promotional, looking for another readers perspective and feedback as to how it appeals to other readers as well as Wikipedia standards
This is basically an overview of the banks history and what it does for it's community as far as involvement. It is not intended to be promotional, but informative. I realize that can be a fine line so I am looking for any suggestions as to how to preserve the integrity of a legitimate Wikipedia page. Thank You.

Andrewpwalker (talk) 15:21, 13 July 2011 (UTC)

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Need assistance with finding additional information about the artist that is verifiable. I have met the artist personally, but do not have external links that will get me the detailed information that is needed.

Joshuaeramirez (talk) 15:58, 13 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Maya romanoff/Maya Romanoff
I'm having problems placing the link live. Also, please help let me know if I need more references and citations. Thank you!

Maya romanoff (talk) 16:07, 13 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Legionnaire X/Bandon Capital Management LLC
I botched my request for help yesterday, think I have it figured out now. Please take a look and offer general feedback. Anything helps. Thanks!

Legionnaire X (talk) 16:19, 13 July 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Church_of_England_Youth_Council
Just a check-up really.

Extreme harmony (talk) 16:51, 13 July 2011 (UTC)

AvalonBay Communities, Inc.
Recently created this article. Just looking for additional references and sources - also any additional information to be added

Delonline (talk) 18:16, 13 July 2011 (UTC)

Karen Thorndike
Please review my article about Karen Thorndike. Thanks!

Dante8 (talk) 20:15, 13 July 2011 (UTC)

Whitstran, Washington
Seeking feedback on my first article

MrX (talk) 23:37, 13 July 2011 (UTC)

Michael Gargiulo serial killer and notable in Los Angeles media
Please help me get this article online. User: OrangeMike apparently keeps deleting the information about the serial killer stating that no article exists while Rafael Gargiulo the boxer also has no article or references is put on the notables. Thank you!

Neoking (talk) 23:58, 13 July 2011 (UTC)