Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 June 12

Brian Muir (sculptor)
Request review.

SpeakFree (talk) 00:50, 12 June 2011 (UTC)

Kyle Mosher New Article seeking feedback on gramatical errors or any other critiques.
Goodartistscopy (talk) 01:07, 12 June 2011 (UTC)

Carolyn Kreiter-Foronda. Poet Laureate of Virginia, Poet, Artist, Sculptor and Educator. Click this to go to site>> []
Seeking review of this article. Comments on citations, flow of article, location of links, missing information, etc. Are there any questions you have after reading through this work? thank you. ~ijil RHG

Ijil RHG (talk) 04:00, 12 June 2011 (UTC)

User:Wenhuaxiao/Huang Jiguang
I have created a new page which content the Martyr Huang Jiguang's information. seeking feedback gramatical errors or any other critiques.

Wenhuaxiao (talk) 05:17, 12 June 2011 (UTC)

Shonenji_Temple,_Takachiho
I've just got my first article to a point where I think it's ready for publication. Would someone be willing to review it for me and let know what further work might be needed? Thank you! ~Damian

I would like to see more history through the years since 1500s to show secession and what the temple has done for the local people. Also maybe a map to show better its location. The photos are very nice, sharp and clear. In footnotes instead of 'telling' us this building is notable the citations and material presented will show why it is notable. These could be written better to give the details to prove notability rather than telling us what you want us to think. imho... ~ijilRHG

Djay49 (talk) 05:30, 12 June 2011 (UTC)

Thanks to Ijil_RHG for review and helpful suggestions! Djay49 (talk) 06:49, 24 June 2011 (UTC)

User:Myleskelly/Hubert Dunsterville Harvey-Kelly
This article is on the first world war pilot HD Harvey-Kelly who was the first pilot to land in France in the war, There is a plaque in the main hall of the Imperial War Museum to this, and the first RFC pilot to down an enemy aircraft in action. He was shot down and killed in 1917 be Von Richthofen's unit.

There are many book references to him, but very few on the Web

Myleskelly (talk) 09:16, 12 June 2011 (UTC)

dinosaur zoo
Request for a review of dinosaur zoo for correct layout, referencing, tagging and any other aspects

Dotname2469 (talk) 12:37, 12 June 2011 (UTC)

TonyGemail/RolandMuldoon [
I am first time Wki user and this is my first page. Is it OK to go ahead I am compiling this wiki to highlight the life and times of Roland Muldoon, Theatre impressario/producer/director/writer and all round Socialist activist. Any comments on content, formatting etc welcome.

TonyGemail (talk) 12:39, 12 June 2011 (UTC)

Untitled
Can we add a wikipedia entry for a creative invention by a child. My son has invented a creature and it is huge at his school. Can someone help me get an unofficial entry created? We have a draftbut nothing seems to be happening. Thanks.

>> please add the URL so the site can be reviewed. ~ijilRHG >> Clicking your title line does not take me to your page. And please give this article a title; untitled does not work.

Alicedesousastewart (talk) 17:01, 12 June 2011 (UTC)

The_Master_Game
I have just posted my first article to mainspace. Any feedback that can help me improve it would be welcome.

Pokeround (talk) 18:31, 12 June 2011 (UTC)

Stay Tooned! (TV show)
Im not sure why it needs a review but can someone review it? >> please add the URL so the site can be reviewed. ~ijilRHG >> Clicking your title line does not take me to your page.

Crazyseiko (talk) 18:49, 12 June 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Matt_Kohler
I'm seeking some editing on this wiki page. Your contributions and revisions are greatly appreciated.

this page needs many more references and citations. it is uninteresting. not written as an encyclopedia entry, opinion rather than facts. ~ijilRHG

Mattkohler (talk) 21:20, 12 June 2011 (UTC)

Beth Cujé
Is this article sufficient enough to go live?

>> please add the URL so the site can be reviewed. ~ijilRHG >> Clicking your title line does not take me to your page.

Annawojcik (talk) 23:00, 12 June 2011 (UTC)

Games of Texas page created. First created page, so I could use some help with properly citing, more sources, etc.
Definitely a notable event, as it has over 7,000 participants each year and has been held since 1984. AndLibertyForAll (talk) 23:27, 12 June 2011 (UTC)

interactional view overview article-- general review desired
147.226.165.4 (talk) 15:11, 14 June 2011 (UTC)

Stay Tooned! (TV show)
I would like a review of this page, I not much but there still plenty of people know of the show Stay Tooned! (TV show) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Crazyseiko (talk • contribs) 18:47, 12 June 2011
 * I have reviewed the article. My comments are located on its talk page. Quinxorin (talk) 01:34, 9 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Originally posted here  Chzz  ► 12:39, 8 August 2011 (UTC)