Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 June 13

User:Jollycookritt/Dog Powered Robot
Hi, I have drafted my first article and would like someone to review to ensure I have listed all sections completely and listed all verifiable sources in the proper format. Requesting assistance to review overall article set-up and proper attribution of quote Can someone please assist? Thank you in advance.

Jollycookritt (talk) 02:59, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Robertablake/Alliance_Rubber_Company
Let me know if we need any more sources for our article. Also we have a company timeline if that would be helpful. Thanks in advance.

Robertablake (talk) 05:09, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

User:Hxrayzhu/Hubcase
Please review this new article

Hxrayzhu (talk) 05:13, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

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If anybody would like to edit it (such as add details or pictures) to make it better, that'd be great. Thanks for the help. :)

だびど (talk) 06:47, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dankelly83/Hillarys_Blinds
Please review this new article, & if its ok could someone could help me move it to the live section that would be great, Thanks :)

Dankelly83 (talk) 08:10, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

User:Gbgsimulationjon/EcoProIT
Gbgsimulationjon (talk) 08:39, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

User:Weum2004/Battle of Fort Walker
Please review article and if it is good please tell me how to move it to the live section

Weum2004 (talk) 10:33, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

José_Luis_Abadín Would appreciate feedback thanks!
Mantolwen (talk) 11:17, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

OpusPoint_Partners
Hi, I've just created a new stub-page OpusPoint_Partners. Any comments are welcome. Thanks.

SkNs (talk) 12:37, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

User:Anie zanazanian/Yervant Zanazanian
Why is my contribution not showing on WIKIPEDIA ? I wrote it on 7th June about Yervant Zanazanian, it is NOT showing when I call up his name in google, wikipedia etc ?

Anie zanazanian (talk) 13:23, 13 June 2011 (UTC)


 * It is at User:Anie zanazanian/Yervant Zanazanian, not Anie zanazanian/Yervant Zanazanian. I've changed your link above to reflect this.  — Tommyjb   Talk!  (13:36, 13 June 2011)

EcoProIT
Gbgsimulationjon (talk) 14:25, 13 June 2011 (UTC)


 * Sorry, but not appropriate. WP:Wikipedia is not a crystal ball. Wait until the subject is actually covered by some reliable independent sources, and then try it. Advertising is not allowed. W Nowicki (talk) 00:25, 14 June 2011 (UTC)

Pittsburgh Botanic Garden
First time and confused! Organization changed name so created article to reflect and update info. How do I "move" it? Does someone out there need to review? Thanks!

PittsburghBot (talk) 15:02, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

User:Rla222/Hilary Thayer Hamann
Author Hilary Thayer Hamann asked me to create a wiki page for her and I need it to go live ASAP because she would like it to coincide with this month's paperback release of her book. This is my second request for feedback so it would be great if someone could offer some advice this time to ensure that the page is not deleted after it goes live. Thank you!

Rla222 (talk) 15:40, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

Salvo combat model
This Salvo combat model is my first article. I would welcome feedback for improving it.

Armstrongmj (talk) 16:10, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

Dani_Thompson
This my first article and I would appreciate some feedback on how it reads, if it has the right tone, would it sound better if some parts were rewritten, or even removed? My other concern is sources, I have tried to find as many as I can but I obtained some of the information when I spoke to the subject recently and have been unable to find evidence for everything. I am hoping someone who has had contact with the subject will be able to add something relevant.

M mcgeorge (talk) 18:26, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

User:Drewheriot/Scott_Ross
Hi, this is my first wiki article and I'd really appreciate some feedback from a veteran! Thanks so much.

Drewheriot (talk) 18:39, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

Studyplaces
I have completed my first wikipedia article on Studyplaces.com. There is still a banner stating it is an unreviewed article, and I am worried the page will be deleted. Edits would be greatly appreciated and I look forward to much constructive criticism.

Jpendergast (talk) 20:16, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

User:Lou.garay/Squeaky Wheel Media
Hello world of fellow Wiki-editors. I appreciate all of your feedback and have made changes to the above article according to said feedback. I believe it is complete but any and all further feed back is greatly appreciated. Thank you.

Lou.garay (talk) 20:42, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

Diploma in Practical Dermatology (DPD) This is my first contribution.
There are numerous doctors worldwide who have gained this qualification. The public may be misled into thinking that this is evidence of specialist accreditation. It is evidence of study in Dermatology at a higher level than usual for non-specialists.

I have a conflict of interest in that I have the DPD and am preparing my MSc dissertation.

I would be grateful for any comments from more experienced contributers

Dr Paul Aspinall (talk) 21:25, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

User:Frontofthecanoe/Wickaninnish Inn
Hello all: I would truly appreciate any and all feedback for this page. Thank-you in advance!

Frontofthecanoe (talk) 21:38, 13 June 2011 (UTC)