Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 July 27

Feronia Inc.
207.219.37.98 (talk) 03:47, 27 July 2011 (UTC)

Code Name Deimos
I've tried to add as much details I found on the websites (I've mentioned these websites.) but I couldn't create the article in standard format. Like font, links etc. Please help me.

Boyzone kiran (talk) 05:20, 27 July 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sohail009/Vivid_imaging
Sohail009 (talk) 06:28, 27 July 2011 (UTC)


 * The article is much like an advertisement. It is written in the first person which is not used on Wikipedia, so I do suspect you may have a conflict of interest. Boldface text is to be generally avoided. Please see WP:Boldface. Also, it lacks references and it may not meet Wikipedia's notability guidelines. — Mike moral  ♪♫  05:12, 28 July 2011 (UTC)

List of Konpeki no Kantai episodes
I just moved this up to the live space and it may need some tweaking based on editor's command of Japanese. Any other questions to improve can raised on the talk page. Thanks.

Eaglestorm (talk) 13:55, 27 July 2011 (UTC)

The Little Museum of Dublin
Dubster17 (talk) 15:10, 27 July 2011 (UTC)


 * The article could be a bit more encyclopedic, i.e. it should tout the subject less. "A civic museum for the city of Dublin, it tells the story of the city in the 20th Century from a social, cultural, and political point of view" could be written as "The museum features social, cultural and political aspects of life in Dublin during the 20th century." The following sentence is a bit redundant and could be done without, or better yet be merged with the preceding sentence. The second paragraph of "The Little Museum of Dublin" should have an inline reference. The next section, "A People's Museum", could be rewritten as "The museum accepts donations and loans of 20th century artifacts from the public, especially from local Dubliners." Forgive my American spelling :). The next sentence "The civic initiative 'City of a Thousand Welcomes' is also based in The Little Museum of Dublin" needs a reference, as well as an explanation as to why the initiative is important and what it is exactly. Hope this helps. — Mike moral  ♪♫  05:36, 28 July 2011 (UTC)

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HI there. I added a page for Blottr.com to wikipedia. It was deleted. Blottr is a citizen journalism site. I don't se how i am promoting the business in any way, as i used the same model as other wikipedia pages that do similar things to us and I have used the best references online. I can understand if it comes across as self promotion but can you guide me as to how i can get this page up on wikipedia please? If you search Blottr.com on Google, our wikipedia page is the 7th hit, so we want to make sure this page exists.

Blackadder101 (talk) 15:50, 27 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Bryanpiczon/Jose de la Gandara y Navarro
need more feedback/comments on this article

Bryanpiczon (talk) 16:34, 27 July 2011 (UTC)