Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 July 26

Living Oceans Society
Hello, I'm looking for feedback about this article on Living Oceans Society, a not for profit marine conservation organization from Canada.

Geofflos (talk) 00:09, 26 July 2011 (UTC)
 * There are some issues, which I've detailed at Talk:Living Oceans Society. Other editors' opinions are invited at the discussion. --Lexein (talk) 21:19, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Chelseamize/Scott_Davis_(Scotty_D)
Hi, I'm looking for feedback on an article about a songwriter and producer named Scott Davis. Scott Davis is a Nashville based songwriter and producer. Davis has produced award-winning songs and albums for artists such as Kutless, Rush Of Fools, and Jessie Daniels. Davis has won many awards, including the ASCAP Song of the Year, the BMI Song of the Year, and he has also been nominated for 3 Dove awards.

Chelseamize (talk) 02:46, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Askjayaa/SuperSeva Services
Need feedback for improvement.

Askjayaa (talk) 06:23, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

Asian Scientist Magazine
Will someone be able to review my article? Many thanks. Pong pong.

Pppong (talk) 07:40, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

Rob Chapman (musician)
Hello, I need review for this page about the singer of the Glaxo Babies, rock-critic and "Senior Lecturer in Music Journalism". Thank you.

Hmoderne (talk) 09:00, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

2030 (novel)
Per the Snotbot New unreviewed article tag in June, I'm requesting feedback. The article appeared on DYK.
 * Bump. Still needs review. --Lexein (talk) 12:59, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Bump. Still needs review. --Lexein (talk) 12:48, 3 August 2011 (UTC)

Lexein (talk) 10:38, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

M._K._Cheriyan
Requesting review 155.178.4.10 (talk) 12:58, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

Informer_Technologies,_Inc.
We're requesting feedback for improvement of the article: []

VoiceWithoutFace (talk) 13:04, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

Kurtis_Scaletta
I'm looking for feedback for this article about children's author Kurtis Scaletta.

216.59.97.130 (talk) 14:25, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Indepchamber/Santa-Cali-Gon
What do I need to change/add to make this page publishable?

Indepchamber (talk) 14:25, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

Seajet
This is my first new artikel. Could somebody please comment if anything is wrong or needs to be changed? Thank you!

Bluelagoon33 (talk) 15:22, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

intestinal epithelial differentiation genes
Noah.Donahue.Shroyer (talk) 16:29, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Jkeytomsun/Urban Punk
Hi, I wrote Wiki article about new music group called Urban Punk... Please, could you take a look at it and tell me if it's possible to go live with it or do not...??? Thanks. Best Regards - Jarek D.

Jkeytomsun (talk) 16:36, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Froggergurl/Charity_Beck
Just needing some advice as to this article. Does it provide enough detail and sources? Thank you

Froggergurl (talk) 17:18, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

vineyard nordic summercamp
please give me feedback about the look of my article

Skreppvin (talk) 17:19, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Junwoopark0130/Moon Jae-in
This page is on a political figure in Korea. He's very likely to run for the presidential election, and he's not on the english wikipedia yet so i just thought i might create one. I translated some of the information on the korean wikipedia, and used some newspaper articles. I'm going to try and add some more information later on because I ordered his autobiography recently. But I think it has enough information for now... It's better than nothing after all, isn't it?

Junwoopark0130 (talk) 19:01, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

American Academy of Periodontology
Looking for any feedback.

Aapppsa (talk) 19:27, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

1st String
im not sure why but the article i created doesn't show the refrences i listed on the wiki page but they are there on the editing screen. Also i dont know why the picture i used isnt coming up or why none of the links to other wiki pages are working. im pretty sure it is the coding im messing up on. This is my fist article so bear with me. I appreciate any feedback. Thanks, Samantha

Sldefazio (talk) 19:38, 26 July 2011 (UTC)
 * You are off to a good start, however you need to expand this article. I have fixed the links to other wiki pages and fixed a reference. You can place references on the article by adding   after the text you want the reference on. The references will then be displayed automatically at the references section at the bottom of the page. And I tried placing the photo there but it doesn't seem to be uploaded in Wikipedia. You can upload your photo at Upload. Miguel AG (talk) 12:13, 3 August 2011 (UTC)

Nichols algebra
I would appreciate some criticism, as this is my first page!

Pacman 2.0 (talk) 20:03, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

Georges Dufayel
This is a new article. I think I have followed the rules carefully, and documented all sources. I am hoping that the article will be approved so that the message that it has not been reviewed can be removed.

Pcampsie (talk) 20:15, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Mariana_Hudecova/Boliven
I started this article a few days ago. I posted it, but it was deleted. I re-created it again, as a subpage before moving to be a full-blown article. This article describes Boliven, a patent search engine. Mariana Hudecova (talk) 20:41, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

WhistlePig Whiskey
WhistlePig Whiskey (talk) 21:16, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Celdredge/Foodily
Hi, I'd greatly appreciate any constructive feedback about how I can improve this article.

Specifically,

(a) are the citations adequate? any recommendations? (b) regarding formatting, anything that can be improved?

Thanks in advance for your help and guidance!

Best,

Chris

Chris (talk) 21:31, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Jzednem/Optotraffic
I saved a previous article about this company but got tagged as promotional and was deleted. Here is a new version that I wish to have checked upon before I publish it to make sure it does not get deleted again.

If this still isn't good enough, may I ask for suggestions as to what to write about and what not to write about so the content can get published.

Jzednem (talk) 21:31, 26 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Your article is not at all ready for the main space. Here are my suggestions:

--Lexein (talk) 22:06, 26 July 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) Your article doesn't cite any independent, reliable, sources. See WP:RS. See the instructions at the top of this page for help finding RS.
 * 2) Your article doesn't establish the company's General Notability. See WP:GNG. That is, has the company been written about by several independent, reliable, sources over a substantial period of time?
 * To add a reference, just (for now) type . We can help you clean those up later. Just get real sources in there to support the claims made in your article.
 * 1) If it only serves local interests, and has no nationwide coverage, then the company may not satisfy GNG yet.

User:WhistlePig Whiskey/WhistlePig Whiskey
I'd like to proof this page and make it acceptable for Wikipedia/visually appealing with a picture. Unfortunately, I couldn't figure out how to get the side picture up. The image I wanted to post: http://whistlepigwhiskey.com/images/whiskey1.gif

Thanks for your help guys!

WhistlePig Whiskey (talk) 21:56, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Jecherry23/Da Cruz
This is my first time making a wiki page for anyone. I would like to know if my layout is okay and if not what should a proper one look like? Da Cruz is a band that is becoming more and more famous, however there are quite a few reviews out there for them. Should I just post links to these reviews or take quotes directly from them? Also when I request to move my page to be reviewed it says I'm too new of a user. How can I get past this? Thank you.

Jecherry23 (talk) 22:17, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

Jason Apollo Voss
This is a request for feedback for the entry on author Jason Apollo Voss, who wrote the book, The Intuitive Investor: a Radical Guide for Manifesting Wealth, that challenges many conventional perceptions about investing and financial decisions, while offering a plan for readers to build proven skills that enable them to leverage “gut feelings” for better investing.

Thank you

Martinlevypr (talk) 22:27, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

User:davina27/Sharethrough
Hi, Would love some feedback on the Sharethrough article I wrote today. It can be found at davina27/Sharethrough.

This is an article page about the Sharethrough social video company, talking about their funding, some of their offerings, and some external links to some of the Sharethrough pages.

Thanks for reading and providing feedback!

Davina27 (talk) 23:38, 26 July 2011 (UTC)