Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 June 14

http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Treatthepain/Enter_your_new_article_name_here&action=edit
Treatthepain (talk) 06:07, 14 June 2011 (UTC)

User:Σ/BYM
My second attempt at being useful (writing something).

-- The Σ talkcontribs 06:13, 14 June 2011 (UTC)


 * Hi, I just posted my article ZenQuest Martial Arts Center on here, and I thought I would help someone since I'm asking for help.
 * I'll start with the positives first. Very well written article, I was able to understand everything perfectly! And I have seen some really, really bad articles, so bad in fact that I don't even know how to fix them, as they are pretty much unintelligible. So again, good job! The formatting is well done, and it has appropriate wikilinks, which means I won't be seeing it on Wikiproject Wikify (which makes me very happy!) And it seems to meet basic notability concerns, which is good.


 * Now for the negatives: The first three paragraphs in the "gameplay" section start with "players..." Maybe use different wording to avoid being redundant? And watch the word "utilise" in the "resources" section, it might read easier if you just say "use" instead. Now, about sources (surprised?): You have some good coverage by reliable gaming sites, but maybe sprinkle citations for them throughout the gameplay part of the article, not just the critical reception part. And my other question is: Is Unigamecity reliable? I had trouble telling from the "About Us" section of the website. On the whole, one or two more sources would be good, but what you have now is fine.


 * Overall, a good start-up article. Nice job!--3family6 (talk) 13:59, 14 June 2011 (UTC)

Untitled
Page is now edited (offending data removed; body of copy shortened considerably. Editor's attention and comments are very much appreciated.  I read the info on writing First Article, but I am still unsure about the body of the copy.  Please edit, I really want to comply.  I think Wikipedia is an extraordinarily cool website and tool!

Rudykazoo (talk) 06:59, 14 June 2011 (UTC)


 * I presume you mean User:Rudykazoo/Gary_Parker_(artist).


 * You haven't demonstrated that this person is notable enough for Wikipedia. Please see Notability (people).


 * Also, one shouldn't sign articles with ~ . That's for discussion pages only.


 * — Tommyjb  Talk!  (07:45, 14 June 2011)

User:Mennovs/Enterprise Dynamics
I would like to know if the article is ready to go online (if its notable enough etc.)

Mennovs (talk) 09:53, 14 June 2011 (UTC)

User:DrSidar/Mebo Ointment
I need to know how I can post my page up. It is still in underspace and I don't have a move option available.

DrSidar (talk) 12:20, 14 June 2011 (UTC)

ZenQuest Martial Arts Center
I just created this article last night. It should have significant local coverage, but please let me know. Any other thoughts would be appreciated. Thanks, 3family6 (talk) 13:37, 14 June 2011 (UTC)


 * Thanks for reviewing mine. I tagged your article as needing more categories, and my only concern is that when I read the "Owner's qualifications" it makes me feel that the intent of that section is to show how much better that school is to others. -- The Σ talkcontribs 21:48, 14 June 2011 (UTC)

Clinical Care Classification System
This article covers a nursing terminology previously unmentioned in Wikipedia. The terminology is in use throoughout the world. I need to have it reviewed so I can remove the 'new article' block.

RoySoltoff (talk) 14:28, 14 June 2011 (UTC)

Ginger Software
This page describes a product called Ginger Software. It's a revolutioary spelling and grammar checker. This is my first time on wiki so would appreciate the feedback.

S givon (talk) 15:02, 14 June 2011 (UTC)
 * Generally advertising is not allowed on Wikipedia. I would suggest to move it back into your user sandbox and wait until there is enough notability by independent sources. Do they actually say it is "revolutioary" [sic]? W Nowicki (talk) 17:18, 14 June 2011 (UTC)

Parker Poe Adams & Bernstein LLP
Parkerpoe (talk) 17:49, 14 June 2011 (UTC)

User:Filtrate/Suzy Lake
Looking for feedback on this post. How do I get the Orphan tag removed? Any comments are much appreciated. Thanks!

Filtrate (talk) 18:38, 14 June 2011 (UTC)

Flat Classroom Project
Akh003 (talk) 20:30, 14 June 2011 (UTC)

Convair NB-36
I want to know if people think my article, Convair NB-36, is good. And can somebody tell me how to adjust the quality scale to something such as C-class or Start-class for it?

WilliamBrain (talk) 22:24, 14 June 2011 (UTC)