Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 July 6

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Orangepulp81/L._Ron_Hubbard_(author)
Hello! I have uploaded my first iteration of the L. Ron Hubbard (author) page. This page explicates and documents L. Ron Hubbard's work as science fiction author. A L. Ron Hubbard BLP already exists; but there exists no Wikipedia article acknowledging an important role he played in his life -- that of a science fiction author, hence I initiate this effort. Feedback welcome.

Orangepulp81 (talk) 00:23, 6 July 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Brian_Sheen
Here's an article on a writer/speaker/healer connected to a wide rage of national debates/issues. I think the article is up to wiki par, just wanted to make sure

GypsySpirit (talk) 03:35, 6 July 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Boodlums/Dick_Summer
This is my first article. Did I do it right? Should I flesh it out a little more or a lot more? Or should I just leave it for other fans to flesh out? Dick Summer has a voice that many people know and love, even if they don't know whose voice it is (I can't put that opinion in the article, of course). Thanks!

Walter Ian Kaye 05:05, 6 July 2011 (UTC)

UntitledHertha - that's my sister's name and I was always told it means "the strong one"
Hertha - thta's my sister's name and I was always told it means "the strong one", there is nothing on your website that says what the name means, it just refers to another name. segelkatt (address at thingy) hotmail.com

38.121.19.201 (talk) 06:06, 6 July 2011 (UTC)
 * See the Wiktionary article. In general, that's a better place to look for word meanings. German Wikipedia, however, has a fuller discussion at an article about the woman's name. Yngvadottir (talk) 06:17, 6 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Also, posting an email address lets address-harvesting bots find it to use for sending you spam. That is why I changed the one above so that people can still read it but I hope bots can't.   Sharktopus  talk  10:11, 6 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Askjayaa/myBantu
Hi,

I would want the article to be reviewed for posting. Please advise. Thanks

Jayaa

Askjayaa (talk) 08:50, 6 July 2011 (UTC)


 * The article reads too much like a press release about the company right now. This is a very common and fixable fault in a new article about a commercial product, because when something is new so much of what is written about it has been written by the company. Fortunately, Google shows up some mentions of it in the press (e.g. http://www.livemint.com/2010/09/21143237/MyBantu-prescribes-social-inte.html )which establishes notability. Check out Xgrid, a "Good article" about a sofware item, to get ideas on organization and style. Not that you need to write something that long of course!   Sharktopus  talk  10:27, 6 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Mvsfgs80/Marco Visconti (architect)
Hello,I've added many links to wikipedia pages.I linked this article in Italian wiki page. And in the references I've added external links.What should I change/add still? Thank you Mvsfgs80

Mvsfgs80 (talk) 09:54, 6 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Please take a look at Wikipedia article Frank Gehry, also about a contemporary architect. You have collected a lot of interesting material but the result looks more like a personal webpage than an encyclopedia article. The first thing you need to fix is that the article's statements need to be referenced to reliable sources where readers can check those facts. Check out WP:REF for how to do this.   Sharktopus  talk  10:35, 6 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Artestani13/ECancermedicalscience
Hello, I am constructing a page for European Institue of Oncology's medical journal. I attempted this a short while ago, but seemed to have run into a few problems with copyright. I wanted to confirm that the site was being constructed and sited properly.

Artestani13 (talk) 10:27, 6 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Rodwinoloresisimo/Albert_Zambrano
Dear Wiki Editors/Administrators,

Hello! This is my first article and I request for some feedback from you guys. I know so much improvement is needed so kindly share with me your invaluable insights/suggestions. Thanks!

Rodwin Oloresisimo

Rodwinoloresisimo (talk) 11:29, 6 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Have replied, as well as done some edits of my own - please see the talk page for my reply. Quinxorin (talk) 05:24, 10 July 2011 (UTC)

Urania Trust
This is a small entry but my first attempt to create a page on WP, so I would appreciate any review comments or constructive criticisms. Thanks! Zac Δ talk   13:33, 6 July 2011 (UTC)

Saam Acupuncture
Saam Acupuncture also known as the Korean Four Needle technique is one of the most famous acupuncture techniques used in Korea today. Created from the works of Master Saam a high monk of the 15th century, Saam acupuncture was revived and reinterpreted in the 1980's. It uses five element theory and either a tonification (Jungguk) or sedation (sengguk) of an element as the primary basis of treatment.

Master Saam (talk) 14:42, 6 July 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Michelleb108/Trover
Michelleb108 (talk) 19:12, 6 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Rtvintern123/Rock the Vote: Democracy Class
Rtvintern123 (talk) 19:45, 6 July 2011 (UTC)